Where Are All The Children
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Earth-Shattering News"A vigilante takes down trafficing rings.
16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very well-written story and it certainly achieves every writer's goal of wanting to make the reader want more. I will be interested to see what follows. Best wishes for Christmas and New Year.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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This is a very well-written story and it certainly achieves every writer's goal of wanting to make the reader want more. I will be interested to see what follows. Best wishes for Christmas and New Year.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for your positive review. I'm so glad the story interests you. I hope you have a happy holiday season as well.
Thank you again for your support, it always means so much to me, take care.
Comment from Mia Twysted
So heart wrenching. I am left on the edge of my seat wondering what she did with the baby. She has no many obsticles to overcome. Showing what she has been through show how she became strong.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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So heart wrenching. I am left on the edge of my seat wondering what she did with the baby. She has no many obsticles to overcome. Showing what she has been through show how she became strong.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your continued support. It always means the world to me. Anna has been through a lot now she finds herself pregnant in horrid circumstances at the ripe age of fifteen.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means the world to me, take care.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, my! What a heart wrenching story. I can understand her feelings of agony, but she cannot murder the child! Put the baby up for adoption.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Oh, my! What a heart wrenching story. I can understand her feelings of agony, but she cannot murder the child! Put the baby up for adoption.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. I do hope it didn't cause any personal grief. Anna is so torn between doing what is right and the safety, well being of her child. Of course, her old emotions coming into play, feeling isolated, alone, doesn't help. I hope the doctor will slip up and tell someone so she can get the help she needs.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Poor Anna, that is a really hard one. I do hope she can get out of the life soon so she can have her baby. I hate to think of anyone aborting, though I know it sometimes seems the only answer. Well done. Looking forward to the next.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Poor Anna, that is a really hard one. I do hope she can get out of the life soon so she can have her baby. I hate to think of anyone aborting, though I know it sometimes seems the only answer. Well done. Looking forward to the next.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for all your support. Anna has found herself in a dilemma having to choose what she knows to be right, her own desires against the child's well being. I too hope she can figure something out soon.
Thank you again for all your support, and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This issue will either flush out the "right to lifers" or grieving from those who can identify with a similar choice. This would be a good topic for an ambitious discussion or debate. You are to be commended for your courage.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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This issue will either flush out the "right to lifers" or grieving from those who can identify with a similar choice. This would be a good topic for an ambitious discussion or debate. You are to be commended for your courage.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and all your support. It's always greatly appreciated. I'm pro choice because of situations like this. Especially when adoption isn't an option, knowing what'll happen if abortions are illegal again. It's up to Anna to decide, I'm just her typist. So I've been told, lol.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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You are right about what would happen if abortions are illegal again. Probably most don't remember the horror stories about back alley abortions.
I finished watching the tv show. It looks like they'll have more episodes. I make us want to watch more...that's for sure.
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a situation to be in. Stuck between ecstasy and misery, not knowing which way to turn, or what the outcome might be. But the wrong choice can be forever. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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What a situation to be in. Stuck between ecstasy and misery, not knowing which way to turn, or what the outcome might be. But the wrong choice can be forever. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter and for such beautiful stars. Poor Anna is in a heck of a mess. I just hope she'll talk to someone before she does something she'll regret.
Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship and encouragement. It always means so much to me, take care.
Comment from Allezw2
There was a time of the scarlet letter and community shunning for an out of wedlock child, Though innocent of the parent's sin, still burdened with the consequences of the mother's fall from grace. One only has to remember the terrible vengeance the Norwegian government meted out to its women and their children of war after WWII.
An enlightened society cares for these in error and supports the children.
Your writing exhibits the casual air of the uninvolved. "...the lord will provide for us, somehow."
Not a tale of hope, rather one of the helplessness and regret.
Nicely done. Live long and write well,
Fantasist
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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There was a time of the scarlet letter and community shunning for an out of wedlock child, Though innocent of the parent's sin, still burdened with the consequences of the mother's fall from grace. One only has to remember the terrible vengeance the Norwegian government meted out to its women and their children of war after WWII.
An enlightened society cares for these in error and supports the children.
Your writing exhibits the casual air of the uninvolved. "...the lord will provide for us, somehow."
Not a tale of hope, rather one of the helplessness and regret.
Nicely done. Live long and write well,
Fantasist
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for such an encouraging review and for comparing this story to such an unforgettable classic. Poor Anna has had a horrid life, being trafficked victim since she was ten. Now she has to give up what she loves, so it won't have to encounter the same fate.
Thank you again reading my chapter and for your magnificent praise. You definitely made my week, take care.
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You are quite welcome. Fantasist
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is a very powerful chapter. I enjoyed reading it.
This sentence stands out though, as a bit awkward and grammatically incorrect: "...I picture Alejandro, and I lovemaking in my mind how careful we always are." - I picture Alejandro and me making love, how careful we always are.
And this small typo: "Most claims it's the only thing..."
You are a very talented writer and I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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This is a very powerful chapter. I enjoyed reading it.
This sentence stands out though, as a bit awkward and grammatically incorrect: "...I picture Alejandro, and I lovemaking in my mind how careful we always are." - I picture Alejandro and me making love, how careful we always are.
And this small typo: "Most claims it's the only thing..."
You are a very talented writer and I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review, and for catching my mistakes. Your kind praise made my week. Anna's was trafficked at the ripe old age of ten. Her life has been an uphill battle since.
Thank you again for reading my chapter your kind praise and such a marvelous review. Your support means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mistydawn.
The suspense in the story concerning pregnancy was written very well. The characterizations of those involved and the dialogue is quite good.
It's a twist in the story that adds depth and interest.
There are some changes you may want to consider:
so thick, so still (add a comma after still.)
I picture Alejandro, and I (change I to my) lovemaking in my mind
god (capitalize G)
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Hello Mistydawn.
The suspense in the story concerning pregnancy was written very well. The characterizations of those involved and the dialogue is quite good.
It's a twist in the story that adds depth and interest.
There are some changes you may want to consider:
so thick, so still (add a comma after still.)
I picture Alejandro, and I (change I to my) lovemaking in my mind
god (capitalize G)
Robert
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for such warm, encouraging words and for catching my mistakes. Anna has been through a lot trafficked at 10, pregnant at fifteen. Being an illegal on a compound makes the situation a million times worse.
Thank you again for all your help, support, encouragement and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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You're welcome
Comment from Gert sherwood
Missydawn
this chapter ( Earth-Shattering News) in your book
Where Are All The Children. I found very emontial, and well told about Ann finding out that she is pregnant and recalls her nightmares.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Missydawn
this chapter ( Earth-Shattering News) in your book
Where Are All The Children. I found very emontial, and well told about Ann finding out that she is pregnant and recalls her nightmares.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my chapter. I'm so glad you could feel the emotions, the heartache that Anna is going through. Poor Anna's life has been an uphill battle the majority of her life. Being kidnapped, trafficked and now this, pregnant at 15 while living in a very hostile environment.
Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship and encouragement. It always means the world to me, take care.
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You are most welcome Mistydawn
Gert