Renga Two
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Tempest at Sea
by dovemarie
Hello, Dove Marie,
Beautiful 7/7 couplet that fits previous chapter nicely. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Please add my author notes to your author notes. Thank you!
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets which are linked in succession by multiple poets. Only the first 5/7/5 is a haiku; the rest 5/7/5 stanzas are only restricted to syllable count. Renga is older than haiku.
Please, if you would like to add a chapter to this book of renga, read these instructions then copy and paste to your author notes. If you need help, please do not hesitate to contact Gypsy Blue Rose.
Steps to Post a Chapter:
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If the last poem is a 5/7/5 stanza, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 stanza. Write about the SAME THEME of the previous chapter but please don't REPEAT words.
Post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Tempest at Sea
by dovemarie
Hello, Dove Marie,
Beautiful 7/7 couplet that fits previous chapter nicely. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Please add my author notes to your author notes. Thank you!
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets which are linked in succession by multiple poets. Only the first 5/7/5 is a haiku; the rest 5/7/5 stanzas are only restricted to syllable count. Renga is older than haiku.
Please, if you would like to add a chapter to this book of renga, read these instructions then copy and paste to your author notes. If you need help, please do not hesitate to contact Gypsy Blue Rose.
Steps to Post a Chapter:
click on the ADD CHAPTER icon, located above the review box.
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 stanza, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 stanza. Write about the SAME THEME of the previous chapter but please don't REPEAT words.
Post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
(If you would like to read the previous chapters, copy and paste this link to your browser).
https://www.fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=39791
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Dear Gypsy, thank you for your review and comments. Unfortunately, I am not too familiar with all the ins and outs of computer technology, so I can't cut and paste your author notes to mine. Dove
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Masterful alliteration in W--bold imagery--fine contrast turbulence / peacefulness--a fresh take on the concept of calm after a storm.
HEADS UP--you forgot to copy the renga footnote instructions for the next person.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Masterful alliteration in W--bold imagery--fine contrast turbulence / peacefulness--a fresh take on the concept of calm after a storm.
HEADS UP--you forgot to copy the renga footnote instructions for the next person.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Dear Elizabeth, thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think this poem has done a great job of showing the peace after the storm, you did it with such a short poem which is impressive. Great job I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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I think this poem has done a great job of showing the peace after the storm, you did it with such a short poem which is impressive. Great job I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Dear Michael, thank you for your comments and review. Dove