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sunburnt sky

3-5-3 Nature contest entry

16 total reviews 
Comment from Lucy de Welles
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Lovely 3/5/3. Sunburnt sky. Never thought about it like that before. Adds a different dimension of feeling to a sunset. "Lingers" is effectively used here. One feels that the timing of the exchange must be perfect. Wait...wait...wait...okay NOW!. The first star pops out and the pinkness recedes over the horizon.
Well done!
Lucy

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
    Lucy,

    THANKS! Methinks your commentary is more poetic than my few lines. I do appreciate your thoughts.

    Mark
Comment from J. Raphael
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Mark, you hit the mark here. Your words hit me in the head like a rock that was thrown by an admirer. You succeeded and your choice of picture sealed the deal!

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020
    J.R.

    So pleased you liked this post. Your comments rocked me! Artwork is typically from FanArt.

    Mark
Comment from L. Kalere
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I love the imagery of your 3-5-3. "Sunburnt sky" is wonderfully descriptive, and creative. Best of luck in the contest. I think you'll do very well.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2020

    Thanks for your review. I had some success with this post, but did not reach the top of the podium. I reduced my normal 5-7-5 syllabled poem to meet the exact 3-5-3 contest requirement. So pleased you liked my effort.

    Mark
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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Your use of personification will draw the reader in. It is as if the sun and stars have an agreement. There is no power struggle evident. It is just a smooth transition. This could serve as a strong metaphor. Well thought out.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks Liz! Appreciate your strong support for my thinking. Too bad the Dems and GOP could not align themselves similarly to the sun and stars agreement.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 03-Nov-2020
    Sadly true
Comment from Mia Twysted
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I am fascinated by the word "sunburnt" It makes me see how the sun touches the sky in a new way. It makes me think of the earth having a layer of skin around it.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks Mia! Do appreciate your review and stars.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello I'm anonymous,

Beautiful entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt contest. Lovely nature imagery. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Nice presentation. Yours is my favorite in the contest voting booth.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks Gypsy! Apparently for this contest we are not competitors (-; I do appreciate your support.
Comment from Paul Borders
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I cast my vote for your submission. I particularly like the font color you chose. It matches the mental image your entry creates. I hope you win this contest.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks Paul for your vote, but your comments mean more to me about how this poem affected you.
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao poet!

You now have three votes.

I love the word sunburnt .. it's very descriptive .

There is something bitter sweet in a sunset ..

They are tinted with beautiful warm hues but they are also announcing the end of yet another day.

You used this very short format well .. I think everyone has been moved seeing a sunset in their life.

I wish you well in the contest!

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks Tempeste! So pleased you liked this shorter one, a syllable reduction from my typical 5-7-5 (-;

    Ciao!
Comment from sammielwf
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Mystery Writer,
There is nothing that can hold a candle to the sun swept sky in the afternoon..
or the beauty of the sunlight melting into evening!
Wonderful imagery and well written.
Sammielwf

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks so much for your generous remarks. I think our Fall sunsets are the more spectacular views (-:
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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This poem is a great entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt. There is truth in a few words. Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2020


reply by the author on 03-Nov-2020
    Thanks! I hope other reviewers and voters will mimic your review. My normal 5-7-5 short format shrunk for this contest (-;
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 03-Nov-2020
    You did well!