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Renga Two

Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Warriors' Silent Tears"
multi-author book number two

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Comment from Mark Schardine
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stream through battleground
holds warriors' silent tears --
blood red mums grow wild

An old battlefield still show signs of the violence, not only physical relics, but also haunting phenomena that call to mind the lives lost.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much
Comment from Lance S. Loria
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Powerful images and symbolism in this post. I read it several times and seemed to get more meaning from it each time. Excellent work. No edits or adjustments necessary. Where did you get that art from...or did you have to create that image for your poem? Wonderful. I have not been around for several months so it's nice to be back and read your work.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
    Hello, Lance,

    Welcome back :). I get most of my pictures from deviantart.com. for this one I searched for 'surreal' pictures. Then I have a black background with light font. Most of my backgrounds are black, it makes the pictures pop.

    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Hugs,

    Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

Your Deviantart.com illustration is most interesting addition to your verse.

Stream and tears are nicely paired. Was unaware of mums meaning in Spain, so your red mums add to feeling expressed in your Renga contribution.

Mark

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you, Mark :)
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
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Your poetry and your presentations are always such a feast for the eyes. There is a lyrical yet edgy quality to your work which really lifts it to an original place.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much :) Happy weekend!
Comment from Wendy G
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Indeed beautiful, but also sad, expressing the results of war, which never achieves its aims without huge loss, if at all. I like the image of the stream consisting of their tears which nourish the blood red mums, signifying loss, but also rebirth into new life nourished by the stream of tears. Very well written.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much :) Happy weekend!

    hugs,
    gypsy
Comment from Teri7
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and well written Renga 5-7-5 poem you have penned. You always use such great descriptive words and lovely imagery from the art work you choose. Thank you for sharing. love, Teri

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much :) Happy weekend!

    hugs,
    gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
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Ah, just now I see what inspired Katherine's couplets. Yeesh. I guess it helps if a person reviews them in order, yes? lol

Beautiful presentation and a fine haiku. I love chrysanthemums and the battle of nature is brilliant.

Much enjoyed this one, Gypsy. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much, Gloria, I appreciate it. Hugs,

    Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
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I just read Katherine's poem and now I see the inspiration for her 7/7. Vividly and eloquently stated, and I like how you show mankind's actions has an impact on Nature.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much, Helen, I appreciate it. Hugs,

    Gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This is truly outstanding. It is an extremely creative poem, that has prompted me to add to the book. Now I just have to work out the logistics of it... could prove tricky

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
    Thank you very much, Katherine, I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars, you are very kind. I am happy that you added a chapter.

    hugs,
    gypsy
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 03-Dec-2020
    It was well-deserved. I loved your chapter, and my 'partner' to it is now available to read.