Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 93 "Cool Stream"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
8 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your addition to the Renga book. Your use of the abundant alliteration of "s's" was so satisfying in this couplet. The portrayal of autumn in the picture was just right. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your addition to the Renga book. Your use of the abundant alliteration of "s's" was so satisfying in this couplet. The portrayal of autumn in the picture was just right. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Joan.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, the comforting sound of a stream in the wilderness... no wonder they include it on the choices for most 'sleep machines'... ;) :) A wonderful follow-on here, Marival -- thanx for the relaxation this morning! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Oh, the comforting sound of a stream in the wilderness... no wonder they include it on the choices for most 'sleep machines'... ;) :) A wonderful follow-on here, Marival -- thanx for the relaxation this morning! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Yvette. Have a lovely day.
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Really like the "smoothing sharp rock" line. You inspired me to add a Nee chapter to it. Wow. We are almost at 100.
Good work.
I'm looking forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Really like the "smoothing sharp rock" line. You inspired me to add a Nee chapter to it. Wow. We are almost at 100.
Good work.
I'm looking forward to the next one.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your kind review and valuable feedback. Yes, we are almost at the end of this Renga book (100 verses) but I will start a new one. I hope you do add a chapter. Thank you.
hugs,
gypsy
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Mark Schardine
cool stream susurrus softly
smoothing sharp rocks as they go
A simply superb sounding of softly soothing smoothness. Not at all a sort of superfluous sensuality.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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cool stream susurrus softly
smoothing sharp rocks as they go
A simply superb sounding of softly soothing smoothness. Not at all a sort of superfluous sensuality.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem. Happy election day!
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
You can really hear your poem with all the "s" alliteration. Love that word, "susurrus" - and that gentle action is able to smooth rocks over time is a beautiful thing!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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You can really hear your poem with all the "s" alliteration. Love that word, "susurrus" - and that gentle action is able to smooth rocks over time is a beautiful thing!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes, I can hear that stream flowing and it is truly amazing how that gentle flow so continuously over years smooths off the rough edges.
Excellent addition to you book friend, Gypsy. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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Yes, I can hear that stream flowing and it is truly amazing how that gentle flow so continuously over years smooths off the rough edges.
Excellent addition to you book friend, Gypsy. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Gloria. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from roof35
This is a lovely addition to the Renga Multi-Author Book. The illustration is lovely, too, and pairs perfectly with your words with its soft cool colors. This is very nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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This is a lovely addition to the Renga Multi-Author Book. The illustration is lovely, too, and pairs perfectly with your words with its soft cool colors. This is very nicely done.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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Thank you
Comment from karenina
I love that word! I need to find a crossword puzzle... To drop "sussurus" casually into a conversation... I'm always amazed I could live this long and never hear a word before! Another excellent Renga addition... Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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I love that word! I need to find a crossword puzzle... To drop "sussurus" casually into a conversation... I'm always amazed I could live this long and never hear a word before! Another excellent Renga addition... Karenina
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much for the review, Karenina. Have a lovely day.
hugs,
gypsy