Echo in the Hallway
A girl defends herself from an intruder.3 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is my favorite line: "Janet ground her three-inch heel into the toe of the man's shoe." Although it sounds like nothing good happened after that. I can't quite put my finger on it but we the reader were waiting for something to happen. The ending was beyond me though. Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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This is my favorite line: "Janet ground her three-inch heel into the toe of the man's shoe." Although it sounds like nothing good happened after that. I can't quite put my finger on it but we the reader were waiting for something to happen. The ending was beyond me though. Great work.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
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Yeah, not a happy ending for this girl. Jack caught up with her. Thanks for the read and review.
Comment from Wendy G
Very vivid writing, and with an excellent twist at the end, even though it is horrific. The writer carries us along with our heart in our mouth. This is therefore engaging, and well-written. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Very vivid writing, and with an excellent twist at the end, even though it is horrific. The writer carries us along with our heart in our mouth. This is therefore engaging, and well-written. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read, review and the encouraging comments.
Comment from Ben B.
Whoa... so she died anyway? Grimm. Ok here is the mystery: was it her crooked finance who killed her or was her new boyfriend just as bad as he was?
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Whoa... so she died anyway? Grimm. Ok here is the mystery: was it her crooked finance who killed her or was her new boyfriend just as bad as he was?
Comment Written 12-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
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Thanks for the read and review. The answer is in the story, maybe.
