Aiona's Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 87 "Hasty Pulling"Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.
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Comment from dragonpoet
So, Aiona, are you alluding to his time during sex or his driving with pulling out. I assume it is the first, due to the notes.
You should always wait for the captain to tell you to pull in the anchor.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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So, Aiona, are you alluding to his time during sex or his driving with pulling out. I assume it is the first, due to the notes.
You should always wait for the captain to tell you to pull in the anchor.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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I'm not really sure what I was alluding to here, but definitely something sexual. EVERYTHING this guy says is some kind of innuendo. He's got no filter. To give an example of how much he blabs about himself, he actually announced he's had a vasectomy in the middle of the yacht club once. REALLY LOUDLY. As I said..... no filter whatsoever. :)
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He does need to be taught some tact and secrecy, it seems.
Joan
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Yeah, I probably shouldn't be writing about him either. I should just tell him how I feel. But somehow I think he wouldn't care anyway! :) Hence the poetry....
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That makes sense. But at least you could try and get it over with
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that's a fun word play of "anchor baby!" I remember you wrote about the sexual behavior of sailors and this "hasty" one seemed to be one that you wrote about. Great use all syllables! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Well, that's a fun word play of "anchor baby!" I remember you wrote about the sexual behavior of sailors and this "hasty" one seemed to be one that you wrote about. Great use all syllables! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thanks, lyenochka. Yeah. Same guy. He's not all bad. Just...I am not sure I want him sailing on my boat anymore. I think the feeling is mutual!
Comment from Jay Squires
I don't know why your poem puts a smile on my face, Aiona. I think it's because of the very personal "baby" after the mention of "pulling out" and the connotation of "pulling up" meaning to stop an act before completion--or "coitus interruptus."
Of course, it can all be taken in the nautical sense of pulling up an anchor and that would be the surface meaning. But that's no fun!
I thoroughly enjoy this 5-7-5. And you should be quite proud of it as an entry.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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I don't know why your poem puts a smile on my face, Aiona. I think it's because of the very personal "baby" after the mention of "pulling out" and the connotation of "pulling up" meaning to stop an act before completion--or "coitus interruptus."
Of course, it can all be taken in the nautical sense of pulling up an anchor and that would be the surface meaning. But that's no fun!
I thoroughly enjoy this 5-7-5. And you should be quite proud of it as an entry.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thanks, Jay. I had fun writing it. When I'm mad, writing poetry is my sublimation.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, your friend sounds a little dangerous! He must learn to think before he acts, I hope you are okay, accidents when you are sailing can cost you your life, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Oh dear, your friend sounds a little dangerous! He must learn to think before he acts, I hope you are okay, accidents when you are sailing can cost you your life, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2020
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Thanks, Dolly. Yes, I'm very glad we all survived that incident!