Contrasts on Winter Nights
Haiku-like (against moonlit sky)5 total reviews
Comment from T.E. Loper
It may just be that I've been paying too much attention to the news during these days of isolation, but this connected with me on a current events level. President elect Joe Biden referred to these times as "a dark winter."
Your 'ku is contemplative, and it has that wonderful poetic quality of making a universal connection, which may be different (but just as valid) for each reader. All that to say, I really like this!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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It may just be that I've been paying too much attention to the news during these days of isolation, but this connected with me on a current events level. President elect Joe Biden referred to these times as "a dark winter."
Your 'ku is contemplative, and it has that wonderful poetic quality of making a universal connection, which may be different (but just as valid) for each reader. All that to say, I really like this!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Thank T.E. for your support and confidence in my 5-7-5 posting. In composing this verse, I had not made your Biden leap. However, it is most valid and another way to consider my dark shadows.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a unique vision... this one stands out in the contest!! ;) :) What a great offering for the winter contest -- thanx for sharing and best of luck to you at the polls this evening! ;) :)
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Such a unique vision... this one stands out in the contest!! ;) :) What a great offering for the winter contest -- thanx for sharing and best of luck to you at the polls this evening! ;) :)
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Thanks Yvette for your review and vote of support for this poem.
Comment from tempeste
your poem is worthy of the red ribbon..
The contrast between the peaceful surroundings created by the soft white blanket of snow and the black scary figures that appear above( birds in the sky) and below ( their shadows on the white snow) is what makes your poem so compelling.
Your poem about bird of prey made me think of when we saved a ....corvo .... once ..
Our house by the lake was perched on a slope and there was a winding stair case going down to our courtyard and two garages .. which was besides the main road to go to Stresa. .... we had a big green iron gate.
It was dusk and I rushed down to close one of the garage doors . I heard a noise like shoes scuffling .. it spooked me out at first but then I saw it was a corvo and it was dragging a wing
I flew up the stairs( more than 100 steps but I was only in my early 20s then) and my father came down with a cheap blanket ( one we used to cover the pets beds with ) and caught it.
We placed him in Lolita's extra cage she used to sleep on top of during the day ..
We went to the vet the next day and he rigged up his wing ( it was damaged but it could mend)
Well we called him George ( pronounced as if a Russia was saying it).
He stayed with us for nearly 5 weeks .. we feed it fish, Lolita's live mealworms and raw meat ( Abdullah our Afghan ate steak , diced and cook in fry pan) so we always had for George too.
Once he grabbed my finger .. that hurt (but he could have really damaged it but he didn't) ...
he loved to soil the newspapers as soon as I replace them .. he tolerated us because he knew he needed the help
After we freed him he would fly over our house often .. he even brought his offspring for us to see .. it was his way of thanking us .
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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your poem is worthy of the red ribbon..
The contrast between the peaceful surroundings created by the soft white blanket of snow and the black scary figures that appear above( birds in the sky) and below ( their shadows on the white snow) is what makes your poem so compelling.
Your poem about bird of prey made me think of when we saved a ....corvo .... once ..
Our house by the lake was perched on a slope and there was a winding stair case going down to our courtyard and two garages .. which was besides the main road to go to Stresa. .... we had a big green iron gate.
It was dusk and I rushed down to close one of the garage doors . I heard a noise like shoes scuffling .. it spooked me out at first but then I saw it was a corvo and it was dragging a wing
I flew up the stairs( more than 100 steps but I was only in my early 20s then) and my father came down with a cheap blanket ( one we used to cover the pets beds with ) and caught it.
We placed him in Lolita's extra cage she used to sleep on top of during the day ..
We went to the vet the next day and he rigged up his wing ( it was damaged but it could mend)
Well we called him George ( pronounced as if a Russia was saying it).
He stayed with us for nearly 5 weeks .. we feed it fish, Lolita's live mealworms and raw meat ( Abdullah our Afghan ate steak , diced and cook in fry pan) so we always had for George too.
Once he grabbed my finger .. that hurt (but he could have really damaged it but he didn't) ...
he loved to soil the newspapers as soon as I replace them .. he tolerated us because he knew he needed the help
After we freed him he would fly over our house often .. he even brought his offspring for us to see .. it was his way of thanking us .
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Ciao Tempeste!
You penned a terrific story in YOUR comments for MY poem. Do consider writing about the same for a future FS contest. It is a heart-warming history you ?captured.? Abdullah, the Afghan - what a great alliterative name! For Abdullah, possibly you have the idea for a limerick, which I have no creativity to explore.
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I gave you your first well deserved vote!
If members vote honestly ( for merit) you should win the red ribbon!
Ciao!
Comment from Debbie Pope
I think that I just read the winner of this contest. I like the juxtaposition of the moonlight and the shadows, of sky and snow, ominous birds of prey and peaceful snow.
Your word choices create an eerie mood. You describe that photo in a simple but moving way.
Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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I think that I just read the winner of this contest. I like the juxtaposition of the moonlight and the shadows, of sky and snow, ominous birds of prey and peaceful snow.
Your word choices create an eerie mood. You describe that photo in a simple but moving way.
Well done.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Debbie,
Let?s see if your prognosis becomes reality. So pleased you saw the nuances in my contest entry. I do use Cleo?s artwork frequently to complement my poems. Truthfully, my poems come first, but Cleo does not disappoint me.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is an excellent entry for the Beauty of Winter writing prompt contest. It appears to have been inspired by the striking picture. The words are well chosen and fit the required format.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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This is an excellent entry for the Beauty of Winter writing prompt contest. It appears to have been inspired by the striking picture. The words are well chosen and fit the required format.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Sorry, but my poem inspired the choice of my selected artwork (-; But, I do use cleo85 to complement many of my 5-7-5s.
Thanks for your review and vote of confidence.
