Comment from equestrik

Excellent

I enjoyed this and feel you wrote creatively and with thought. You chose a good picture to illustrate your writing. Best of luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2020

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello anonymous

Great entry for the Writer's Block 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Love the presentation. Good metaphor with the frozen flow. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2020

Comment from L. Kalere

Excellent

Love, love, love it. It's so very clever, and funny, and paints the picture (even if you didn't have one, which is perfect). I think you'll a great contender.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thank you for the very positive review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Jewell McChesney

Excellent

This is a really good 5-7-5. You make a strong point with the freezing reference and the image is a perfect addition.
I hope writing this one helped loosen the hold writer's block had on you.
Good job.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thanks a lot for your review. It's a loosening start at least.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

This is a great entry for the writer's block contest. A beautiful and powerful photo, to support your theme. (But obviously you don't have complete writer's block or you would not have produced this lovely poem!)

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Bloomer Burbs

Excellent

Hi mystery writer

Your entry for me is very clever, creative and imaginative - it should do well in the contest. I might even vote for it?
Take care and stay safe, Pete

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thanks very much for your review. I would love to have your vote.

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

HEADS UP: Ni-ag-a-ra is 4 sylls (https://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/niagara)

Sugg: avoid disqualification by exercising your poetic license to eliminate syllable three via contraction--i.e. Niag'ra

Excellent poem--tweak it to win it!

Love it! But that's beside the point--as I said, given the disagreement among sources 3 vs 4 syllables--it is imperative that you defend (whichever syllable choice you make) explicitly in notes with source citations so judges won't have grounds to disqualify--which would be a damn shame!

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020

All sites I checked said 3 syllables. I actually wasn't sure. Thanks for your review.

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 30-Nov-2020

Sugg: whichever you choose, state specifically in notes that sources differ--provide citations--this way, judges won't disqualify you regardless of which they think is correct.

reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020

I took your suggestion and changed the wording a little to fit the syllables. Take a look, would appreciate your thoughts.

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Excellent

What a clever and surprising ending. You use the stifling forces of nature to reveal your writer's block. Original and humorous. Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thanks very much for your review.