Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 89 "Winter Dreams Come True"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
9 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
A lovely little poem reminding ask the reason for winter. As a young child I felt sad when thinking that plants were dying... once I learned that this it's time for rest and regeneration, I embraced the blessings of winter.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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A lovely little poem reminding ask the reason for winter. As a young child I felt sad when thinking that plants were dying... once I learned that this it's time for rest and regeneration, I embraced the blessings of winter.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, seaglass. I so appreciate your lovely review. Ulla:)))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Winter Dreams Come True
by Ulla
Hello, Ulla,
Beautiful entry for the Renga book. Your couplet fits well with the 5/7/5. Would you please add the instructions to your author notes?
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets which are linked in succession by multiple poets. Only the first 5/7/5 is a haiku; the rest 5/7/5 stanzas are only restricted to syllable count. Renga is older than haiku.
Please, if you would like to add a chapter to this book of renga, read these instructions then copy and paste to your author notes. If you need help, please do not hesitate to contact Gypsy Blue Rose.
Steps to Post a Chapter:
click on the ADD CHAPTER icon, located above the review box.
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 stanza, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 stanza. Write about the SAME THEME of the previous chapter but please don't REPEAT words.
Post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
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Thank you!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Winter Dreams Come True
by Ulla
Hello, Ulla,
Beautiful entry for the Renga book. Your couplet fits well with the 5/7/5. Would you please add the instructions to your author notes?
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets which are linked in succession by multiple poets. Only the first 5/7/5 is a haiku; the rest 5/7/5 stanzas are only restricted to syllable count. Renga is older than haiku.
Please, if you would like to add a chapter to this book of renga, read these instructions then copy and paste to your author notes. If you need help, please do not hesitate to contact Gypsy Blue Rose.
Steps to Post a Chapter:
click on the ADD CHAPTER icon, located above the review box.
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 stanza, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 stanza. Write about the SAME THEME of the previous chapter but please don't REPEAT words.
Post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
(If you would like to read the previous chapters, copy and paste this link to your browser).
https://www.fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=39516
Thank you!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much. Marival. I will add the notes. I'm glad you liked it. Ulla:)))
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I'm so ready to watch it snow. It snowed a little bit the other day. However, I was at work and missed it. Today it's raining, and the rain is nice, but I'm ready for the snow. Your poem just emphasized that for me.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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I'm so ready to watch it snow. It snowed a little bit the other day. However, I was at work and missed it. Today it's raining, and the rain is nice, but I'm ready for the snow. Your poem just emphasized that for me.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Hi. Thank you so very much for a great review, and I'm glad you liked it. I will have to admit that I hate snow and winter in general. I'm a warm weather person, and fortunately I live where we have hot summers and very mild winters. Ulla:)))
Comment from estory
You caught the sense of the softness and the peacefulness of the snow falling and then tied it in with the sleep of winter, tied it in to a human experience. There's a great oriental feel to this, nice balance, nice musical elements to the language and a strong nature image. estory
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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You caught the sense of the softness and the peacefulness of the snow falling and then tied it in with the sleep of winter, tied it in to a human experience. There's a great oriental feel to this, nice balance, nice musical elements to the language and a strong nature image. estory
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, estory. What a great review! Ulla:)))
Comment from Gloria ....
A beautiful addition to the Renga book, Ulla. The cool crispness of winter is delivered with atmospheric intensity while at the same time leaving room for motion.
Many thanks for sharing today. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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A beautiful addition to the Renga book, Ulla. The cool crispness of winter is delivered with atmospheric intensity while at the same time leaving room for motion.
Many thanks for sharing today. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, Gloria and for your lovely remarks. I so appreciate it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Ric Myworld
Winter dreams come true, but only if you don't get caught out barefooted in your PJ's freezing your butt off. Snuggled up under a mountain of blankets listening to the wind whistle, knowing you're safe inside. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Winter dreams come true, but only if you don't get caught out barefooted in your PJ's freezing your butt off. Snuggled up under a mountain of blankets listening to the wind whistle, knowing you're safe inside. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Hahaha, very true, Ric. Thank you so much. Ulla:)))
Comment from Mistydawn
That hasn't happened here yet, but it probably isn't that far off. Your poem is well-written. Your great description paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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That hasn't happened here yet, but it probably isn't that far off. Your poem is well-written. Your great description paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thanks a lot, Misty, and it won't even happen where I live. But I grew up in Scandinavia where it would happen in a few weeks time. I don't miss it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Cindy Decker
Ulla:
This is such a tender poem about the painful transition from the three stellar seasons, then onto winter--which is dreadful, except for a handful of holidays occurring throughout this time.
Exceptional work.
Good luck,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Ulla:
This is such a tender poem about the painful transition from the three stellar seasons, then onto winter--which is dreadful, except for a handful of holidays occurring throughout this time.
Exceptional work.
Good luck,
Cindy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much. Cindy. I'm so glad you liked it. I'm like you, I'm not a winter person at all. Ulla:)))
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding to the Renga book. Your 7-7 couplet captures the mood perfectly. (I think "fall" does not need an "s" in the first line." The artwork is quite striking as well. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thank you for adding to the Renga book. Your 7-7 couplet captures the mood perfectly. (I think "fall" does not need an "s" in the first line." The artwork is quite striking as well. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thanks a lot, Joan.The 's' is away from falls. Thanks a lot for pointing it out. I'm glad you liked it. Ulla:)))
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I am glad my review was helpful. More smiles- Joan