Suddenly
a 250-word story8 total reviews
Comment from bnair
Nice! I like how you went a different take on this. The wife sounds magical ;). I wonder how you would develop this further or could it? The example is well fitting.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
  |
Nice! I like how you went a different take on this. The wife sounds magical ;). I wonder how you would develop this further or could it? The example is well fitting.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
-
If this were continued I would start a story with my initial plot and her edited improvements along the way.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
The author chose a very interesting title. The story takes advantage of the word (suddenly) to bring up a childhood memory. Everyone has one's unique childhood story. Some of them are good; others can be tragic. It is good if people can forget the bad experience and move on.
Suddenly, wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
|
The author chose a very interesting title. The story takes advantage of the word (suddenly) to bring up a childhood memory. Everyone has one's unique childhood story. Some of them are good; others can be tragic. It is good if people can forget the bad experience and move on.
Suddenly, wish you good luck.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
-
Thank you for the good advice, Chan.
Comment from RetroStarfish
Ha! Love it. Your take on the writing prompt is creative. Your dialogue is crisp and realistic. The enigmatic ending works, in this case. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
|
Ha! Love it. Your take on the writing prompt is creative. Your dialogue is crisp and realistic. The enigmatic ending works, in this case. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
-
Thank you, RS
Comment from Patty Palmer
An entire story about an entire story, LOL We've all written something along the way that just didn't hit us the right way and afterwards kind of holds us to a better standard than previously, Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
|
An entire story about an entire story, LOL We've all written something along the way that just didn't hit us the right way and afterwards kind of holds us to a better standard than previously, Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
-
Thanks, Patty.
-
You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from LisaMay
Suddenly I realise that your character Kathy is living up to what we should all know by now - wives are always right. Despite his sarcasm, Chet was wise to listen to her.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
|
Suddenly I realise that your character Kathy is living up to what we should all know by now - wives are always right. Despite his sarcasm, Chet was wise to listen to her.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
-
Chet IS wise. : )
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Kathy has a valid point in my opinion. I believe her advice would make The story better. Your did a good job with the contest prompt, Mystery Author. There is good flow, the conversation is natural and adds interest, and the pacing is good. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
|
Well, Kathy has a valid point in my opinion. I believe her advice would make The story better. Your did a good job with the contest prompt, Mystery Author. There is good flow, the conversation is natural and adds interest, and the pacing is good. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
-
Thanks, Jan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly clever dig at the canned contest requirement--brilliant twist both amuses and gives wise advice to the writer suddenly aspiring beyond amateur status. Good luck. This may be a winner.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
|
Wickedly clever dig at the canned contest requirement--brilliant twist both amuses and gives wise advice to the writer suddenly aspiring beyond amateur status. Good luck. This may be a winner.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
-
Thank you, Liz.
Comment from Wendy G
Great creativity and imagination - especially if you can't think why he would SUDDENLY notice the footprints. It is a well-written story, focusing on one word of the title. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
|
Great creativity and imagination - especially if you can't think why he would SUDDENLY notice the footprints. It is a well-written story, focusing on one word of the title. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
-
Thanks, Wendy
