Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Serene Silver Lake"multi-author book number two
11 total reviews
Comment from royowen
They are such a noble animal, they mate for life, and are replete parents and exemplary guardians. Beautifully written Gypsy. A wonderful 7/7 to round off the haiku, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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They are such a noble animal, they mate for life, and are replete parents and exemplary guardians. Beautifully written Gypsy. A wonderful 7/7 to round off the haiku, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
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Most welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written couplet in addition to the multi-author Renga book about the serene silver lake at dusk where the pen cal ky puts her baby to sleep.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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A very well-written couplet in addition to the multi-author Renga book about the serene silver lake at dusk where the pen cal ky puts her baby to sleep.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A clever use of words here to describe young swans on the gentle undisturbed lake, much enjoyed, a soothing evening scene before bedtime, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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A clever use of words here to describe young swans on the gentle undisturbed lake, much enjoyed, a soothing evening scene before bedtime, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from juliaSjames
I love this continuation with its tender nurturing vision of the female swan and her cygnet at evening.. You found a clever way to avoid repeating words.
Beautifully penned Gypsy
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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I love this continuation with its tender nurturing vision of the female swan and her cygnet at evening.. You found a clever way to avoid repeating words.
Beautifully penned Gypsy
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Wendy G
Such a gentle, lyrical piece of writing, tender and beautiful. Nature with its peace and rest. I enjoyed reading it. Again, the photograph is the perfect setting for your work.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Such a gentle, lyrical piece of writing, tender and beautiful. Nature with its peace and rest. I enjoyed reading it. Again, the photograph is the perfect setting for your work.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, well it's a good thing you mentioned that a baby swan is called a flapper because I would still be puzzling over just exactly what it was. lol
Great job, Gypsy and another fine entry into your very popular Renga book. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Ha, well it's a good thing you mentioned that a baby swan is called a flapper because I would still be puzzling over just exactly what it was. lol
Great job, Gypsy and another fine entry into your very popular Renga book. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Gloria.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Joan E.
When my family moved to Los Angeles from Brooklyn in 1955, we settled in an area called Silver Lake, because it has a reservoir--thanks for the memories. Thanks for adding your detailed couplet to the Renga book. I did not know baby swans are appropriately called "flappers"! -Joan
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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When my family moved to Los Angeles from Brooklyn in 1955, we settled in an area called Silver Lake, because it has a reservoir--thanks for the memories. Thanks for adding your detailed couplet to the Renga book. I did not know baby swans are appropriately called "flappers"! -Joan
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Joan. I'm familiar with silver lake, my family went there for the summer camp. It was beautiful.
Hugs,
Gypsy
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I went to Thomas Star King Jr. High, and Marshall High School. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--proving once again, the Penne is mightier than the sword--eh, ha, ha, woo! Boy, was that ever lame--oh well, you're used to it from me!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--proving once again, the Penne is mightier than the sword--eh, ha, ha, woo! Boy, was that ever lame--oh well, you're used to it from me!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, be Mike.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Nice one! Good addition to this collaborative poem. And, I learned the meanings of two special terms. Of course, without your notes, the poem doesn't gel in my brain. Very nice photo to pair with your verse.
Mark
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Gypsy,
Nice one! Good addition to this collaborative poem. And, I learned the meanings of two special terms. Of course, without your notes, the poem doesn't gel in my brain. Very nice photo to pair with your verse.
Mark
Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Yeah, by the rules of Renga, I couldn't use swan, which was used in prior chapter. That's why I added the info in my author notes.
Thank you :)
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! Thanks for teaching me about the "pen and flapper" and then we can't help thinking about the fountain pen and flapper since we're writers. So great word play and beautiful picture and poem!
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Wow! Thanks for teaching me about the "pen and flapper" and then we can't help thinking about the fountain pen and flapper since we're writers. So great word play and beautiful picture and poem!
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, be Helen. You are so smart, I didn't think of the word play.
Hugs,
Gypsy