The Young and the Tired Hearts
Never tire of making a wish...18 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, but there is some joy in just the wonder and perhaps it wasn't years that was wasted. Beautiful sedoka which gives both a physical admiration for the stars and a philosophical view of life and unfulfilled wishes.
Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Ah, but there is some joy in just the wonder and perhaps it wasn't years that was wasted. Beautiful sedoka which gives both a physical admiration for the stars and a philosophical view of life and unfulfilled wishes.
Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for your review on this one, Helen -- these are a bit of a challenge and you know that I enjoy the 'shorties'... ;) :) :) Take care and thanx for YOU! ;) Yvette
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The imagery in this poem is vivid. The reader will be drawn in by your allusion. You could have many sweaters hanging with many pockets filled with stars and even Cargo pants filling cupboards, filled with stars in many more pockets AND still there will be stars in the sky. What a fun concept. I'm voting for this one.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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The imagery in this poem is vivid. The reader will be drawn in by your allusion. You could have many sweaters hanging with many pockets filled with stars and even Cargo pants filling cupboards, filled with stars in many more pockets AND still there will be stars in the sky. What a fun concept. I'm voting for this one.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in on this one, Liz -- always good to hear from you! ;) Have a great rest of the week and take care out there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mia Twysted
This makes me think of all the wishes I have made over the years and recall how many of them have come true. The picture you have with this piece is beautiful.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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This makes me think of all the wishes I have made over the years and recall how many of them have come true. The picture you have with this piece is beautiful.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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So glad to hear a 'smile' in your pen! Thanks so much for your encouraging review!
Comment from equestrik
This bit of writing is beautiful. It has a nostalgic and sureal quality as we at first say, "Yay" for wishing and hoping, then take us to a cinisism as hopes are felt to have been wasted. A very deep and thought provoking write.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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This bit of writing is beautiful. It has a nostalgic and sureal quality as we at first say, "Yay" for wishing and hoping, then take us to a cinisism as hopes are felt to have been wasted. A very deep and thought provoking write.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thank you, thank you so very much for completely understanding my offering, equestik - that means just as much as those lovely stars! Yes, we are brought to a bit of cynicism in our later years, aren't we? But we can try and hold on to a bit of that childhood wishing... if only for a warmer day tomorrow! Thank you again.
Comment from Susanjohn
Just keep on hoping and wishing! Nice job on this Sedaka! A clever take on wish I may, wish I might.. :-) Perfect illustration to go along with. An enjoyable read. Thank you. :-)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Just keep on hoping and wishing! Nice job on this Sedaka! A clever take on wish I may, wish I might.. :-) Perfect illustration to go along with. An enjoyable read. Thank you. :-)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for your encouraging review!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Beautiful entry for the
Sedoka Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. It flows nicely.
It's a bitter sweet poem about wishing upon a star...or many and feeling disappointed.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Beautiful entry for the
Sedoka Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. It flows nicely.
It's a bitter sweet poem about wishing upon a star...or many and feeling disappointed.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thanks much for your encouraging review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Sedoka Poem writing prompt.
This short piece gives the two perspectives very nicely.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Sedoka Poem writing prompt.
This short piece gives the two perspectives very nicely.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much for your review.
Comment from Boogienights
How sad. Maybe your true hearts desire lay not in the stars, but here on earth. One should never give up, wishes can come true, it sometimes takes awhile. Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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How sad. Maybe your true hearts desire lay not in the stars, but here on earth. One should never give up, wishes can come true, it sometimes takes awhile. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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It's not personal - just a contest. Thanks for your review, Boogie!
Comment from jaded831
You meet the criteria. Your poem reflects how we all feel, wishing on stars for a better tomorrow, while we wonder if it is all just worthless. Time will tell. Until then stay safe and pray.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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You meet the criteria. Your poem reflects how we all feel, wishing on stars for a better tomorrow, while we wonder if it is all just worthless. Time will tell. Until then stay safe and pray.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thanks much for your great review.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I like the contest entry and like the different perspectives I read between the two stanzas. The overall presentation is beautiful (italics, colors); the artwork was well chosen, representing both adult & child, each with their own thoughts of wishing upon a star.
Excellent contest entry.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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I like the contest entry and like the different perspectives I read between the two stanzas. The overall presentation is beautiful (italics, colors); the artwork was well chosen, representing both adult & child, each with their own thoughts of wishing upon a star.
Excellent contest entry.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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Thanks much for your great review today.
