Renga Two
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Crisp Morning Air Holds"multi-author book number two
15 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your fascinating perspective on the upside-down flower and raindrop. I liked your personification of the flower and brilliant colors. Thank you for your 5-7-5 addition to the Renga book- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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I enjoyed your fascinating perspective on the upside-down flower and raindrop. I liked your personification of the flower and brilliant colors. Thank you for your 5-7-5 addition to the Renga book- Joan
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Joan. I always appreciate your reviews. Take care, my friend.
Gypsy Hugs
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book. In the early morning fresh raindrop still clinging ton the petals of the flower.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book. In the early morning fresh raindrop still clinging ton the petals of the flower.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from juliaSjames
Extremely creative write based on the voluptuous artwork. It's really the kind of poem that evokes feelings and offers choices in a role playing game. The raindrop is about to fall for the irresistible petal.
Seems like the renga is in the springtime cycle now.
Thanks for sharing
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Extremely creative write based on the voluptuous artwork. It's really the kind of poem that evokes feelings and offers choices in a role playing game. The raindrop is about to fall for the irresistible petal.
Seems like the renga is in the springtime cycle now.
Thanks for sharing
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs
Comment from Mark Schardine
crisp morning air holds
raindrop hanging by a thread --
aloof petal flirts
We see how the third lines seems to drift away from the images presented in the first two, but then we recognize that it fits in completely. Both fit into the complete picture.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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crisp morning air holds
raindrop hanging by a thread --
aloof petal flirts
We see how the third lines seems to drift away from the images presented in the first two, but then we recognize that it fits in completely. Both fit into the complete picture.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice bit of personification and metaphor in this poem about morning dew and how fleeting it is. It is a nicely done haiku, Gypsy.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Nice bit of personification and metaphor in this poem about morning dew and how fleeting it is. It is a nicely done haiku, Gypsy.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs
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Don't mention it, Gypsy.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You created an image here of those raindrops clinging to the flowers at dawn and quenching the scene with crisp morning glimpse of nature before the sun dries the rain, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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You created an image here of those raindrops clinging to the flowers at dawn and quenching the scene with crisp morning glimpse of nature before the sun dries the rain, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Dolly.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
You've gotta love the flower petal flirting with the water drop, it's a metaphor par excellence, beautifully written and congrats on the success of your renga poertry, well done, Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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You've gotta love the flower petal flirting with the water drop, it's a metaphor par excellence, beautifully written and congrats on the success of your renga poertry, well done, Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Roy.
Hugs,
Gypsy
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Most welcome
Comment from Gloria ....
This is just terrific Gypsy. The imagery so clear, bright, full of life and yes speaks of the tenuous nature of life.
A fine addition to your Renga book, and a most refreshing read indeed. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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This is just terrific Gypsy. The imagery so clear, bright, full of life and yes speaks of the tenuous nature of life.
A fine addition to your Renga book, and a most refreshing read indeed. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Gloria. Thank you very much for the six stars!
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from tfawcus
I thought I'd already reviewed this earlier today, but apparently not. I thought it a good continuation from June's couplet. The juxtaposed ideas of hanging by a thread and flirting give a good sense of the fragility of nature.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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I thought I'd already reviewed this earlier today, but apparently not. I thought it a good continuation from June's couplet. The juxtaposed ideas of hanging by a thread and flirting give a good sense of the fragility of nature.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Tony.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I was very confused by the chapter numbering, but now I see you are on volume two of this book. What great achievement.
Why am I in love with this poem?
1-illustration unusually clear, I can see the raindrop
2- find image interesting that it's the air that holds the raindrop in place whilst the petal (more obvious choice) does its own thing.
Lovely
Katherine
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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I was very confused by the chapter numbering, but now I see you are on volume two of this book. What great achievement.
Why am I in love with this poem?
1-illustration unusually clear, I can see the raindrop
2- find image interesting that it's the air that holds the raindrop in place whilst the petal (more obvious choice) does its own thing.
Lovely
Katherine
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Katherine. Thank you very much for the six stars!
Hugs,
Gypsy