The truth-showing
an object from the past11 total reviews
Comment from Allezw2
To whomsoever, a cute little narrative driven piece. Thinking back on the technology of the mirror from a still pond surface; to a bowl of water; to a polished metal plate; and the silvered glass plate; to the more environmentally present, an image of ourselves has been precious. The fact that we can see ourselves an normal even if the image is only a fraction of full size. Myth and magic go in hand with function. You have an interesting fashion for punctuating to indicate speech. Well, a similar effort worked well for Cormac McCarthy, so press on! A careful read will correct some of the fat finger error, please review to improve an already stellar post.
FYI:As a scout leader, I always carried a polished stainless steel signal mirror.
Nicely done, Live Long and Write Well,
Fantasist
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To whomsoever, a cute little narrative driven piece. Thinking back on the technology of the mirror from a still pond surface; to a bowl of water; to a polished metal plate; and the silvered glass plate; to the more environmentally present, an image of ourselves has been precious. The fact that we can see ourselves an normal even if the image is only a fraction of full size. Myth and magic go in hand with function. You have an interesting fashion for punctuating to indicate speech. Well, a similar effort worked well for Cormac McCarthy, so press on! A careful read will correct some of the fat finger error, please review to improve an already stellar post.
FYI:As a scout leader, I always carried a polished stainless steel signal mirror.
Nicely done, Live Long and Write Well,
Fantasist
Comment Written 14-Dec-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a funny story in line with the theme. I guess if these didn't exist in the present they would cause such a ruckus as this.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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This is a funny story in line with the theme. I guess if these didn't exist in the present they would cause such a ruckus as this.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your encouragements:)
Comment from equestrik
Good and fun write for the contest. I would love this 'truth showing thing' I could use a bit more truth in this world these days. I tend to feel I cannot believe much.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Good and fun write for the contest. I would love this 'truth showing thing' I could use a bit more truth in this world these days. I tend to feel I cannot believe much.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support with this story
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A verywell-written story about what future archeologisystem may find and how they may not know what the object was used for or what they were called and give them their new name.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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A verywell-written story about what future archeologisystem may find and how they may not know what the object was used for or what they were called and give them their new name.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your encouragements:)
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Yours is a very fun story.
You nailed the artwork...it is very appropriate to your story and made me laugh.
As you can see from the fact there are only two entries, the rest of us were either scared away by how hard this story seemed to be to write or we tried to do it but failed. I commend you on putting out this very well-done effort.
Both of the two stories entered are very good.
The other one is strong in technical language and setting.
Yours is strong in reflecting the human personality; the way we will still be vain about our looks far in the future. That is likely true. I particularly love that you call it "truth showing." Perfect.
I was a psychology major, not a physics major, so you get my vote. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Yours is a very fun story.
You nailed the artwork...it is very appropriate to your story and made me laugh.
As you can see from the fact there are only two entries, the rest of us were either scared away by how hard this story seemed to be to write or we tried to do it but failed. I commend you on putting out this very well-done effort.
Both of the two stories entered are very good.
The other one is strong in technical language and setting.
Yours is strong in reflecting the human personality; the way we will still be vain about our looks far in the future. That is likely true. I particularly love that you call it "truth showing." Perfect.
I was a psychology major, not a physics major, so you get my vote. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support with this piece:)
Comment from palmart
Very creative story about the future that encounters with the past! It is full of dialogues and it is nice to read and understand. Details of that future situation like the library and the scrolls are funny and gives an idea of how future libraries will look like. I would probably add a month and a year for this situation, just as a way to approach it with a time line, but it is just a detail.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Very creative story about the future that encounters with the past! It is full of dialogues and it is nice to read and understand. Details of that future situation like the library and the scrolls are funny and gives an idea of how future libraries will look like. I would probably add a month and a year for this situation, just as a way to approach it with a time line, but it is just a detail.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support with this story
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You´re very welcome, Iza!!
I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and Wish a Huge 2021, full of projects and new horizons!
Blessings!!
Comment from Wendy G
Well it certainly is a truth showing thing. And you are absolutely right, in saying that many people will not like it for what it reveals. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Well it certainly is a truth showing thing. And you are absolutely right, in saying that many people will not like it for what it reveals. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for your encouragements:)
Comment from nor84
I wanted to give you a heads-up. Here is a part of the contest announcement: The voting booth will include this summary of the contest:
This is a topic based contest. Please consider the topic when reading each entry. Writers were not required to write specifically about the topic but it should be incorporated into the submission. There are requirements for length. Minimum length 700 words. Maximum Length 7,000 words.
According to Microsoft Word, this story has only 530 words. It needs at least 700.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I wanted to give you a heads-up. Here is a part of the contest announcement: The voting booth will include this summary of the contest:
This is a topic based contest. Please consider the topic when reading each entry. Writers were not required to write specifically about the topic but it should be incorporated into the submission. There are requirements for length. Minimum length 700 words. Maximum Length 7,000 words.
According to Microsoft Word, this story has only 530 words. It needs at least 700.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support with this piece and the heads up
Comment from zanya
It's got a very authentic futuristic feel to it, this tale and the object itself is quite revealing - something that tells us things we may not want to see or hear - well done !
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It's got a very authentic futuristic feel to it, this tale and the object itself is quite revealing - something that tells us things we may not want to see or hear - well done !
Comment Written 20-Nov-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever! They made a wise choice.
As they were strolling on the beach suddenly, they [HAVE SEEN s/b SAW] One of the figures stopped in front of the circle, and [COMMA] afraid [COMMA] kneeled and ["started studying closer" s/b STUDIED IT UP CLOSE].
-Fran, why would some people love it and some ["not immensely" s/b HATE IT]?
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Clever! They made a wise choice.
As they were strolling on the beach suddenly, they [HAVE SEEN s/b SAW] One of the figures stopped in front of the circle, and [COMMA] afraid [COMMA] kneeled and ["started studying closer" s/b STUDIED IT UP CLOSE].
-Fran, why would some people love it and some ["not immensely" s/b HATE IT]?
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
