The In-Betweens
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Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very good rhyming and a very good message to the reader. In saying out loud it even sounds even better to uplift your reader.
I enjoy your invitation to reader to enjoy the day.
Well done
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Very good rhyming and a very good message to the reader. In saying out loud it even sounds even better to uplift your reader.
I enjoy your invitation to reader to enjoy the day.
Well done
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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thank you for your review
Comment from equestrik
This is a creative write and it is an uplifting write for sure. I think your wordage and rhyming are very creative and i wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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This is a creative write and it is an uplifting write for sure. I think your wordage and rhyming are very creative and i wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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thank you very much
Comment from lyenochka
I like your alluding to Dr. Seuss with the repeated first words of some of the lines (a tool called anaphora). But most of all, I appreciate that you didn't deny the low points of life nor did you take us to some fantasy-level of delight and unobtainable joy. You drew our attention to the simple everyday joys and blessings in the In-Between.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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I like your alluding to Dr. Seuss with the repeated first words of some of the lines (a tool called anaphora). But most of all, I appreciate that you didn't deny the low points of life nor did you take us to some fantasy-level of delight and unobtainable joy. You drew our attention to the simple everyday joys and blessings in the In-Between.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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thank you for an excellent and thoughtful review
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i love Dr Seuss. thank you for seeing that in my poetry
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I hope you do well. You had my vote!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Loved the message and the rhymes. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Loved the message and the rhymes. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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thank you 13
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written uplifting poem about not always have the best or be left with nothing. Sometimes we in between disaster and success at least we are alive and still tryour our best.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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A very well-written uplifting poem about not always have the best or be left with nothing. Sometimes we in between disaster and success at least we are alive and still tryour our best.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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yes, sometimes you find little pockets of goodness. thank you for your review
Comment from Pantygynt
Having described the reasons for feeling down in the dumps the second part of this poem provides the antidote, known collectively as the 'in-betweens'. These are the pick-me-ups that make life worth living again. Some good ideas in here too.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Having described the reasons for feeling down in the dumps the second part of this poem provides the antidote, known collectively as the 'in-betweens'. These are the pick-me-ups that make life worth living again. Some good ideas in here too.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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thank you for your lovely review
Comment from Cass Carlton
This piece strikes a chord with me. How often have I sat wondering where my life went, full of sadness and grey thoughts when some small, magical event changed everything. Like the time my son came home from school with Whooping Cough. I was worried sick about how to get him to a doctor when my neighbour called in and said how she'd heard he was ill and she'd take me into town to the doctor's surgery. We lived in a farmhouse some distance from the town and my car had broken down. Her kindness was just what I needed to get my feet under me again. So, I applaud the sentiments in this poem. It's the little things that matter.
Cheers Cass
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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This piece strikes a chord with me. How often have I sat wondering where my life went, full of sadness and grey thoughts when some small, magical event changed everything. Like the time my son came home from school with Whooping Cough. I was worried sick about how to get him to a doctor when my neighbour called in and said how she'd heard he was ill and she'd take me into town to the doctor's surgery. We lived in a farmhouse some distance from the town and my car had broken down. Her kindness was just what I needed to get my feet under me again. So, I applaud the sentiments in this poem. It's the little things that matter.
Cheers Cass
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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so very glad you like the sentiments here. and i thank you for the high review/ stars. so wonderful to receive
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I like the idea of being in between as it makes me think I have friends both sides and being in the middle sounds very comfortable to me, a fun write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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I like the idea of being in between as it makes me think I have friends both sides and being in the middle sounds very comfortable to me, a fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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So true, I had not thought of it that way! i think you nailed it. if you dont mind, id like to edit that last line.
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the last line is perfect now and reflects what i wanted it to say, thanks to you
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Glad you were inspired x x x
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you are s genius, this is precisely right, now i am happy with it.
