Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
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Comment from equestrik
I think that you have written some thought provoking words here as well as some wise truths for sure. I think this kind of write is important and I hope you get a lots of readers reading.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I think that you have written some thought provoking words here as well as some wise truths for sure. I think this kind of write is important and I hope you get a lots of readers reading.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the Time to Read, Rate and Review this poem offering. Blessings to you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very deep and descriptive offering of the current state of things in our world. You have strong rhymes but your rhythm is difficult to find or follow... Perhaps less random capitalization? Can sort of see what you were trying to do, but it would be better to let the overall verse speak for itself. Wish we could find a 'togetherness' again... :) Thanx for sharing this afternoon!;)
P.S. Consider enlarging the font as it is quite difficult to read... :) :) :)
all War's in --> all wars in
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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A very deep and descriptive offering of the current state of things in our world. You have strong rhymes but your rhythm is difficult to find or follow... Perhaps less random capitalization? Can sort of see what you were trying to do, but it would be better to let the overall verse speak for itself. Wish we could find a 'togetherness' again... :) Thanx for sharing this afternoon!;)
P.S. Consider enlarging the font as it is quite difficult to read... :) :) :)
all War's in --> all wars in
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the Time to Read, Rate and Review this poem offering.