One or the Other
We all have skeletons in the closet.8 total reviews
Comment from Kate Magoffin
This is a great story. While it was obvious to me from the beginning that it was a story about an alter ego I didn't predict the ending, and the surprise was rewarding.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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This is a great story. While it was obvious to me from the beginning that it was a story about an alter ego I didn't predict the ending, and the surprise was rewarding.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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I am glad you liked it. Thank you for taking the time to read.
Comment from greyson ernst
i really like it i have no suggestions i may have just joined fanstory and i love it. i hope you keep righting good luck and keep righting and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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i really like it i have no suggestions i may have just joined fanstory and i love it. i hope you keep righting good luck and keep righting and stay safe
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 28-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from beizanten
This is a dark story, very well written story the emotion flow strongly, very chillling. So the main character have second personality and one who name is beth and she is a psychopath.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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This is a dark story, very well written story the emotion flow strongly, very chillling. So the main character have second personality and one who name is beth and she is a psychopath.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the stars. I am thrilled that you liked it so much.
Comment from kmoss
Wow! Riveting. I like how you introduced us to Beth..."I'm back bitch!" Making us think that Beth was an old girlfriend or maybe a long lost sibling or an old friend, but when we really meet Beth, it twists and turns. I like how you chose two names that are not related-Aaron and Beth. There is a misspelled word in the description-skeleton. Nice job overall!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Wow! Riveting. I like how you introduced us to Beth..."I'm back bitch!" Making us think that Beth was an old girlfriend or maybe a long lost sibling or an old friend, but when we really meet Beth, it twists and turns. I like how you chose two names that are not related-Aaron and Beth. There is a misspelled word in the description-skeleton. Nice job overall!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you so much for the six stars. I am thrilled you liked it so much. I haver fixed the error thank you for pointing it out.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, scary Many ups Beth - imaginary but deadly real. Okay, you got me your story is pretty scary. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Wow, scary Many ups Beth - imaginary but deadly real. Okay, you got me your story is pretty scary. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is a scary story. It is hard to believe people have multiple personalities but it is real. Why do multiple personalities always include a bad, horrible one? It also seems the bad one is in control. Usually it ends up hurting people.
This story is no exception. Like to read a little bit more how Aaron struggled to fight against Beth. It will be nice to see him win.
Good luck to your contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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It is a scary story. It is hard to believe people have multiple personalities but it is real. Why do multiple personalities always include a bad, horrible one? It also seems the bad one is in control. Usually it ends up hurting people.
This story is no exception. Like to read a little bit more how Aaron struggled to fight against Beth. It will be nice to see him win.
Good luck to your contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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I will ad a note for edit to tell more about how Aaron fought her off the first time.
Comment from sammielwf
Mystery writer,
.The first thought after reading this was...
Wow! I did not see this coming. None of it.
To me that means it was a heck of a good write.
A cross dressing multiple personality central character.......very powerful image you created here.
The build up to the reality break was well thought out and well crafted.
The ending horrible in a "I can not look away" or stop reading this....
Good solid story.
Dear Mystery Author....
I think I might keep my eye on you when you are revealed through the contest....
This was too good to ignore.
Sammielwf
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Mystery writer,
.The first thought after reading this was...
Wow! I did not see this coming. None of it.
To me that means it was a heck of a good write.
A cross dressing multiple personality central character.......very powerful image you created here.
The build up to the reality break was well thought out and well crafted.
The ending horrible in a "I can not look away" or stop reading this....
Good solid story.
Dear Mystery Author....
I think I might keep my eye on you when you are revealed through the contest....
This was too good to ignore.
Sammielwf
"
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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I am so glad you like it. I wish I could tell you who who I am so you could check out my oth wititng.
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As soon as your identity is revealed after the contest- I will go to your portfolio to read more of your work, It would be my pleasure.
Sammielwf
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Wow, this is definitely the darker side of crossdressing. It reminds me of Norman Bates in "Psycho," except that there is no obvious, pathological "mother" fixation -- simply a desperate urge to act out a female personality, suppressed to the point of rage and violence.
I found these two errors:
We all have skelletons in the closet
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We all have skeletons in the closet
Wondering into the bedroom,
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Wandering into the bedroom,
Your story is well written. I didn't realize that Aaron had a wife, until shortly before he got rid of her. Your story is very scary!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Wow, this is definitely the darker side of crossdressing. It reminds me of Norman Bates in "Psycho," except that there is no obvious, pathological "mother" fixation -- simply a desperate urge to act out a female personality, suppressed to the point of rage and violence.
I found these two errors:
We all have skelletons in the closet
-->
We all have skeletons in the closet
Wondering into the bedroom,
-->
Wandering into the bedroom,
Your story is well written. I didn't realize that Aaron had a wife, until shortly before he got rid of her. Your story is very scary!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020
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Thank you for pointing out the mistakes. I hace fixed them.
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You're very welcome. May God bless you. - Mary Kay
