Wistful Willows
a 3-6-9 poetic form33 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
I adore this poem. I like the use of alliteration and even rhyme. It follows the required 3-6-9 structure in all three stanzas. Why did this not win first place, only third place? Goodness knows!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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I adore this poem. I like the use of alliteration and even rhyme. It follows the required 3-6-9 structure in all three stanzas. Why did this not win first place, only third place? Goodness knows!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Hello Aiona, Thank you so much for this lovely review and sweet comments. You encourage me so much with your words. Knowing that you think it deserves first place is delightful!! May you have a lovely day today!!
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa
Yes, sitting in nature, especially under a tree, can make you remember the past. This shows us that everything on Earth is ineterwined. I like the use of alliteration for the first words of each stanza.
Congratulations on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Thanksgiving.
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Melissa
Yes, sitting in nature, especially under a tree, can make you remember the past. This shows us that everything on Earth is ineterwined. I like the use of alliteration for the first words of each stanza.
Congratulations on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Thanksgiving.
Joan
Comment Written 26-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2020
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Thank you sweet Joan. So glad you enjoyed this verse. I hope you have a lovely Thanksgiving Day too!!
Melissa
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Any time, Melissa
Joan
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I like your entry for the 3-6-9 contest. All those words that begin with a "w" in every single line are quite effective. You inspire me to suggest one teeny tiny,
"Wistfulness
will tug our hearts away
with thoughts of a gentle yesterday." ...( I suggest,
Wistfulness
wiggles our hearts away
with thoughts of a gentle yesterday.)
You've chosen beautiful artwork for your poem. I think this is a poem that's relaxing to read. If I was tired, I'd surely nod off to sleep.
Good Luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Hi Melissa,
I like your entry for the 3-6-9 contest. All those words that begin with a "w" in every single line are quite effective. You inspire me to suggest one teeny tiny,
"Wistfulness
will tug our hearts away
with thoughts of a gentle yesterday." ...( I suggest,
Wistfulness
wiggles our hearts away
with thoughts of a gentle yesterday.)
You've chosen beautiful artwork for your poem. I think this is a poem that's relaxing to read. If I was tired, I'd surely nod off to sleep.
Good Luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Hey there, KB. I loved reading your review and thoughts on this one... I will mull over the.. wiggle.. suggestion. :). I reread it and it does wisk one away wonderfully with wisps of wooziness... :). I think I need a nap. Haha. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely and elegant--delightful alliteration in W--flows gracefully in fine rhyme--masterfully structured--clever presentation with single-word openers--good luck!
Congrats on your prize--not surprised in the least! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Lovely and elegant--delightful alliteration in W--flows gracefully in fine rhyme--masterfully structured--clever presentation with single-word openers--good luck!
Congrats on your prize--not surprised in the least! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 08-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Hello Elizabeth! Thank you for your lovely review!
Melissa
Comment from Julie Sandy
I love the calming stillness of this poem it is very relaxed, I really enjoyed reading it.
Good luck in the 3-6-9 competition
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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I love the calming stillness of this poem it is very relaxed, I really enjoyed reading it.
Good luck in the 3-6-9 competition
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2020
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Thank you Julie.
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
Each segment could easily stand on its own as a 3-6-9 poem. But in triplicate, you linked them together in such nice way! And all those w-letter alliterations and subtle rhymes add to your overall presentation for this contest entry.
When I was a preteen, I would often climb (but not recline!) into my front yard's willow tree and read books on quiet summer days. The slight breeze was better than my non-AC home. LOL
Mark
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Melissa,
Each segment could easily stand on its own as a 3-6-9 poem. But in triplicate, you linked them together in such nice way! And all those w-letter alliterations and subtle rhymes add to your overall presentation for this contest entry.
When I was a preteen, I would often climb (but not recline!) into my front yard's willow tree and read books on quiet summer days. The slight breeze was better than my non-AC home. LOL
Mark
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Awww. Thank you Mark for this wonderful review... and I really enjoyed the mental image of you sitting in a willow with that soft breeze blowing by... nothing quite like it... my tree was a very large mimosa with a crook just for me :)
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
Your poem brought back a pleasant childhood memory. I use to sit under the shade of the old willow tree and write my one page stories. Your poem is beautiful, well-written, great word choice, description. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Your poem brought back a pleasant childhood memory. I use to sit under the shade of the old willow tree and write my one page stories. Your poem is beautiful, well-written, great word choice, description. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you Misty. I love the dreamy thought of sitting under a willow with flowing water nearby. I appreciate your lovely comments and I am so glad you like it. :)
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
Dear Melissa
How marvelous that you've incorporated meter, internal and end rhymes together with alliteration in this write. I feel like I'm rocking in a hammock under the rustling shade of
the feathery willow leaves, drowsily watching the river flow by while nostalgic dreams fill my head.
Ah the bitter sweet memories of past loves.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Dear Melissa
How marvelous that you've incorporated meter, internal and end rhymes together with alliteration in this write. I feel like I'm rocking in a hammock under the rustling shade of
the feathery willow leaves, drowsily watching the river flow by while nostalgic dreams fill my head.
Ah the bitter sweet memories of past loves.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Hello Julia. Thank you for this lovely review and taking me away with your comments to that river bank... oh so dreamy... ha!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
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LOL in Brazil there's a word for that wistful longing for an idealized past, " saudades".
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-6-9 poem about the wistful willows that always remind us of good times we had when were young and able to sit beneath the tree watching the water flowing by.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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A very well-written 3-6-9 poem about the wistful willows that always remind us of good times we had when were young and able to sit beneath the tree watching the water flowing by.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Hi Sandra... thanks so much!! I was hoping I had not overdone the W words. :). I appreciate your thoughts on this wistful one.
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Wistful Willows", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft, and skill, this talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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"Wistful Willows", is an extremely well-written, and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft, and skill, this talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Hi Duchess... thanks so much!! I was hoping I had not overdone the W words. :). I appreciate your thoughts on this wistful one.
Melissa
Hi Melissa....... you're very welcome!!
The 'W' words are fine.
God bless you, take care and stay safe!
the Duchess