A Crowded Mind
A Lonely World...16 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
I can see why this is a contest winner. You have touched ion a subject that is becoming more and more of a problem. Drugs, alcohol, PTSD, and a traumatic childhood are the main reason for this terrible situation. I don't see a solution to this problem in the near future.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I can see why this is a contest winner. You have touched ion a subject that is becoming more and more of a problem. Drugs, alcohol, PTSD, and a traumatic childhood are the main reason for this terrible situation. I don't see a solution to this problem in the near future.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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You are right, it's a terrible problem with no real solution in sight. It's also heartbreaking to witness. Thank you for reading.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a sad and touching poem that tugs at the heartstrings because it is so true. There is someone I know who was once a professional and now she walks the streets pulling her little cart behind her and wearing a huge overcoat and hat regardless of the weather. She used to come into the store where I once worked at take food and we let her, but we always paid for it. I'm told that she suffers from schizophrenia. I feel sad when I see her but she doesn't seem sad. She always smiles when I see her and I think she remembers me, but maybe it's just a front she projects.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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This is a sad and touching poem that tugs at the heartstrings because it is so true. There is someone I know who was once a professional and now she walks the streets pulling her little cart behind her and wearing a huge overcoat and hat regardless of the weather. She used to come into the store where I once worked at take food and we let her, but we always paid for it. I'm told that she suffers from schizophrenia. I feel sad when I see her but she doesn't seem sad. She always smiles when I see her and I think she remembers me, but maybe it's just a front she projects.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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It's interesting what you say about her not being sad. I ask my son sometimes if he's sad and the answer is always no...it's just me that's sad for him. Thank you so much for this insightful review.
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You are so welcome. It is strange isn't it. In a way, I guess it's a blessing that they feel whole within themselves and our sadness if for what we think they're missing out on.
Comment from RodG
It is easy to see why this poem won the contest. We quickly sympathize with the homeless woman who talks to someone she can't see and the Speaker who truly understands because she has a son who also hears voices all the time. You vividly describe this homeless woman, especially her face. Rod
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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It is easy to see why this poem won the contest. We quickly sympathize with the homeless woman who talks to someone she can't see and the Speaker who truly understands because she has a son who also hears voices all the time. You vividly describe this homeless woman, especially her face. Rod
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm going through a crisis with my son, so I reposted this to bring more awareness to the plight of the mentally ill. Thanks again.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written poem about the sad effects of mental health problems have on the person and those around them, whether family or strangers. Sorry to hear about your son. Aren't their medications that help.
I like the repetition in the first and last stanzas.
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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This is a well written poem about the sad effects of mental health problems have on the person and those around them, whether family or strangers. Sorry to hear about your son. Aren't their medications that help.
I like the repetition in the first and last stanzas.
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind words.
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like your poem. It says a lot about homeless people, who have no shoe laces or clothing, and also have no place to lie their weary head. Each year I try to clean out my closet and dresser drawers to help the homeless.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I like your poem. It says a lot about homeless people, who have no shoe laces or clothing, and also have no place to lie their weary head. Each year I try to clean out my closet and dresser drawers to help the homeless.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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That's wonderful. If everyone did that, it would be a tremendous help. Thank you for reading and for this great 6 star review. :)
Comment from K Arlington Andrews
Totally drawn into the life of this woman. Maybe because I ask the same questions. "Who did she talk to and what did she see?
How she acted did not scare me at all." I see the homeless and mentally ill people on the city streets everyday, and I think: "There but for the grace of God, go I" Thanks for sharing and All the Best, K
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Totally drawn into the life of this woman. Maybe because I ask the same questions. "Who did she talk to and what did she see?
How she acted did not scare me at all." I see the homeless and mentally ill people on the city streets everyday, and I think: "There but for the grace of God, go I" Thanks for sharing and All the Best, K
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for this great review. :)
Comment from kmoss
This poem has everything. It is my vote in this contest. Grieving is not always related to death. We grieve for the past. We also grieve for the current situations that surround us every day. But what can we do about it? What change can we do? The smallest thing to help the lost and unfortunate.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This poem has everything. It is my vote in this contest. Grieving is not always related to death. We grieve for the past. We also grieve for the current situations that surround us every day. But what can we do about it? What change can we do? The smallest thing to help the lost and unfortunate.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review and thought-provoking comments. I really appreciate the 6 stars. :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is such a moving poem. Its vividly descriptive lines provide a heart-wrenching look at those who not only have mental illnesses, but are also homeless, having no safe place to sleep, eat--to be!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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This is such a moving poem. Its vividly descriptive lines provide a heart-wrenching look at those who not only have mental illnesses, but are also homeless, having no safe place to sleep, eat--to be!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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My heart truly breaks for these people, I don't know of any solution. Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt story/poem about the homeless who often also have mental problems and are not trusting anyone around with anything. We can only imagine what they're going through.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt story/poem about the homeless who often also have mental problems and are not trusting anyone around with anything. We can only imagine what they're going through.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your insightful comments.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
As someone whose uncle talked to a person no one could see. I could emphasize with the writing of this homeless person.
Well done writing about the plight of the homeless and particularly of those with mental illness.
good luck in the contest.
mary
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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As someone whose uncle talked to a person no one could see. I could emphasize with the writing of this homeless person.
Well done writing about the plight of the homeless and particularly of those with mental illness.
good luck in the contest.
mary
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading. My son has suffered with mental illness since he was 18. It's heartbreaking. I appreciate your comments.
