My Brother Jim
A sonnet: Someone to be thankful for12 total reviews
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
What a beautiful tribute to your brother. But you do know that he is in a better place and you will meet again someday. When you lose a loved one it is very painful, but know the best is yet to come.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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What a beautiful tribute to your brother. But you do know that he is in a better place and you will meet again someday. When you lose a loved one it is very painful, but know the best is yet to come.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your lovely review and one day yes we will meet again but I do miss him it has only been 4 weeks ago today Cheers
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your thoughts and feelings about a brother that you have lost is a heartfelt rendering. It is wonderful to feel the essence of their presence, forever in our hearts. For that we are thankful.
Ralf
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Your thoughts and feelings about a brother that you have lost is a heartfelt rendering. It is wonderful to feel the essence of their presence, forever in our hearts. For that we are thankful.
Ralf
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Thank you verY much Ralf for your kind words and yes he will always be with me He passed only 4 weeks ago today Cheers
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A sonnet: Someone to be thankful for
My Brother Jim
Hello, anonymous,
A great entry for the Someone to be thankful for. writing prompt contest. I'm sorry for your loss. It's a terrible thing to loose a brother or any close relative. It sounds like you were very close. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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A sonnet: Someone to be thankful for
My Brother Jim
Hello, anonymous,
A great entry for the Someone to be thankful for. writing prompt contest. I'm sorry for your loss. It's a terrible thing to loose a brother or any close relative. It sounds like you were very close. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Hi Gypsy Thanks so much and yes we were very close and I miss him very much It has only been 4 weeks today since he left us.
Cheers
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I am sorry, how terrible and so close to the holidays. I voted for your poem, it's very well done and heartfelt.
Comment from Boogienights
This is a heartbreaking sonnet about the loss of a cherished brother. I lost my brother and my sister just a few years ago, so I know what you mean. Best of luck k in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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This is a heartbreaking sonnet about the loss of a cherished brother. I lost my brother and my sister just a few years ago, so I know what you mean. Best of luck k in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Hi Boogienights Thank you for your review and yes it is hard I lost Jim 4 weeks ago very hard for us all Cheers
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
What a good sonnet and, especially, a heartfelt and wonderful tribute to your late brother. I suspect he is aware of your tribute.
The artwork is very fitting.
I feel like this sonnet could be read at funeral services everywhere because it so well captures the feelings close siblings have.
God Bless.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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What a good sonnet and, especially, a heartfelt and wonderful tribute to your late brother. I suspect he is aware of your tribute.
The artwork is very fitting.
I feel like this sonnet could be read at funeral services everywhere because it so well captures the feelings close siblings have.
God Bless.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Hi Cynthia Thank you for your lovely review and kind words Yes we were very close and I will miss him very much but smile at all our wonderful memories
Cheers
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Very beautiful heartfelt poem for your brother. Sorry for your loss. Although you've gone I feel your love still here . Within my heart forever with me near. Nicely done. Very fitting photo.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Very beautiful heartfelt poem for your brother. Sorry for your loss. Although you've gone I feel your love still here . Within my heart forever with me near. Nicely done. Very fitting photo.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2020
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Hi Joanne Thank you for your review and yes always now in my heart he was fantastic and I will miss him big time
Cheers
Comment from Cascade1
I found this quite moving. It is very hard to express raw emotion in any
work especially on such a sad topic. I hoped that writing and sharing your story has helped you, as you move forward. Regards Leslie
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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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I found this quite moving. It is very hard to express raw emotion in any
work especially on such a sad topic. I hoped that writing and sharing your story has helped you, as you move forward. Regards Leslie
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hi Leslie Thank you for your review but you have just negated my exceptional rating with your ?average ? rating
If you feel it need ?improvement ? please let me know not just rate it low
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Sorry, I did mean to leave a negative star rating, as I am new here I must have missed the number of stars needed. I do apologise. Regards Leslie
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I am new here and missed marking the correct star. I apologise for my error. I found nothing wrong with your work. Regards Leslie
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Hi Leslie Thanks for your reply much appreciated
It is a general rule to award a poem usually a 5 star( excellent) if ones enjoys it and there are no needed corrections or major changes
A six is a poem you believe is exceptional in always needing no changes
A four ( good) for a good poem however may need a small tweek or two
A 3 star ( average) suggests the poem is not very good and will need quite a few changes to make it read well etc
A two star is for a poor poem
If a poem or story is awarded a six star rating along with 5 stars reviews this often brings the poem up to exceptional status
However awarding an already exceptional poem (as mine was) with a 3 star rating this will then bring the poem back from exceptional to a lower rating back ie to either excellent or good and therefore the poem will need further excellent ratings or exceptional to get it back
So when you rate a poem be mindful of its existing rating and maybe even look at other reviewers comments and rating before you select your award
I know this sounds a little precious but most of us work hard on our work and always looking to improve
I am certainly not objecting to a low rate if my work is not deserving of 5 or 6 stars and I am more than happy to take constructive comments and have often used reviewers advice to make my
Work better ( that is what rewarding a helpful reviewer is for)
Hope that helps So welcome to FS and you will find your feet so to speak
Enjoy the site and friendships made all the best with your work
Cheers Christine
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Hi Leslie Thanks for your reply much appreciated
It is a general rule to award a poem usually a 5 star( excellent) if ones enjoys it and there are no needed corrections or major changes
A six is a poem you believe is exceptional in always needing no changes
A four ( good) for a good poem however may need a small tweek or two
A 3 star ( average) suggests the poem is not very good and will need quite a few changes to make it read well etc
A two star is for a poor poem
If a poem or story is awarded a six star rating along with 5 stars reviews this often brings the poem up to exceptional status
However awarding an already exceptional poem (as mine was) with a 3 star rating this will then bring the poem back from exceptional to a lower rating back ie to either excellent or good and therefore the poem will need further excellent ratings or exceptional to get it back
So when you rate a poem be mindful of its existing rating and maybe even look at other reviewers comments and rating before you select your award
I know this sounds a little precious but most of us work hard on our work and always looking to improve
I am certainly not objecting to a low rate if my work is not deserving of 5 or 6 stars and I am more than happy to take constructive comments and have often used reviewers advice to make my
Work better ( that is what rewarding a helpful reviewer is for)
Hope that helps So welcome to FS and you will find your feet so to speak
Enjoy the site and friendships made all the best with your work
Cheers Christine
Comment from Jay Squires
This is a lovely testament to your brother. Your sonnet form which is not an easy one to fit your thoughts into, you used with energy and spirit. I see this is a prompt, and you seem to fill their requirements perfectly. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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This is a lovely testament to your brother. Your sonnet form which is not an easy one to fit your thoughts into, you used with energy and spirit. I see this is a prompt, and you seem to fill their requirements perfectly. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hi Jay, Thank your review I enjoy the sonnet style and thought I would do a tribute to Jim
Cheers
Comment from AnnieDawn
A most beautifully written tribute to a lost loved one. Six stars not for the loss, but for the talent behind the poem. The loss and grief, along with the love are, expressed exceptionally well in this poem. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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A most beautifully written tribute to a lost loved one. Six stars not for the loss, but for the talent behind the poem. The loss and grief, along with the love are, expressed exceptionally well in this poem. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hi Annie Thank you so much for your lovely review and six stars I am thrilled you thought it so
Much appreciated I do miss him as it was only just 4 weeks ago when he died suddenly
Cheers
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful poem, written from the heart, and a wonderful tribute to your brother. Your relationship was obviously very special, but you will meet again, in a perfect place. God bless.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Beautiful poem, written from the heart, and a wonderful tribute to your brother. Your relationship was obviously very special, but you will meet again, in a perfect place. God bless.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2020
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Hi Wendy Thank you for your review and kind words and yes we were very close and it it just 4 weeks ago
Cheers
