Phones on 'Silent'
When was the last time you just enjoyed each other?30 total reviews
Comment from estory
Nicely orchestrated, sensual images and musical effects of language paint this portrait of romance. All those 's' sounds create this great sense of the smooth and sublime, the moment in the candlelight. estory
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Nicely orchestrated, sensual images and musical effects of language paint this portrait of romance. All those 's' sounds create this great sense of the smooth and sublime, the moment in the candlelight. estory
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you for stopping by for a review today. So glad you enjoyed!
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Yours is a very well-done and tantilizing poem.
"Brush of flesh, touch of lace" is quite a strong opening and it's impossible as living and breathing humans, not to want to see what happens next.
The lines that follow are also excellent. The artwork is a perfect accompaniment. I honestly can't think of anything that would make it better in my mind. Even the title fits well and it (phone on silent) dates the piece as being in the here and now and not in the long ago past.
Bravo or Brava (depending upon your gender :)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Yours is a very well-done and tantilizing poem.
"Brush of flesh, touch of lace" is quite a strong opening and it's impossible as living and breathing humans, not to want to see what happens next.
The lines that follow are also excellent. The artwork is a perfect accompaniment. I honestly can't think of anything that would make it better in my mind. Even the title fits well and it (phone on silent) dates the piece as being in the here and now and not in the long ago past.
Bravo or Brava (depending upon your gender :)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you so very much, Ms. Adams, for such a wonderful and encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed! 8-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These words have painted a romantic and fulfilling encounter of luxurious comforting love, an evening to remember here and I enjoyed every word, a delicious read to stroke our senses, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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These words have painted a romantic and fulfilling encounter of luxurious comforting love, an evening to remember here and I enjoyed every word, a delicious read to stroke our senses, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much for stopping in!
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed this post. The heading and comment said it, and the poem confirmed it. Relationships need time and effort without the intrusion of unnecessary phones. Well written, and best wishes for the contest.
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I enjoyed this post. The heading and comment said it, and the poem confirmed it. Relationships need time and effort without the intrusion of unnecessary phones. Well written, and best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much for stopping in today!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Phone's on 'Silent", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work, was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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"Phone's on 'Silent", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work, was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much for stopping by today!
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Dear Anon,
You're more than welcome.
God bless you, take care, and stay safe!
the Duchess
Comment from Jesse James Doty
The title, and line above the title, drew me in like a moth to a flame. These are great introductory lines that express so well the current state of relations between couples. Putting the phone in silent mode is a wonderful suggestion. The romantic presentation adds the needed ambiance to the theme. A beautiful picture, and a poem speaking of wine and smooth jazz, and the brushing of skin while on satin sheets, create a marvelous image of what and how it could be if only we would listen and spend time with each other, without the interruption of phones and other technical distractions, is an important issue which needs to be addressed. You have done this successfully within the format of a Naani piece. Kudos to you.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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The title, and line above the title, drew me in like a moth to a flame. These are great introductory lines that express so well the current state of relations between couples. Putting the phone in silent mode is a wonderful suggestion. The romantic presentation adds the needed ambiance to the theme. A beautiful picture, and a poem speaking of wine and smooth jazz, and the brushing of skin while on satin sheets, create a marvelous image of what and how it could be if only we would listen and spend time with each other, without the interruption of phones and other technical distractions, is an important issue which needs to be addressed. You have done this successfully within the format of a Naani piece. Kudos to you.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you so very much, Mr. Doty, for such a wonderful and encouraging review. So glad you enjoyed! 8-)
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Yes, I did. Have a beautiful day.
Jesse
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Phones on Silent, with twenty-five syllables and four lines, finds either the couple at home and keeping each other warm, or a strong urge to make that a reality.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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This naani, Phones on Silent, with twenty-five syllables and four lines, finds either the couple at home and keeping each other warm, or a strong urge to make that a reality.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thanks so much for stopping by today!
Comment from palmart
Routine is probably the worst enemy of human relations: we assume that tomorrow a given person will be there and we may allow to see in the other direction as routine convince us that will be same as today or last week. Once one partner gives a slam at the door of a relationship, value starts growing, as we value most what we loose... Thanks for putting this point on the table...
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Routine is probably the worst enemy of human relations: we assume that tomorrow a given person will be there and we may allow to see in the other direction as routine convince us that will be same as today or last week. Once one partner gives a slam at the door of a relationship, value starts growing, as we value most what we loose... Thanks for putting this point on the table...
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Such an awesome opening sentence and relational review here... thank you so much!!
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You´re very welcome, Writer!
A real pleasure to share thoughts with you, the poem creator!
Have a Wonderful Sunday!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
You certainly set a romantic mood--sans sleazy innuendo, for which I applaud you--elegant imagery, graceful flow--bonus internal rhymes: brush/touch--fantasy/you and ME.
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You certainly set a romantic mood--sans sleazy innuendo, for which I applaud you--elegant imagery, graceful flow--bonus internal rhymes: brush/touch--fantasy/you and ME.
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Yeah, gonna skip the sleaze for now... 8-) Thank you for stopping by!
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Much obliged--I was earlier blindsided by a story--no flag for sex--in which a woman basically rapes her boyfriend, bites his dick, sucks the blood, at which he's overcome with pleasure and promptly proposes marriage. REALLY???!!!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, your image it's a very completing so well your naani: "Brush of skin, touch of lace,
smooth jazz and sparkling wine ~
Fantasy... just you and me...
on satin sheets divine" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Wow, your image it's a very completing so well your naani: "Brush of skin, touch of lace,
smooth jazz and sparkling wine ~
Fantasy... just you and me...
on satin sheets divine" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your review!!
