Harold Jenkins' Ghost
Ghost Story/Poem contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from michele will
Very clever. There was a wonderful cadence and of course an " oh no" ending. I am especially impressed with the photo. Did you create it yourself using photoshop?
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Very clever. There was a wonderful cadence and of course an " oh no" ending. I am especially impressed with the photo. Did you create it yourself using photoshop?
Comment Written 01-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Hey, Michele, hi. Thank you for the great review. Yes, I photoshop almost all my own artwork. I find pics on the internet and combine them to get the exact picture I'm wanting. If you liked this one, I'm sure there's a few you'd like in my portfolio. You're welcome to check them out if you're interested. I use a free program called GIMP rather than Photoshop but it's pretty well the same thing. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. I really wrote the whole story around the silly ending. Lol. Have a great night.
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Ron
Comment from LisaMay
I wonder whether the prompt's directive "a ghost story of any length" influenced your ending? Seeing a ghost's schlong would provide me with immeasurable delight... as did your serious turned silly poem.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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I wonder whether the prompt's directive "a ghost story of any length" influenced your ending? Seeing a ghost's schlong would provide me with immeasurable delight... as did your serious turned silly poem.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Lol. Yes, actually the whole story was written around the dumb ending. I had to come up with some story that led to the guy being naked the whole while. Lol. Just me trying to think outside the box again after I've had a couple shots. Thank you for the great review, Lisa. Hope all is well on your side of the world.
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Ron
Comment from pome lover
well, you fooled me.
that was very good - perfect meter, and rhyme telling a mesmerizing ghost story - but I thought you were going to say that when the guy found the treasure and he and his wife were going to keep it, it made the old man angry and he did something "dastardly" to them. (though what, I don't know)
Good job.
pome lover
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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well, you fooled me.
that was very good - perfect meter, and rhyme telling a mesmerizing ghost story - but I thought you were going to say that when the guy found the treasure and he and his wife were going to keep it, it made the old man angry and he did something "dastardly" to them. (though what, I don't know)
Good job.
pome lover
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Lol. Yeah, I have to admit, I wrote the whole piece just to lead up to the silly ending of him being naked each time he showed up. When I got to the end, I gave thought to changing it but decided just to keep rolling with my first idea. Thank you for the great review and gracious stars, Pome Lover. I'm glad you liked the piece, even with the ridiculous ending. Have yourself a great day.
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Ron
Comment from Boogienights
A funny twist to a spooky tale. I never heard of a naked ghost before, but I wouldn't mind seeing one. In fact, I've only seen my dads ghost and have longed to see other spirits. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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A funny twist to a spooky tale. I never heard of a naked ghost before, but I wouldn't mind seeing one. In fact, I've only seen my dads ghost and have longed to see other spirits. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the great review and for throwing the contest, Boogie. I had fun with it. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you like my little tale.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You had me mesmerized with your skillfully-written, SUPERB ghost story! Plot development, rhyming and metrical patterns, etc., all are excellent. Wow! That's a shocking ending. I'm still laughing!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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You had me mesmerized with your skillfully-written, SUPERB ghost story! Plot development, rhyming and metrical patterns, etc., all are excellent. Wow! That's a shocking ending. I'm still laughing!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Janice. I really appreciate the generous rating. I'm glad you liked the piece and had a chuckle at my silly ending. I hope you have a great weekend. Thank you again.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Well done! Not only in the rhythming but in the story itself. You made it fun and clever and surprised the reader in the end.
It was expected to be the typical haunting story and you put a far different twist on it.
Excellent, you got my six.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Well done! Not only in the rhythming but in the story itself. You made it fun and clever and surprised the reader in the end.
It was expected to be the typical haunting story and you put a far different twist on it.
Excellent, you got my six.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and giant sixer, Mary. I actually built this whole piece around this silly ending. I was just in one of those moods. lol I dearly appreciate the kind comments and generous rating. I'm glad you liked my little story. I hope you have yourself a wonderful weekend and thank you again.
Comment from LyndaS
I love a great story in a poem and this is awesome. Also enjoy a good ghost story. How fun to have a ghost in your new home that shows you where his stolen stash is. Love the art! Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I love a great story in a poem and this is awesome. Also enjoy a good ghost story. How fun to have a ghost in your new home that shows you where his stolen stash is. Love the art! Well done!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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lol Yeah, that would be awesome to have a rich ghost show you where his hidden treasure is. Thank you so much for the giant sixer, Lynda. I dearly appreciate the great review and generous stars. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Thank you again.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The last stanza was hilarious. I enjoyed the entire poem. I love how you share a story with your poem. Your buildup of the story is strong. The poem is easy to read thanks to the formatting and the rhyme.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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The last stanza was hilarious. I enjoyed the entire poem. I love how you share a story with your poem. Your buildup of the story is strong. The poem is easy to read thanks to the formatting and the rhyme.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review, Michael. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind comments, friend. I'm glad you liked my little story with the ridiculous ending. I hope you have a great weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile with this cleverly put together story of this ghost and I was thoroughly entertained. Great rhymes and well chosen words made this poem flow perfectly and it was a sheer joy to read, a WINNER for me!
one query?
Did you mean "shuddered" in this line?
and shuttered at the sight.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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You made me smile with this cleverly put together story of this ghost and I was thoroughly entertained. Great rhymes and well chosen words made this poem flow perfectly and it was a sheer joy to read, a WINNER for me!
one query?
Did you mean "shuddered" in this line?
and shuttered at the sight.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Dolly. And thank you for catching the goof. Yes, I did mean shudder. I fixed it. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked my little ghost story. I hope you have yourself a wonderful weekend and thank you again.
Comment from blondie560
I chuckled out loud at the last verse. So not all ghosts are bad. It's funny how rumors of haunted places get started, but I've never seen or thought of a ghost being where I'm at. And really what could a ghost do to harm you anyway? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I chuckled out loud at the last verse. So not all ghosts are bad. It's funny how rumors of haunted places get started, but I've never seen or thought of a ghost being where I'm at. And really what could a ghost do to harm you anyway? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Blondie. Yeah, I've wondered that myself. How can a ghost that can't physically touch you actually harm you? lol I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you had a chuckle at my silly ending. I hope you have a great weekend and thank you again.
