Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Lafferty's Last Ride"A collection of my poems
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Comment from Maxxx
i loved this epic poem! your rhyme scheme...brilliant, and cant believe you adhered to it all the way through. and your hero...wow, what a brave and noble soul! a patriot til the end, and i felt the tragedy of the end of his life so keenly after going through his battles with him. you portrayed his madness perfectly, and ended his life and your tale with humor. beautiful job!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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i loved this epic poem! your rhyme scheme...brilliant, and cant believe you adhered to it all the way through. and your hero...wow, what a brave and noble soul! a patriot til the end, and i felt the tragedy of the end of his life so keenly after going through his battles with him. you portrayed his madness perfectly, and ended his life and your tale with humor. beautiful job!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Thank you so much for sticking with lafferty all the way through - I have become quite close to him over the last few weeks, although I am happy enough to bid him farewell now - he became rather demanding.
Thanks again.
Steve
Comment from jadapenn
I didn't know whether to laugh or cry. This tommy goes through all those wars and then goes off his head, shooting his servant and his camels only to discover The finest leaf you'll ever taste - the tobacco, that's what counts!
Geez, but this a long poem. You kept my interest all the way. But of course, being South African I had to see what you're saying about Rorke's Drift. lol. Take your six and run, Stevie boy. luv jada
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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I didn't know whether to laugh or cry. This tommy goes through all those wars and then goes off his head, shooting his servant and his camels only to discover The finest leaf you'll ever taste - the tobacco, that's what counts!
Geez, but this a long poem. You kept my interest all the way. But of course, being South African I had to see what you're saying about Rorke's Drift. lol. Take your six and run, Stevie boy. luv jada
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Yeah, the mother of all shaggy dog stories really - I actually started with the joke in mind - it was an old one of my father's from when Players cigarettes used that slogan - and then the rest of the poem built up around it.
Thanks for the kind words and the six - hope I didn't stuff up too much on Rorke's Drift - I'm going to go searching for the Flashman book where he takes part in the Battlee of Isandlwana - don't think I've read that before.
Thanks again.
Steve
Comment from JW
Whew. That was one mighty long poem, or should I actually say tale. Either way, it was very well written and for many of us, educational as well.
Thanks for sharing it. JW
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Whew. That was one mighty long poem, or should I actually say tale. Either way, it was very well written and for many of us, educational as well.
Thanks for sharing it. JW
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review - I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from Cedar
You certainly have written a detailed and informative poem in this one. It's evident that you invested a lot of time and work in this piece and it shows. Most reviewers will bypass a piece this lengthy. It was enjoyable to read. Good luck in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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You certainly have written a detailed and informative poem in this one. It's evident that you invested a lot of time and work in this piece and it shows. Most reviewers will bypass a piece this lengthy. It was enjoyable to read. Good luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Thanks, Bill. I am pleasantly surprised by the number of reviewers awho have ventured in, although I suspect in a few cases they didn't get as far as the terrible joke at the end!
Steve
Comment from Malerie
Wow, you pulled off an incredible task. You managed to tell a story in a poem and the history you noted really pulls the readers into the "history." I don't know a lot about some of the history you used but the piece made me curious. I can tell that a lot of work went into this piece, thanks fro sharing. I enjoyed reading this.
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Wow, you pulled off an incredible task. You managed to tell a story in a poem and the history you noted really pulls the readers into the "history." I don't know a lot about some of the history you used but the piece made me curious. I can tell that a lot of work went into this piece, thanks fro sharing. I enjoyed reading this.
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review - like all history, it gets more fascinating the closer you get to it - when you can actually find out about the real people, that's when my interest is piqued.
Steve