Renga Two
Viewing comments for Prologue "Deciduous Trees"multi-author book number two
28 total reviews
Comment from Badger_29
Hey Jessie tell me you have a gift for writing these in this conveys a whole lot in short space. you have given a wonderful personification to the trees even given them emotion and tangible flavor. I like this and I would love to contribute.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hey Jessie tell me you have a gift for writing these in this conveys a whole lot in short space. you have given a wonderful personification to the trees even given them emotion and tangible flavor. I like this and I would love to contribute.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment Written 30-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2020
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Hello, Darren, you are welcome to add a chapter to our book of Renga. Just click add chapter and follow the instructions in my author notes.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ha -- boy am I a bit behind on my reviews, yeah? But I do love the beginning of the book here, my lady -- again, thanx so much for doing these for all of us to enjoy! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Ha -- boy am I a bit behind on my reviews, yeah? But I do love the beginning of the book here, my lady -- again, thanx so much for doing these for all of us to enjoy! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Yvette. I am grateful for the excellent review and kind words.
hug,
gypsy
Comment from nancyjam
I love the use of personification of the trees timidly disrobing, letting
their bright colored robes silently fall to the ground.
Wonderful imagery to give the reader a clear vision of a fall scene.Nicely done.
Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I love the use of personification of the trees timidly disrobing, letting
their bright colored robes silently fall to the ground.
Wonderful imagery to give the reader a clear vision of a fall scene.Nicely done.
Nancy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review, Nancy.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
What an exceptional addition to your Renga epic Gypsy, I was wondering how long it will go for? When you stop it I suppose. Beautifully written, this is an outstanding one. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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What an exceptional addition to your Renga epic Gypsy, I was wondering how long it will go for? When you stop it I suppose. Beautifully written, this is an outstanding one. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Renga books are 100 chapters long. Thank you very much for taking the time to review.
hugs,
gypsy
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Bless you Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola, Marival. This is beautiful. I loved this haiku starting off, the second book. I will certainly add to it.
The imagery is outstanding. Espero que todo esta bien contigo y con tu familia? Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Hola, Marival. This is beautiful. I loved this haiku starting off, the second book. I will certainly add to it.
The imagery is outstanding. Espero que todo esta bien contigo y con tu familia? Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Hola guapa, We won! Biden is our new president! I am so happy. We are all good here. My oldest daughter has a cold and she is going to have a covid test Monday just to be cautious. She doesn't have a fever.
Thank you very much for your lovely review and I look forward your chapter for the renga book. Stay safe. hugs
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Yes!!! Biden won. Isn't that just brilliant! I hope your daughter will be okay. Please do let me know. I have already posted my addition to the renga, but I haven't promoted it yet. Ulla:)))
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There is a problem with the link poems. I reviewed your poem and left notes for you.
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I've removed the poem, so it's no problem. I post one later and see if I get it in, in time before somebody else havs posted
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oh, no :( I love your poem, you are not sure you want to fix it? When you decide to write a chapter, if you go to the last one and click on add chapter, your place will be held. To see the whole book click on this link....
https://www.fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=39791
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It's hard to keep the stream of chapters going and some confusion is bound to happen, it's no problem. Please consider adding a chapter soon.
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That's what I did, and it didn't work. Somebody beat me to it. I have now edited and entered my poem in a site contest for a 5-7-5 poem instead. I'll try to add to the renga later. Ulla:)))
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
I very much like your late-Autumn poem and I think it is a strong contest entry.
Your last line is powerful, and I think, perfect in tying the poem together.
I generally like the personificaiton of nature and I think it works particularly well here.
Excellent work.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I very much like your late-Autumn poem and I think it is a strong contest entry.
Your last line is powerful, and I think, perfect in tying the poem together.
I generally like the personificaiton of nature and I think it works particularly well here.
Excellent work.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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thank you very much!
Comment from Mark Schardine
deciduous tress
clad in bright autumn palette --
timidly disrobed
They may be brightly dressed, but slowly, over time, they disrobe to leave nothing at all.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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deciduous tress
clad in bright autumn palette --
timidly disrobed
They may be brightly dressed, but slowly, over time, they disrobe to leave nothing at all.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 in addition to the multi-author Renga book about the trees around that seem to be temporarily disrobed during Autumn and Winter.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 in addition to the multi-author Renga book about the trees around that seem to be temporarily disrobed during Autumn and Winter.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the reference of trees and the coats they where, a great metaphor and your write is ambient and colourful, much enjoyed, a fine presentation, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I love the reference of trees and the coats they where, a great metaphor and your write is ambient and colourful, much enjoyed, a fine presentation, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Deciduous Trees", is short, succinct, and very much to the point. It was a pleasure to both read and review, this talented poet's work. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it, as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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"Deciduous Trees", is short, succinct, and very much to the point. It was a pleasure to both read and review, this talented poet's work. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it, as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
You're more than welcome.
God bless you, take care and keep safe!
the Duchess