Murder Unmasked
(500 words) Present-day style of assassination activity.8 total reviews
Comment from greyson ernst
i really like it i have no suggestions i may have just joined fanstory and i love it. i hope you keep righting good luck and keep righting and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
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i really like it i have no suggestions i may have just joined fanstory and i love it. i hope you keep righting good luck and keep righting and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
Comment from LJbutterfly
What an unusual and compelling story with an important hidden message that is not revealed until mid-story. Cyber-bullying has proven to be as dangerous and as deadly as an assassination. This flash fiction story is very creative and well written. The photo you chose enhances the story. Well done.
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What an unusual and compelling story with an important hidden message that is not revealed until mid-story. Cyber-bullying has proven to be as dangerous and as deadly as an assassination. This flash fiction story is very creative and well written. The photo you chose enhances the story. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
Comment from equestrik
This is a clever and creative write for the writing prompt. I like the narrative; you having a conversation with your readers. Good and entertaining writing.
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This is a clever and creative write for the writing prompt. I like the narrative; you having a conversation with your readers. Good and entertaining writing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I really don't like killer mystery movie or stories. Perhaps because so many of them occur in our real world today. Certain cities are up in crime which is not a good thing.
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I really don't like killer mystery movie or stories. Perhaps because so many of them occur in our real world today. Certain cities are up in crime which is not a good thing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although this is fiction there is some reality in these situations as we do not know who we are talking to on-line and we often make the wrong assumptions when talking to strangers. We pride ourselves in unravelling the puzzle of who is on the other end of the conversation but we rarely get it right unless we meet that person face to face. There is much cyber bulling on-line and a lot of it is directed at children who are naive and fall victim to these predators. A cleverly put together story and you entertained me, and I hope this also serves as a warning to others, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Although this is fiction there is some reality in these situations as we do not know who we are talking to on-line and we often make the wrong assumptions when talking to strangers. We pride ourselves in unravelling the puzzle of who is on the other end of the conversation but we rarely get it right unless we meet that person face to face. There is much cyber bulling on-line and a lot of it is directed at children who are naive and fall victim to these predators. A cleverly put together story and you entertained me, and I hope this also serves as a warning to others, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. There is a terrible streak in some people to take advantage of others through anonymity.
Comment from lyenochka
That is true that cyber-bullying is a clear way to character assassination. And these days, it's easy to create a false identity and do personal harm that way. Great job with this character creation in this piece. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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That is true that cyber-bullying is a clear way to character assassination. And these days, it's easy to create a false identity and do personal harm that way. Great job with this character creation in this piece. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly clever--witty twist--masterful monologue from POV of ruthless killer--twist of hot rapture in my cold soul with every twist of the blade--chilling! This may be a winner.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Wickedly clever--witty twist--masterful monologue from POV of ruthless killer--twist of hot rapture in my cold soul with every twist of the blade--chilling! This may be a winner.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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You picked my best sentence - glad to have it confirmed. Thanks for your encouraging review.
Comment from L. Kalere
Whoa, what a cold-hearted bi... Great little story. My eyes just kept getting wider as it progressed. You took what you see around you, and made it into a very chilling story. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Whoa, what a cold-hearted bi... Great little story. My eyes just kept getting wider as it progressed. You took what you see around you, and made it into a very chilling story. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Heh heh, yes I can tap into an evil, heartless vibe sometimes.... quite a contrast to my usual compassionate, empathetic good self I assure you.
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good thing it's a blind contest
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... and then when it's finished the truth will come out!
