Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Country Justice"A collection of my poems
100 total reviews
Comment from HPicasso
Hello:
Absolutely Hilarious! like my name..j .aja.aj.aj
YOU GIVE THE BEST MEDICINE IN THIS MOMENT. Very well written and clever. How funny you made his character! Great job! congratulation!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Hello:
Absolutely Hilarious! like my name..j .aja.aj.aj
YOU GIVE THE BEST MEDICINE IN THIS MOMENT. Very well written and clever. How funny you made his character! Great job! congratulation!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Hilario
I've just worked out what you meant about your name!
Thanks for the kind words and best wishes.
Steve
Comment from laren
A great and fun poem. Whole story in it.
Written with good pace and a final superlative still keeps me smiling.
Congratulations!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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A great and fun poem. Whole story in it.
Written with good pace and a final superlative still keeps me smiling.
Congratulations!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Laren
The smile is what it's all about, although a win in the contest would have been nice as well!
Steve
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Thank you for sharing,
Laren
Comment from waihekebach
You are a real hard case steveh. You have me in hysterics.
Just how did you manage to fool me to the last stanza.
The best of luck in the contest you silly man.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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You are a real hard case steveh. You have me in hysterics.
Just how did you manage to fool me to the last stanza.
The best of luck in the contest you silly man.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
I did try and think how I could foreshadow the ending - the best I could do was change her from sweet and petite to tall and sweet!
Hanging on to 3rd place by my fingernails at present.
Steve
Comment from robyn corum
Oops! Not a good thing to do when you're trying to get out of a ticket with a judge!! That's a good way to upset the jud-ge-poo! Oh well...
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Oops! Not a good thing to do when you're trying to get out of a ticket with a judge!! That's a good way to upset the jud-ge-poo! Oh well...
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Well he could have been that sort of a judge!
Thanks for reviewing!
Steve
Comment from chita
You have good imagery and a good flow with your poem and rhyme well-you write a compelling story although it is funny-so Roberta was not what the judge thought--well penned write-great job.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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You have good imagery and a good flow with your poem and rhyme well-you write a compelling story although it is funny-so Roberta was not what the judge thought--well penned write-great job.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks for the review and the kind words
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of abcb rhyming
I also like the internal rhymes in the a and c lines
excellent alliteration in growling voice gritty as gravel
and in buxom young wench smartly bowed to the bench
Oh, what a funny funny ending to this amusing story poem - I laughed all the way through and the quatrains are well-composed, so you've fulfilled the contest requirements well!! Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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excellent use of abcb rhyming
I also like the internal rhymes in the a and c lines
excellent alliteration in growling voice gritty as gravel
and in buxom young wench smartly bowed to the bench
Oh, what a funny funny ending to this amusing story poem - I laughed all the way through and the quatrains are well-composed, so you've fulfilled the contest requirements well!! Brooke
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Brooke
I knew I had tough competition in this as I had already seen the 'mechanic' poem which has a great touch...
Thought I would pull out all the stops to see if I could topple it.
Steve
Comment from Cedar
Very well written and very funny. It's evident that you put a great deal of thought into this poem and it shows.
I really liked the last stanza. Great job and good luck in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Very well written and very funny. It's evident that you put a great deal of thought into this poem and it shows.
I really liked the last stanza. Great job and good luck in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Bill.
Looks like a three-way go at the top - I voted for the 'Mechanic', but yours is a very funny piece as well. May the best man win!
Steve
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Excellent and humorous tale. Very well written quatrain poem. The story within it is hilarious. Probably true many times over. Good structure and rhyme. Very enjoyable and well written.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Excellent and humorous tale. Very well written quatrain poem. The story within it is hilarious. Probably true many times over. Good structure and rhyme. Very enjoyable and well written.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Well I am sure the bit about 'exploiting her assets' is quite common - dunno about finding the assets to be artificially acquired!
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Piggies Grandma
What a shock..lol. Your poem is cleverly written and well thought out Steve. I enjoyed reading it and got a good laugh. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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What a shock..lol. Your poem is cleverly written and well thought out Steve. I enjoyed reading it and got a good laugh. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
Oh yes, it all makes perfect sense,
but please don't rush to your defence
-i've seen it all a million times
what some will do to promote their rhymes.
but i'll not stoop to such misdeeds
-just go ahead, and fill your needs.
regards, eph.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Oh yes, it all makes perfect sense,
but please don't rush to your defence
-i've seen it all a million times
what some will do to promote their rhymes.
but i'll not stoop to such misdeeds
-just go ahead, and fill your needs.
regards, eph.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2011
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Not sure what this is about - if I've done something wrong can you let me know?
Steve