Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Cleansing Blood Spilt in Anger"multi-author book number two
13 total reviews
Comment from ESOSTINE
The renga poem passed a volume of message in just few words. i found the use of the blood-looking red flowers on waters to portray the end of wars. Thanks for your insight!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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The renga poem passed a volume of message in just few words. i found the use of the blood-looking red flowers on waters to portray the end of wars. Thanks for your insight!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you got so much out of this short poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 7/7 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book about the flowers seem to stain the stream to look like red blood fleeing away the war zone.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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A very well-written 7/7 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book about the flowers seem to stain the stream to look like red blood fleeing away the war zone.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you for this fine review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The image is so scary, but I must admit reality can't be always pink and with flowers:"Vivid flowers race in beck
Fleeing war and death, hold stain" Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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The image is so scary, but I must admit reality can't be always pink and with flowers:"Vivid flowers race in beck
Fleeing war and death, hold stain" Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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and thank you for reviewing
Comment from Bill Schott
This couplet for the renga, Cleansed Blood Spilled in Anger, follows well from the previous haiku and allows the reader to feel both awe and regret for the immensity of battle and loss.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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This couplet for the renga, Cleansed Blood Spilled in Anger, follows well from the previous haiku and allows the reader to feel both awe and regret for the immensity of battle and loss.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reviewing, and for your insightful opinion.
Comment from karenina
Good job! What a shocking photo you had to work with! You did it justice with your couplet which is heavy with the gravity of war, while staying true to the image! --Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Good job! What a shocking photo you had to work with! You did it justice with your couplet which is heavy with the gravity of war, while staying true to the image! --Karenina
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for such an insightful review. It was me that chose the photo to match what I wrote (that's the way this book goes).
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Seriously? I didn't realize! IN that case you are a bloody genius!--Karenina
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Thank you, but not really. Long way to go yet.
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You're so much more talented than you think!--Karenina
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think this word is also dutch Katherine! Ha ha ha, a stream reminding us of blood as flowers flee from death, this sounds a bit frightening, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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I think this word is also dutch Katherine! Ha ha ha, a stream reminding us of blood as flowers flee from death, this sounds a bit frightening, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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I didn't have time to do a word search (it was stressful to me posting to a sructured multi-author book like that). Otherwise, yes it is a bit traumatic for the book perhaps. The thought keeps flitting through my mind "what link did the next writer take up? but I haven't been to see yet
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
I appreciate the detail in this short piece. the image of leaving a stain is very powerful. Love the red type script and the river which is quite haunting.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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I appreciate the detail in this short piece. the image of leaving a stain is very powerful. Love the red type script and the river which is quite haunting.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hello Shauna,
I was quite shocked by the red river to start with, I was expecting to see indivijdual flower petals on my search, but it's growing on me. Now I'm just interested to see how this will 'inspire' someone.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Stunning segue to the preceding! Vivid and startling.
Suggestion (pass on to Gypsy, etc.) in upper case, above existing renga notes, advise reader to scroll to top of screen and click (blue) prior# i.e. "General Poetry posted ... Chapters ... #, prior#, current#) to toggle to view poem preceding poem.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Stunning segue to the preceding! Vivid and startling.
Suggestion (pass on to Gypsy, etc.) in upper case, above existing renga notes, advise reader to scroll to top of screen and click (blue) prior# i.e. "General Poetry posted ... Chapters ... #, prior#, current#) to toggle to view poem preceding poem.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reviewing, Liz
Comment from Gloria ....
What an amazing addition to the Renga book. You have opened many new avenues of exploration with the theme. The red river is stunning, albeit a little unusual and linking it to war is a stroke of genius.
Very nicely done.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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What an amazing addition to the Renga book. You have opened many new avenues of exploration with the theme. The red river is stunning, albeit a little unusual and linking it to war is a stroke of genius.
Very nicely done.
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Hello Gloria,
Thank you for this wonderful review. It was the other way around, my thoughts on war came first, prompted by Gypsy's outstanding poem that precedes this one.
Love Katherine
Comment from lyenochka
That's quite the dramatic picture! What caused the blood red "beck"? Is it really flowers? Your title is intriguing, and the poem speaks to me of how Nature cleanses after the human messes of war.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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That's quite the dramatic picture! What caused the blood red "beck"? Is it really flowers? Your title is intriguing, and the poem speaks to me of how Nature cleanses after the human messes of war.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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In the picture yes I think flowers, thats what I searched for (but it could be a blush of algae in hot weather - didn't really have time to go into it as I was a bit nervous of adding to such a structured multi-author book).
In my mind it's all more murky. You can make crysanthemum/daisy flowers colour by adding chemicals to the water in the vase - so I thought and what if you could make them red with blood, and they soaked up the blood and trapped it like those machine wash aids do to stop different fabrics staining each other
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It's quite possible. Thanks for the background info!