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Comment from Y. M. Roger
A perfect fit for Hamlet! ;) A fun one-man script here, Iza! ;) Thanx for sharing those grins, my lady, and I look forward to the continuation... ;) Yvette
need for once to let go of your principles --> need to let go of your principles for once
Then, you freaking, do --> Then you freaking do
know what's my name. --> know my own name. [suggestion here...]
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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A perfect fit for Hamlet! ;) A fun one-man script here, Iza! ;) Thanx for sharing those grins, my lady, and I look forward to the continuation... ;) Yvette
need for once to let go of your principles --> need to let go of your principles for once
Then, you freaking, do --> Then you freaking do
know what's my name. --> know my own name. [suggestion here...]
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much and please forgive me for my delay.
Comment from robyn corum
Iza,
Good answer! Looks like, between the two of them, they got it figured out! hahaha
Fun piece -
I have a couple of notes - you are welcome to use or toss, of course:
1.) The scene represents one empty room. This is scene has only one actor that plays the two characters.
--> delete 'is' in the second line - but also consider the following edit: (or similar)
--> The setting is one empty room. There is only one actor who plays both characters.
2.) Evil Me: Listen up, hok(e)y-pok(e)y(,) you need for once
3.) Me: Then, you freaking, do it!
--> no commas
4.) Evil Me: So, everybody else, buddy!
--> Evil Me: (Same as) everybody else, buddy!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Iza,
Good answer! Looks like, between the two of them, they got it figured out! hahaha
Fun piece -
I have a couple of notes - you are welcome to use or toss, of course:
1.) The scene represents one empty room. This is scene has only one actor that plays the two characters.
--> delete 'is' in the second line - but also consider the following edit: (or similar)
--> The setting is one empty room. There is only one actor who plays both characters.
2.) Evil Me: Listen up, hok(e)y-pok(e)y(,) you need for once
3.) Me: Then, you freaking, do it!
--> no commas
4.) Evil Me: So, everybody else, buddy!
--> Evil Me: (Same as) everybody else, buddy!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much Robin and so sorry for my delay
Comment from judiverse
That's an interesting strategy to have one character playing two roles. Poor "Me" doesn't think he's qualified to play Hamlet, but there are bills to pay, and an actor has to keep working. With "Evil" it's not about principles, but how you're going to pay the rent. "Evil" is apparently going to take over and play Hamlet. At least he has the confidence. This is great. People do have these inner conflicts when they have an important undertaking coming up. Easy to follow the script the way you've presented it. It would be a fun undertaking for an actor to play Me and Evil Me. judi
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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That's an interesting strategy to have one character playing two roles. Poor "Me" doesn't think he's qualified to play Hamlet, but there are bills to pay, and an actor has to keep working. With "Evil" it's not about principles, but how you're going to pay the rent. "Evil" is apparently going to take over and play Hamlet. At least he has the confidence. This is great. People do have these inner conflicts when they have an important undertaking coming up. Easy to follow the script the way you've presented it. It would be a fun undertaking for an actor to play Me and Evil Me. judi
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Coming from you this review it;s a real honor:) You are the Master of this type of writing:) because you have the best scripts on this site.
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You're very welcome. I'm so glad you're writing scripts, and I'll be interested to see how you continue with this one. You certainly have a great idea. I think a lot of us have those debates with ourselves! judi
Comment from w.j.debi
You set up an interesting premise. Will it be Me or Evil Me that plays the part of Hamlet? First, the actor must get the part. Then the internal struggle is going to be fun to watch.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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You set up an interesting premise. Will it be Me or Evil Me that plays the part of Hamlet? First, the actor must get the part. Then the internal struggle is going to be fun to watch.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support on this piece, and the second up is up and running:) if you want to check it out.
Comment from amada
This is a very originaol write. I like it, it kept me in suspense, I think I have an Evil ne as well. I like this line a lot, "Evil Me: I cannot! I am alive because you need somebody to complain to."
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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This is a very originaol write. I like it, it kept me in suspense, I think I have an Evil ne as well. I like this line a lot, "Evil Me: I cannot! I am alive because you need somebody to complain to."
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support on this piece, and the second up is up and running:) if you want to check it out.
Comment from estory
Interesting choice of character there, in Hamlet. Suicide is the end of that play. It really speaks of the difficulties in navigating the demands of life around us. Nice sharp dialogue estory
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Interesting choice of character there, in Hamlet. Suicide is the end of that play. It really speaks of the difficulties in navigating the demands of life around us. Nice sharp dialogue estory
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support on this piece, and the second up is up and running:) if you want to check it out.
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi Iza
I really like the interplay between your good and evil side.
For me it expresses the depths actors have reach to be able to play so many different characters. I guess it is the art/essence of acting.
I'm intrigued as to where your story will go next. If you like you can message me and let me know when the next part is ready.
Take care Pete
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Hi Iza
I really like the interplay between your good and evil side.
For me it expresses the depths actors have reach to be able to play so many different characters. I guess it is the art/essence of acting.
I'm intrigued as to where your story will go next. If you like you can message me and let me know when the next part is ready.
Take care Pete
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Hi Pete, thank you so much for your support on this piece, and the second up is up and running:) if you want to check it out.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly clever--you vs your dark side in a battle of wits--snappy and snarky conversation is a delight to read. I look forward to seeing these two sparring again in the next act.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Wickedly clever--you vs your dark side in a battle of wits--snappy and snarky conversation is a delight to read. I look forward to seeing these two sparring again in the next act.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support on this piece, and the second up is up and running:) if you want to check it out.
Comment from royowen
Evil you is taking the role of Hamlet, and so you should, poor Me, he should be allowed to play whatever role he wishes...by then he's a lousy actor anyway, well done Iza, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo :Man, you are such a (boar) bore?
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Evil you is taking the role of Hamlet, and so you should, poor Me, he should be allowed to play whatever role he wishes...by then he's a lousy actor anyway, well done Iza, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo :Man, you are such a (boar) bore?
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support on this piece, and the second up is up and running:) if you want to check it out.
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Well done
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. So if Evil Me and Me switch roles, how will we know the difference? Don't they look the same? But perhaps one of them will play Hamlet better. Is this a symbolic piece about work?
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Lol. So if Evil Me and Me switch roles, how will we know the difference? Don't they look the same? But perhaps one of them will play Hamlet better. Is this a symbolic piece about work?
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Could be, but we have seen lots of plays like this in Romania:) If you are curious the second part it's up and running
