The Footprints
Start the Story With These Sentences contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
Ouch! Tom learned that both curiosity killed the cat and good guys finish last. Looks like Bethany will get her chance too.
Great story and neat build up to the chomping.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Ouch! Tom learned that both curiosity killed the cat and good guys finish last. Looks like Bethany will get her chance too.
Great story and neat build up to the chomping.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Bill.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written short story about the monstrous figure in the snow that have no trouble biting a man's head off and break his body in two, what a grusome way to die.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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A very well-written short story about the monstrous figure in the snow that have no trouble biting a man's head off and break his body in two, what a grusome way to die.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Sandra.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A frightening story and a vivid description of what happened to poor Tom and the next victim is about to follow in the same footsteps a week later! A Scary write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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A frightening story and a vivid description of what happened to poor Tom and the next victim is about to follow in the same footsteps a week later! A Scary write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review and stars, Dolly.
Comment from equestrik
Wow! This is pretty darn gory in the end! You have developed the story well and certainly held my interest throughout. Great picture to match your story.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Wow! This is pretty darn gory in the end! You have developed the story well and certainly held my interest throughout. Great picture to match your story.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Equestrik.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is a horror and thriller story. A good person like Tom with a kind heart to help someone ended in a horrible death. What an unfair world! Let hope the police caught the monster and put him to death.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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It is a horror and thriller story. A good person like Tom with a kind heart to help someone ended in a horrible death. What an unfair world! Let hope the police caught the monster and put him to death.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Lol. Thank you for the great review and stars, Good.
Comment from Wendy G
I like the way you have ended this, with the suggestion that the woman will be the next victim. You have written it well. Very best wishes for the short story contest.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I like the way you have ended this, with the suggestion that the woman will be the next victim. You have written it well. Very best wishes for the short story contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review and good luck wishes, Wendy.
Comment from Patty Palmer
So much for myths, huh? This creature was always thought to be a myth but you treated it as real and the story took off. I also liked how it ended with another person, Bethany, saw footprints in the snow. Interesting story. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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So much for myths, huh? This creature was always thought to be a myth but you treated it as real and the story took off. I also liked how it ended with another person, Bethany, saw footprints in the snow. Interesting story. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and generous stars, Patty.
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You're very welcome!
Patty
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
And so the Abominable Snowman's next meal is on her way up the mountain! What a gruesome story! The poor man set off in the blizzard on a mercy mission and gets eaten! Wow. Well done, this is a wonderful contest entry. Good luck!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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And so the Abominable Snowman's next meal is on her way up the mountain! What a gruesome story! The poor man set off in the blizzard on a mercy mission and gets eaten! Wow. Well done, this is a wonderful contest entry. Good luck!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review and gracious stars, Sandra. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Julie Sandy
A cool story I was not expecting that apart from the picture which gave it away a little.
Great imagination, good luck in the competition
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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A cool story I was not expecting that apart from the picture which gave it away a little.
Great imagination, good luck in the competition
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Julie. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Great story - and a great take on the opening line. Loved the ending. I have just one small quibble and that is "He hollered and waited for a response ... Instantly..."
He couldn't wait and hear a response instantly. I only mention it because it made me momentarily lose my place in what is otherwise a very engaging tale. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Great story - and a great take on the opening line. Loved the ending. I have just one small quibble and that is "He hollered and waited for a response ... Instantly..."
He couldn't wait and hear a response instantly. I only mention it because it made me momentarily lose my place in what is otherwise a very engaging tale. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Retro. You, know, I didn't even think about that. I changed it to "hoped' rather than 'waited.' That should fix that. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars and for pointing out the goof, Retro. I'm glad you liked my little story. Thank you again.
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