All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "You are ... Are you?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Maustin
"I've got the beads, baby
I know all the naked beaches, baby
and Free Love is all
that matters
YEAH"
Funny work with bright imageries painted. Like the lines above. Congrats.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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"I've got the beads, baby
I know all the naked beaches, baby
and Free Love is all
that matters
YEAH"
Funny work with bright imageries painted. Like the lines above. Congrats.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Maustin!
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Sure thing Visionary...
Comment from Ure Connection
The first half I loved, reminded me of those shadows I saw as I grew up in the sixties. That and a more recent viewing of Austin powers. The second half was over freaky as I pondered on Austin powers still trying to be groovy in 30 years time. Shuddering now.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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The first half I loved, reminded me of those shadows I saw as I grew up in the sixties. That and a more recent viewing of Austin powers. The second half was over freaky as I pondered on Austin powers still trying to be groovy in 30 years time. Shuddering now.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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me too ... fiction though, remember ...
Comment from poesyapprentice
Interesting, spastic, hippie cool! From the notes it sounds like it IS you, lol! Fun work, upbeat. Not bad, not bad! Enjoyed the crazy. Blessing to you! If I would have changed anything it would have been some of the line breaks but that's my own deal not yours. : ) Congrats on the win!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Interesting, spastic, hippie cool! From the notes it sounds like it IS you, lol! Fun work, upbeat. Not bad, not bad! Enjoyed the crazy. Blessing to you! If I would have changed anything it would have been some of the line breaks but that's my own deal not yours. : ) Congrats on the win!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx poesy - not me, but I "got" the vibe ... yes, line breaks I wrestled with a few times - so if you have any suggestions, fire away! thx!
Sharyn
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You were trying to keep the repetitive shape going, eh? The line breaks are tough then because it would mess up the pattern. You did a good job, I just notice silly things like that with my ocd self, lol! If the pattern was more important here then rock on girlie! : )
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nope - no attachment to shape - more just the "sense" and the internal rhyming ... always open to new ideas, trust me!!
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Ok then, if you want the specifics of the few I would have changed since the shape wasn't the issue then let me know and I'll put them up for you. If not, then that's perfectly ok too. Have a blessed day!
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of course I'd love to know my dear! when I find someone who is happy to give REAL feedback I treasure it and carefully consider it!
Comment from c_lucas
Congratulations on your win and thank you for the trip back in time. I was not into flower power and spent years looking for a nude beach in the Arizona Desert.(LOL) Very good job of writing.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Congratulations on your win and thank you for the trip back in time. I was not into flower power and spent years looking for a nude beach in the Arizona Desert.(LOL) Very good job of writing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Charlie!
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If you want an interesting time and an unique, open a nude beach on our desert. The jumping chollas and rattle snakes will make it a memorable experience.
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might just pass on that one Charlie ... though in Australia we have box jellyfish, which gives one cause to pause ...
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I believe your spiders (brown) are more deadly than ours.
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actually our centipedes hurt like hell and we have those a-plenty! and I just found my first brown recluse spider the other day - didn't even know we had them! rare, but all it takes is someone with an allergic reaction and it's NOT a good picture ... of course the Hawaii tourist brochures don't mention such blights in paradise! As for Australia - well, bugs are our middle name - nasty ones too!
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It's your oversize "jumping jacks" that interest me.
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what the heck's a jumping jack???
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Jack = Kangaroo.
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oooooh!! duh!!! I always enjoy the little wallabies closer to the coast ... real (biggie) kangas are further west - my dad collided with one once and totalled his V-dub!
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The same with the Elk here. A full grown elk can total a vehicle.
Comment from sibhus
This is great, what a fun way to lookat the ravaages of age ha, ha. Didn't we all think we were nevr going to age back then and how suprised we ere to wake up one day and realize we just like our parents ha, ha. This is definitely a quality winner.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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This is great, what a fun way to lookat the ravaages of age ha, ha. Didn't we all think we were nevr going to age back then and how suprised we ere to wake up one day and realize we just like our parents ha, ha. This is definitely a quality winner.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx so much my dear!
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Yours is an entertaining take on the 60s. Where I lived, we didn't hear about the 60s until the 70s. By then the free love was over and most of us were married with children. Sometimes, I regret that I missed the essence of the Free Love gang. I enjoyed reading your poem. Curtis
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Yours is an entertaining take on the 60s. Where I lived, we didn't hear about the 60s until the 70s. By then the free love was over and most of us were married with children. Sometimes, I regret that I missed the essence of the Free Love gang. I enjoyed reading your poem. Curtis
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Curtis - actually I missed it all too - but the "vibe" was still there ... thx for your review!
Comment from hari anand
You are ..are you interesting title it prompted me to read this one... Congratulations for you won the contest ..I liked authors note too.....
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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You are ..are you interesting title it prompted me to read this one... Congratulations for you won the contest ..I liked authors note too.....
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Mba!
Comment from MizKat
visionary1234 - Your poem is darling and fun to read. I like that part of was written when you were younger and the other part 45 years later. Great job, my friend. Kat
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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visionary1234 - Your poem is darling and fun to read. I like that part of was written when you were younger and the other part 45 years later. Great job, my friend. Kat
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Miz K!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved it. I was just a couple years younger than the hippie movement but I had older siblings. I loved the flash back and nostalgia. I put on my big girl pants and muddled through the cuss words. LOL. Great read.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I loved it. I was just a couple years younger than the hippie movement but I had older siblings. I loved the flash back and nostalgia. I put on my big girl pants and muddled through the cuss words. LOL. Great read.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I was too, actually - but the vibe was all there ... thx so much my dear - glad your big girl pants still fit!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes I liked this my friend it reads very well great descriptions enclosed and lovely color scheme to add to the theme congratulations on your win I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Yes I liked this my friend it reads very well great descriptions enclosed and lovely color scheme to add to the theme congratulations on your win I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Jill!
