All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Red Pearls"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from cvcopac
Profound writing, approaches hysteria in content and rhythm; It's not a pretty picture but it's one I've seen before. "Red Pearls" of course would metaphor the human connection--love.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Profound writing, approaches hysteria in content and rhythm; It's not a pretty picture but it's one I've seen before. "Red Pearls" of course would metaphor the human connection--love.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thank you so much for reviewing and contemplating!
Comment from sunnilicious
So your red pearls carries the hope diamond curse too. I'm sorry to have just stumbled on author notes. Really. That is so sad.
Your poem is brillant with true crazed emotions. Excellent work.
Peace be with you always
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So your red pearls carries the hope diamond curse too. I'm sorry to have just stumbled on author notes. Really. That is so sad.
Your poem is brillant with true crazed emotions. Excellent work.
Peace be with you always
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much my dear!
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Your title drew me in as I wondered where you would go with it. You turned it into a dramatic metaphor which emphasised and outlines the whole scenario.
The poem really does show forth the sadness of this disease and the torment and almost horror at how it manifests itself.
Well written.
Juliette
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Your title drew me in as I wondered where you would go with it. You turned it into a dramatic metaphor which emphasised and outlines the whole scenario.
The poem really does show forth the sadness of this disease and the torment and almost horror at how it manifests itself.
Well written.
Juliette
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much Juliette!
Comment from Eliza M
This is an incredibly profound piece of writing! No-one who reads this can fail to be moved by it.You write this with stunning imagery.I am stunned! I am moved!An almost overwhelmingly powerful piece.
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This is an incredibly profound piece of writing! No-one who reads this can fail to be moved by it.You write this with stunning imagery.I am stunned! I am moved!An almost overwhelmingly powerful piece.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you SO much Eliza! This is a new style and exploration for me, so I'm honored by your review!
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Wow, and I do mean wow! I mean, like WOW!! This is the most powerfully descriptive, passionate and tastefully rendered piece of poetry I've come across here yet! Elegant, stark, beautiful in its ugliness and power! What more can I say. Just... WOW!
BRILLIANT! KEEP GOING..
cheers
js
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Wow, and I do mean wow! I mean, like WOW!! This is the most powerfully descriptive, passionate and tastefully rendered piece of poetry I've come across here yet! Elegant, stark, beautiful in its ugliness and power! What more can I say. Just... WOW!
BRILLIANT! KEEP GOING..
cheers
js
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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So I'm still waiting for someone to cough up a '6' js! joking ... THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR RECOGNIZING my work!!! I am truly honored.
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No more sixes. I certainly woulda given this thing one. But I think it's ''that time or the month'' for reviewers here. All gone, all around, i'm afraid.
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yep - me too dammit!
Comment from tinams
Good grief, such a disturbing, dark take on the subject of dementia Visionary1234. Wonderful vivid descriptions and metaphors. I am left stunned - in a good way :) Tina
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Good grief, such a disturbing, dark take on the subject of dementia Visionary1234. Wonderful vivid descriptions and metaphors. I am left stunned - in a good way :) Tina
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Just so long as it was in a good way Tina - I'm exploring some new forms at the moment, so thank you so much for reading & reviewing!
Comment from gifted$1
I think you captured the horrible reality of what dementia can be. I worked in a nursing home for ten years and spent most of my time with the Alzheimer's patients. Beautiful people, and if a person can just focus on the day to day, I think families can cope alot better. It's tough because the family has to forget the past right along with the person whom they love so much just to have a relationship. Families who learned to laugh despite the pain...they were the ones who survived the worst of times..find something to make you and your mother laugh...all the time. Great write..sad, emotional..just painful.
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I think you captured the horrible reality of what dementia can be. I worked in a nursing home for ten years and spent most of my time with the Alzheimer's patients. Beautiful people, and if a person can just focus on the day to day, I think families can cope alot better. It's tough because the family has to forget the past right along with the person whom they love so much just to have a relationship. Families who learned to laugh despite the pain...they were the ones who survived the worst of times..find something to make you and your mother laugh...all the time. Great write..sad, emotional..just painful.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thx so much my dear! blessings for sharing! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from turtledove
visionary1234, how interesting this poem. I understand now, I see because I read your author notes. So sorry. I know the confusion, questions and forever pain. My dad too...The colours and picture are perfect for the cause. Bless her and you!! turtledove. Until we meet again...
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visionary1234, how interesting this poem. I understand now, I see because I read your author notes. So sorry. I know the confusion, questions and forever pain. My dad too...The colours and picture are perfect for the cause. Bless her and you!! turtledove. Until we meet again...
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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thx so much turtledove ... it seems unfortunately to be almost a rite of passage, but oh so painful!
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rite of passage...is a good way to explain this predicament. I truthfully believe, when one leaves us, as with the mind, they must be already in heaven. all the best, td
Comment from Jane Johnson
Went through this with my mom. It's not fun for those watching, yet there is a child-like innocence about it. Nice flow of words. Lots of meaning behind the words. Nice artwork and imagery. Thanks for sharing.
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Went through this with my mom. It's not fun for those watching, yet there is a child-like innocence about it. Nice flow of words. Lots of meaning behind the words. Nice artwork and imagery. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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and thx for reviewing Jane! best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from BadEducation
Symbolic, sad and yet full of love and care. Losing one's memory but then gaining nightmares. An appalling truth which is hitting us very hard. I like the way you combined one words string for powerful impact.
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Symbolic, sad and yet full of love and care. Losing one's memory but then gaining nightmares. An appalling truth which is hitting us very hard. I like the way you combined one words string for powerful impact.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thx so much for taking the time to review this one my dear - this is a new direction for me!