Raptor Takes Winter Flight
Haiku ('bove snowy mountains)4 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Raptor Takes Flight, has the right set up and finds the worst image of a hawk ever created representing a bird looking for a snack before hitting the hay.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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This 5-7-5, Raptor Takes Flight, has the right set up and finds the worst image of a hawk ever created representing a bird looking for a snack before hitting the hay.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2020
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Bill,
I think the image is of the raptor feeding his chicks in their high aerie (-;
Regardless, thanks for your review.
Mark
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco!
I just read your entry on the contest page and I felt it was something you would write.
And bingo I was right ...
.. raptors like hawks hunt mainly at dawn or in the evening ..twilight
Only owl hunt at night
reconnaissance ..is a great word ...described to the T what hawks do .. they circle and observe their territory for prey , intruders..
Twilight melts into darkness .. I love the verb ...melts ... used here ..it's unusual and it appeals and also it links to the first part ..snowy mountains ..
This is a perfect 5-7-5 .. you have truly mastered this format.!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Ciao Marco!
I just read your entry on the contest page and I felt it was something you would write.
And bingo I was right ...
.. raptors like hawks hunt mainly at dawn or in the evening ..twilight
Only owl hunt at night
reconnaissance ..is a great word ...described to the T what hawks do .. they circle and observe their territory for prey , intruders..
Twilight melts into darkness .. I love the verb ...melts ... used here ..it's unusual and it appeals and also it links to the first part ..snowy mountains ..
This is a perfect 5-7-5 .. you have truly mastered this format.!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thanks Tempeste for catching me (-; So pleased you liked my phraseology for this 5-7-5 post. Even with your compliments, methinks I am not yet a master of this format, but I do try (to improve every day).
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Ciao !
You have two votes now ..
Your entry should do well.
Keep safe!
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
Very nice poem.
It meets the haiku format perfectly.
I like the flow of the language and the imagery.
The artwork adds a nice element.
Good luck if this is in a contest.
Keep up the nice work.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Very nice poem.
It meets the haiku format perfectly.
I like the flow of the language and the imagery.
The artwork adds a nice element.
Good luck if this is in a contest.
Keep up the nice work.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thanks Cynthia for your comments for my contest entry. I appreciate your remarks.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thanks Buddy!
I do appreciate your reviews of my short poems.
Stay safe. Keep healthy. Do vote!
