The Young and the Tired Hearts
Never tire of making a wish...18 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Sedoka about the night sky filled with shining stars touching our hearts to see them and we remember the wishes we still waiting for.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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A very well-written Sedoka about the night sky filled with shining stars touching our hearts to see them and we remember the wishes we still waiting for.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thanks much for your review.
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
This is an interesting poem and meets the requirements of Sedoka. I find I like Sedoka better than Haiku; it gives you a chance to say a little more.
The artwork works very well.
I especially like the title; it speaks to the contrast between the hope and awe of young people vs. the dissapointment of older folks.
It seems to me, though, that feeing wonder is never never wasted. I think it is worth the price of admission.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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This is an interesting poem and meets the requirements of Sedoka. I find I like Sedoka better than Haiku; it gives you a chance to say a little more.
The artwork works very well.
I especially like the title; it speaks to the contrast between the hope and awe of young people vs. the dissapointment of older folks.
It seems to me, though, that feeing wonder is never never wasted. I think it is worth the price of admission.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for the awesome review!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some of my wishes came true in life so I have no complaints. Without the hope and wishing we often fail to see the positive side of life, this is an uplifting and praiseworthy write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Some of my wishes came true in life so I have no complaints. Without the hope and wishing we often fail to see the positive side of life, this is an uplifting and praiseworthy write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for the awesome review!
Comment from LisaMay
What a wonderful poem - spanning the time of youthful stargazing, wishing on a star, to the more jaded reality of maturity when we realise that we have to make our own luck. (To wonder is not always a waste... you never know when a wish may be granted.)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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What a wonderful poem - spanning the time of youthful stargazing, wishing on a star, to the more jaded reality of maturity when we realise that we have to make our own luck. (To wonder is not always a waste... you never know when a wish may be granted.)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for your insightful and encouraging review!
Comment from AnnieDawn
This poem follows the requirements exactly. Both stanzas follow the same subject with different perspectives and the syllable count is perfect. Great job on this and it makes sense. So many do not. I liked reading it and it should do well in the contest. I wish you luck.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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This poem follows the requirements exactly. Both stanzas follow the same subject with different perspectives and the syllable count is perfect. Great job on this and it makes sense. So many do not. I liked reading it and it should do well in the contest. I wish you luck.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for your wonderfully encouraging review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This sedoka, The Young and Tired Hearts, has the right formatting and sighs at what, for a moment, seems like misdirected prayers.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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This sedoka, The Young and Tired Hearts, has the right formatting and sighs at what, for a moment, seems like misdirected prayers.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Gloria ....
I love the futility of this fine sedoka. While the poet admires the massive natural beauty, and the yearning of the human heart, there is a hopelessness in such wanting.
This is a superb entry into this contest and I wish you much luck in the booths.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I love the futility of this fine sedoka. While the poet admires the massive natural beauty, and the yearning of the human heart, there is a hopelessness in such wanting.
This is a superb entry into this contest and I wish you much luck in the booths.
Gloria
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you!!
Comment from lancellot
Very good. The contrast of opposites, using similar words and points of view between the two stanza is perfectly done. It almost seem like the first belonged to the young and the second to the old. Time changes us and our perspective on hope.
Well crafted. A great entry.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Very good. The contrast of opposites, using similar words and points of view between the two stanza is perfectly done. It almost seem like the first belonged to the young and the second to the old. Time changes us and our perspective on hope.
Well crafted. A great entry.
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you - I am so glad you found what I was 'going for'!!
