The Las Vegas Angel
Disguised contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from LyndaS
Wow! Giving you a sixer for the creepy factor! This is awesome. Did not expect the cop to be the serial killer! Nice story development and you did a great job in 500 words. Good luck in the booth! Lynda
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Wow! Giving you a sixer for the creepy factor! This is awesome. Did not expect the cop to be the serial killer! Nice story development and you did a great job in 500 words. Good luck in the booth! Lynda
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review and giant sixer, Lynda. Yeah, I definitely had to get the creepy factor in there. lol I dearly appreciate the generous rating. I'm glad you liked this.
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Ron
Comment from LJbutterfly
This was a good cob story with all of the appropriate clues. When you said the perp was six feet tall, I suspected a man. When you said she weighed 140 pounds, I knew it would have to be an awfully thin man. When you mentioned lipstick, I was back to it's a woman. And then POW! I never expected it to be you, the story teller. Very creative. Great story.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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This was a good cob story with all of the appropriate clues. When you said the perp was six feet tall, I suspected a man. When you said she weighed 140 pounds, I knew it would have to be an awfully thin man. When you mentioned lipstick, I was back to it's a woman. And then POW! I never expected it to be you, the story teller. Very creative. Great story.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Lorraine. You were the second one to mention that she was six feet tall so I made him a little shorter. I really appreciate the generous. I'm glad you liked this dark little tale. Have yourself a wonderful day.
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Ron
Comment from L. Kalere
An enjoyable read...although I was suspicious about a 6 ft tall woman. It was well written, and the dialogue was believable. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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An enjoyable read...although I was suspicious about a 6 ft tall woman. It was well written, and the dialogue was believable. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, L. Yeah, I went and changed her height to being a little shorter. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from equestrik
What a creative bit of work with both the iage you put together as well as your stories. The one hing that stood out is the use of 'that' when it should have been 'who' in a couple of places but a compelling and well done story.
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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What a creative bit of work with both the iage you put together as well as your stories. The one hing that stood out is the use of 'that' when it should have been 'who' in a couple of places but a compelling and well done story.
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Equestrik. Yeah, I wrote this when I was tired. I'm surprised there weren't more mistakes. lol I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Bill Pinder
Very clever writing with a flash fiction ending. You did a great job of setting the reader up for the surprise ending. You also did a perfect job of matching the created picture with your story. Bill
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Very clever writing with a flash fiction ending. You did a great job of setting the reader up for the surprise ending. You also did a perfect job of matching the created picture with your story. Bill
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Bill. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
