Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 97 "Cold Winds of November"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding a chapter to the Renga with your couplet. I liked the "leaves" transforming into "spinning pinwheels". Cleo85's artwork is an intriguing match. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you for adding a chapter to the Renga with your couplet. I liked the "leaves" transforming into "spinning pinwheels". Cleo85's artwork is an intriguing match. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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I appreciate very much your reading and reviewing - thank you!
Comment from Lucy de Welles
This is beautiful, June! I think that the description is incorrect as this is a 7/7 to follow up Gypsy's 5/7/5. And Cindy did another 7/7 for the next chapter ...
Hope all is well with you,
Lucy
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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This is beautiful, June! I think that the description is incorrect as this is a 7/7 to follow up Gypsy's 5/7/5. And Cindy did another 7/7 for the next chapter ...
Hope all is well with you,
Lucy
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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I followed Gypsy?s instructions. She has been trying to reach Cindy to have her correct hers. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
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Maybe there can be an exception here. Cindy's is so lovely, and she really put herself out there to contribute it. Love triumphs over rules.
Isn't this renga book just the best thing? I've so enjoyed reading it, and the honor and pleasure of contributing. What a blessing it is.
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Maybe you should be talking to Gypsy about this. It?s her.book and I?m just the guest following the rules she loutlined.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, June,
Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our book of renga. We are nearing the end! How exciting. Your.chapter should be a couplet 7/7. I made a mistake and had to rearrange my chapters so maybe you were reading an old version.
Here are the latest chapters:
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Chapter ninety three by Gypsy Blue Rose
cool stream susurrus softly
smoothing sharp rocks as they go
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Chapter ninety four by Gypsy Blue Rose
doe drinks chilled water
in the early light of day
can't hear hunter steps
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Chapter ninety five by Lisa Wharton
ran along leaves crackled stream
I heard the nature's sound bite
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Chapter ninety six by Gypsy Blue Rose
golden barley field
sways intertwined with north wind
a storm a comin'
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Chapter ninety seven by June Sargent
autumn leaves drift by
as cold air clashes with warm -
colorful pinwheels
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I am sorry about the mess up. Please change your 5/7/5 to a couplet.
Thank you!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Hello, June,
Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our book of renga. We are nearing the end! How exciting. Your.chapter should be a couplet 7/7. I made a mistake and had to rearrange my chapters so maybe you were reading an old version.
Here are the latest chapters:
===========================
Chapter ninety three by Gypsy Blue Rose
cool stream susurrus softly
smoothing sharp rocks as they go
=================================
Chapter ninety four by Gypsy Blue Rose
doe drinks chilled water
in the early light of day
can't hear hunter steps
==================================
Chapter ninety five by Lisa Wharton
ran along leaves crackled stream
I heard the nature's sound bite
=================================
Chapter ninety six by Gypsy Blue Rose
golden barley field
sways intertwined with north wind
a storm a comin'
==================================
Chapter ninety seven by June Sargent
autumn leaves drift by
as cold air clashes with warm -
colorful pinwheels
==================================
I am sorry about the mess up. Please change your 5/7/5 to a couplet.
Thank you!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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I wondered why there was a change. I did base this on your previous post. Do you want me to change mine?
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Yes, please. I'm sorry about the changes. I have to figure out what to do with Cindy chapter. Tom said we can't make her take off her chapter. I hate it because I am responsible for the book and can't read hers! Sorry.
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I don?t know why you can?t contact Cindy. I would be willing to remove my couplet to keep the continuity - but would you be able to change the number of Cindy?s chapter? I will do whatever is necessary to make it work.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This picture has obviously inspired your wonderful 5-7-5 here as you brought the leaves to life as they are tossed about by Autumnal breezes, much enjoyed June, love Dolly x
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This picture has obviously inspired your wonderful 5-7-5 here as you brought the leaves to life as they are tossed about by Autumnal breezes, much enjoyed June, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this one!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ooooo... they are some of the most entertaining pinwheels, aren't they? What a lovely metaphor, June! ;) Thanx for sharing your chapter here, my lady -- a whole new perspective to watch those falling leaves! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Ooooo... they are some of the most entertaining pinwheels, aren't they? What a lovely metaphor, June! ;) Thanx for sharing your chapter here, my lady -- a whole new perspective to watch those falling leaves! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Glad you liked this addition to the book!
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
A most expressive and impressive post you created with this Renga chapter.
You ably captured the changing seasons with your middle line. 'Colorful pinwheels' is such an excellent description for our autumn leaves as they fall to the earth.
Mark
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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June,
A most expressive and impressive post you created with this Renga chapter.
You ably captured the changing seasons with your middle line. 'Colorful pinwheels' is such an excellent description for our autumn leaves as they fall to the earth.
Mark
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your glowing review and generous rating! I'm glad you could imagine the scenario I was aiming for. It's been blustery here lately and the pinwheels seemed fitting.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Renga poem (chapter) you have penned to go in the book. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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This is a very well written Renga poem (chapter) you have penned to go in the book. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love, Teri
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from royowen
The thermals that happen, particularly in the upper atmosphere are marvellous for eagles who sail on them beautifully, not so aeroplanes, well done June, great job, blessings Roy
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The thermals that happen, particularly in the upper atmosphere are marvellous for eagles who sail on them beautifully, not so aeroplanes, well done June, great job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
Comment from Carmen Ducharme
Form from the fallen leaves
It is a beautiful site .I wonder if this would work ? I've never written one so not sure if this would be correct ?Would it be?
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Form from the fallen leaves
It is a beautiful site .I wonder if this would work ? I've never written one so not sure if this would be correct ?Would it be?
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020