Snow Visited Today
a Naani15 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
A lovely poem likening a brief snow shower to an independent cat.
I like the use of 'visit', thus personifying the snow event, giving it freedom and a mind of its own. Nicely done.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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A lovely poem likening a brief snow shower to an independent cat.
I like the use of 'visit', thus personifying the snow event, giving it freedom and a mind of its own. Nicely done.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for sharing my poem, Lee, and your kind praise.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Likening the snow to cats is a unique concept and both are wistful and illusive so I expect you are spot on here, I enjoyed your few words that painted a picture of joy, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Likening the snow to cats is a unique concept and both are wistful and illusive so I expect you are spot on here, I enjoyed your few words that painted a picture of joy, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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The snow that came that day was so much like my niece's cat I could not resist using the analogy. Many thanks for your kind praise, Dolly.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Lovely bit of whimsy--disappearing snow vs fickle feline! (We had 4 inches in Mass. last wk--two days later it was gone @ 70 degrees)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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(sugg: avail yourself of title/desc. space to enhance the theme--naani contest is noted by the system under the poem text)
Lovely bit of whimsy--disappearing snow vs fickle feline! (We had 4 inches in Mass. last wk--two days later it was gone @ 70 degrees)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed my "bit of whimsy," Elizabeth. Many thanks for sharing my short poem and your kind praise.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-That is quite an image,
and the presentation is good.
-The syllable count and topic are good.
-The imagery and personification
are effective, and paint a
word picture of the snow
that came, but didn't stay very long.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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-That is quite an image,
and the presentation is good.
-The syllable count and topic are good.
-The imagery and personification
are effective, and paint a
word picture of the snow
that came, but didn't stay very long.
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Pam, for sharing my short poem and your kind praise.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Snow Visited Today, has twenty-three syllables in four lines and gives a nod to the fickle first snows which come for a time and disappear.
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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This naani, Snow Visited Today, has twenty-three syllables in four lines and gives a nod to the fickle first snows which come for a time and disappear.
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2020
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Thank you for sharing my Naani, Bill. Recently, the first snows of the season here were very brief.
