The Secret of Happiness!
A 15 Word Poem; Give, but expect nothing in return132 total reviews
Comment from Ann Marie Anglin
Such a beautiful sentiment. If only more people could give and expect nothing in return, the world would be a kinder, gentler place. Wonderful contest entry. All the best, Ann Marie
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Such a beautiful sentiment. If only more people could give and expect nothing in return, the world would be a kinder, gentler place. Wonderful contest entry. All the best, Ann Marie
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Cedar
The things that you list are all good advice to help us get through this life. If we had more people who would actually do these things the world would be a much better place. Good luck...Bill
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The things that you list are all good advice to help us get through this life. If we had more people who would actually do these things the world would be a much better place. Good luck...Bill
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO POET: I like your work here. It reminds me of a passage in our Holy Bible at: PSALMS chapter 75 and verse 1. "We give thanks to you O God, we give thanks For Your wondrous works declare that Your name is near." I am a seer. This is how I see thanksgiving. And I'm happy about it. Well done, poet. God bless your generous heart. Cordially: rhonnie69.
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HELLO POET: I like your work here. It reminds me of a passage in our Holy Bible at: PSALMS chapter 75 and verse 1. "We give thanks to you O God, we give thanks For Your wondrous works declare that Your name is near." I am a seer. This is how I see thanksgiving. And I'm happy about it. Well done, poet. God bless your generous heart. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Lulube
This is certainly a tricky style. Just getting the poem in 15 words is creative but then in 25 syllables, who came up with this style? lol Great message, I'm a believer in this theory.
good luck in the contest
lulube
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This is certainly a tricky style. Just getting the poem in 15 words is creative but then in 25 syllables, who came up with this style? lol Great message, I'm a believer in this theory.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from LaFrance
Your acrostic poem is well structured and has a nice flow of inspirational words that have a nice rhyme and rhythm. I do not if it is my computer but the picture was blurry? Good luck in the contest.
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Your acrostic poem is well structured and has a nice flow of inspirational words that have a nice rhyme and rhythm. I do not if it is my computer but the picture was blurry? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from dragonpoet
This seer is very smart. Happiness is in helping others and not in being greedy. Though money can buy to nice vacations and fun, if you don't share it, you won't be truly happy is what she is alluding to.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
Have a great weekend.
dragonpoet
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This seer is very smart. Happiness is in helping others and not in being greedy. Though money can buy to nice vacations and fun, if you don't share it, you won't be truly happy is what she is alluding to.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
Have a great weekend.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi,
A lovely image choice and chosen quote to base your poetry on.
The words are very wise indeed but I wonder why humanity finds this concept so hard to deliver.
The contest rules are applied to the poem and some sage advice as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
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Hi,
A lovely image choice and chosen quote to base your poetry on.
The words are very wise indeed but I wonder why humanity finds this concept so hard to deliver.
The contest rules are applied to the poem and some sage advice as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Aussie
A pity your illustration was blurred. Jesus said"if a man ask for your singlet, give him your coat also." Greed is rampant in the world today, as is selfishness. I wish you well in the contest. Aussie.
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A pity your illustration was blurred. Jesus said"if a man ask for your singlet, give him your coat also." Greed is rampant in the world today, as is selfishness. I wish you well in the contest. Aussie.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from ciliverde
These poems with word and syllable requirements would give me fits if I tried to do them. I found myself wanting your poem to start with "A seer says..." rather than ending with "says a seer". Or you should not end line three with a period, but use a comma.
Truly, be happy forever
says a seer.
Two exclamation points is overkill in such a short poem.
Overall, well done, I like the unusual wording of your lines,
Carol
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These poems with word and syllable requirements would give me fits if I tried to do them. I found myself wanting your poem to start with "A seer says..." rather than ending with "says a seer". Or you should not end line three with a period, but use a comma.
Truly, be happy forever
says a seer.
Two exclamation points is overkill in such a short poem.
Overall, well done, I like the unusual wording of your lines,
Carol
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Mystery Contestant;
> You only have 24 syllables....
> It's a good philosophical commentary ,as it straight to the point and very direct.
> Plus if you count all the words in your picture, you have possibly thirty.
>I don't know if I give more for anything it doesn't actually say much to me.
Give what I can means a lot more. This by giving more sons a little vague to me.
>Push all the luck in the contest and take care and have a good one.
Alx
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Cheers, Mystery Contestant;
> You only have 24 syllables....
> It's a good philosophical commentary ,as it straight to the point and very direct.
> Plus if you count all the words in your picture, you have possibly thirty.
>I don't know if I give more for anything it doesn't actually say much to me.
Give what I can means a lot more. This by giving more sons a little vague to me.
>Push all the luck in the contest and take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
