Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Tattooed Angel"A complete story in written as a poem.
28 total reviews
Comment from WalkerMan
When your car breaks down far from likely help, you are right to be Wary at first when someone appears, lest you end up in even worse circumstances. While there is a tendency to trust a person looking clean and well attired, a man looking unkempt and smeared with grease is more likely to be a good mechanic, as this tattooed angel turned out to be. God put you back on the road with a new viewpoint, while that man had the satisfaction of helping you -- just as he probably had done for others God placed in his care.
Your heartwarming story is well told in this smooth-reading poem. You set the scene with just enough detail to make the reader feel present as the story unfolds, and relieved when it turns out so happily.
Superb, and aptly illustrated with that striking portrait.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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When your car breaks down far from likely help, you are right to be Wary at first when someone appears, lest you end up in even worse circumstances. While there is a tendency to trust a person looking clean and well attired, a man looking unkempt and smeared with grease is more likely to be a good mechanic, as this tattooed angel turned out to be. God put you back on the road with a new viewpoint, while that man had the satisfaction of helping you -- just as he probably had done for others God placed in his care.
Your heartwarming story is well told in this smooth-reading poem. You set the scene with just enough detail to make the reader feel present as the story unfolds, and relieved when it turns out so happily.
Superb, and aptly illustrated with that striking portrait.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thanks for stopping by and reviewing my poem and for the nice comments. I also appreciate you pointing out those things that no one noticed earlier. I have corrected them. I've not seen your name in quite some time and I've been wondering where you were.
This was something of a miracle that the car stopped in the only one place where we could have possibly gotten help that day. I've had quite a few unexplained things happen in my life and I always believe it is God's way of looking out for us lower creatures.
Beth
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You are most welcome, Beth. I see the corrections and have removed my comments about them, as promised.
Yes, I have been too busy to post for many months and my reviewing has been sparse too. Now I am fighting off the infamous virus -- the first illness I've had in over twenty years, and fortunately mild so far. I had anticipated the possibility; so was prepared with nutritional supplements I knew would strengthen my immunity, and they appear to be working.
If we consider God to have a preferred plan for each of us, then it makes sense that He would help us as needed to keep us on track. What He does for us is not always obvious; but, in this case, it was, in order to prompt the change which occurred in your viewpoint.
As I like to say: Miracles are not in the mechanism. Miracles are in the timing. -- Mike
Comment from Rx kingpen
A slice of America eh? Yes, some of us are tattooed Angels of sort. Or something like that.
The poem is entertaining. Could use a once over. Couldn't hurt.
I'm glad he did you a real solid favor at the most urgent of times. Pay it forward? Cool beans.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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A slice of America eh? Yes, some of us are tattooed Angels of sort. Or something like that.
The poem is entertaining. Could use a once over. Couldn't hurt.
I'm glad he did you a real solid favor at the most urgent of times. Pay it forward? Cool beans.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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Since that day, I've met some other Tattooed angles. My daughter married one and then she became one herself. Incidentally this daughters email address is her first name plus coolbeans. LOL She wanted to open a coffee shop and call in Cool Beans. Thanks for the review and comments.
Beth
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Right on, Beth. It's a small world after all. Cool beans would be a great place. Maybe by the ocean.
Comment from Sally Law
I apologize I do not have a six for this wonderful thing. I enjoyed this so much I could just see everything unfold before my eyes. Your art was wonderful and your meter and rhythm were perfect. I think this is the winner right here!
Sending my best today as always and my very best for the contest,
Sally XOs....
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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I apologize I do not have a six for this wonderful thing. I enjoyed this so much I could just see everything unfold before my eyes. Your art was wonderful and your meter and rhythm were perfect. I think this is the winner right here!
Sending my best today as always and my very best for the contest,
Sally XOs....
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your great review and your virtual six. I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
Beth
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A stranger gives aid in a time of need.
Tattooed Angel
by BethShelby
Hello, Beth,
I love the picture, it's a very attractive man. I see how someone like him may seem dangerous and it's true that most people judge a book by it's cover. Good job!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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A stranger gives aid in a time of need.
Tattooed Angel
by BethShelby
Hello, Beth,
I love the picture, it's a very attractive man. I see how someone like him may seem dangerous and it's true that most people judge a book by it's cover. Good job!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. I judge people so much any more and he is part of the reason. Another is my son-in-law also very tattooed with a troubled background but he is gem.
Beth
Comment from mermaids
This is a wonderful, heartwarming tale that reminds us not to judge people by how they look. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words and your poetic form adds to the strength of your story.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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This is a wonderful, heartwarming tale that reminds us not to judge people by how they look. You have a smooth flow of rhyming words and your poetic form adds to the strength of your story.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments. I so glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Well written story in rhyme. More than that it serves two lessons. The obvious one as intended is not to judge someone on preconceived ideas.
The other is the lesson of helping your fellow man .
Excellent work.
Mary
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Well written story in rhyme. More than that it serves two lessons. The obvious one as intended is not to judge someone on preconceived ideas.
The other is the lesson of helping your fellow man .
Excellent work.
Mary
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you Mary, I appreciate you review and comments.
Beth
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good example of not judging people. Angels come in all kinds of packages. This was a true good samaritan.
Keep writing and stay healthly.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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This is a good example of not judging people. Angels come in all kinds of packages. This was a true good samaritan.
Keep writing and stay healthly.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the revue and comments. He certainly was a good Samaritan and I don't know what we would have done with him.
Beth
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You are most kindly welcome, Beth.
Joan
Comment from L. Kalere
What a lovely little story in a poem. Sometimes it take an event like this one to remind us of the good in people, even if they don't look like us. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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What a lovely little story in a poem. Sometimes it take an event like this one to remind us of the good in people, even if they don't look like us. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. We seemed to suspicious of people who don't look like us but this guy really saved our day.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, so true. Appearances don't always are what they looklike. I must admit, if the person, I'd met had looked anything like the photo, I would have been a bit alarmed too. But he turned out to be your saving angel. I loved your poem. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Hi Beth, so true. Appearances don't always are what they looklike. I must admit, if the person, I'd met had looked anything like the photo, I would have been a bit alarmed too. But he turned out to be your saving angel. I loved your poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you Ulla, I'm really not sure what would have happened if he didn't some around. We would have likely had to spend all night in the car until we could get to phone and have some money wired to us so we could have the car towed and fixed
Beth
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You were lucky, indeed!!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story poem about being in trouble in a strange place and with no money or resources is not a good situation, but God knows everything and He provided an angel to help you out.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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A very well-written story poem about being in trouble in a strange place and with no money or resources is not a good situation, but God knows everything and He provided an angel to help you out.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review and comment. I think God kept the car running until we were at exactly the right spot.
