Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Cherchez La Femme"A collection of my poems
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a a well structured piece of historical poetry that enriches the reader mentally. The message of the poem is faulty and makes excuses for men's selfishness and foibles. They all wanted to take advantage of weaker women and it boomeranged. cheers
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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This is a a well structured piece of historical poetry that enriches the reader mentally. The message of the poem is faulty and makes excuses for men's selfishness and foibles. They all wanted to take advantage of weaker women and it boomeranged. cheers
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you - hadn't thought of it like that - certainly true in some cases.
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Oh what a wonderful, wonderful piece of writing!
Loved every minute of it...and as one of the 'anointed' 51%
I forgive you your transgressions.
Just one small thing the instrument of death in France was lovingly kown as Madame Guillotine...or was that one step to close...lol
I do wish I had a six!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Oh what a wonderful, wonderful piece of writing!
Loved every minute of it...and as one of the 'anointed' 51%
I forgive you your transgressions.
Just one small thing the instrument of death in France was lovingly kown as Madame Guillotine...or was that one step to close...lol
I do wish I had a six!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - and for the pick up on Madame Guillotine - I knew I would get pinged for something! As an ex French teacher I should have known better!
As for awarding a six - maybe there's a sequel in the works - actually I've just started thinking about a series of 'Brief Histories'... britain, America, Eng Lit, TV, The Bible ...
Got a bit of research to do first so I don't make too many more boo-boos!
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lol..just thought you might have been pulling your punch...after giving such a character assasination of women already...Can't wait for the sequals.L.x
Comment from Thesis
I don't know how anyone could be put off by your poem. It's alomost all true...and shows the creativity and resourcefulness of the fairer sex.
I enjoyed the walk through history and you pointing out the role influential women played. - Thesis
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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I don't know how anyone could be put off by your poem. It's alomost all true...and shows the creativity and resourcefulness of the fairer sex.
I enjoyed the walk through history and you pointing out the role influential women played. - Thesis
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for your kind words - it was fun to write and there may be more in the wind.
Comment from ameen786
Starting with the very first stanza all the way to the last you got this reader hooked, this is a masterpiece of history-poetry, and I know this was not easy, composing this crafty piece and rhyming with perfect words, superb! My only regret is that I don't have a six left, your poem is a perfect ten. Thanks for sharing, great job.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Starting with the very first stanza all the way to the last you got this reader hooked, this is a masterpiece of history-poetry, and I know this was not easy, composing this crafty piece and rhyming with perfect words, superb! My only regret is that I don't have a six left, your poem is a perfect ten. Thanks for sharing, great job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you! better save a six for next time - I'm planning a series - Brief History of Britain, of Eng Literature, of the Movies.....
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Try posting in early part of the week, with your talent I am sure you'll get a bunch of sixes, thanks.
Comment from shy1250
A masterful work, almost epic in its mass of history, but hey, weren't all these works written by men? just a thought.. YOur rhyme, meter, word usage all excellent, and I love the whimsical tone with which it's writ. Nary a typo, nothing to correct or suggest--good job! later and God bless, shy, notably prejudiced towards more feminist works
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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A masterful work, almost epic in its mass of history, but hey, weren't all these works written by men? just a thought.. YOur rhyme, meter, word usage all excellent, and I love the whimsical tone with which it's writ. Nary a typo, nothing to correct or suggest--good job! later and God bless, shy, notably prejudiced towards more feminist works
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thank you - I will get back to the original idea of partners - Batman & Robin, Lone Ranger & Tonto ...
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the men and their evil sidekicks, i think you left out the pain lucy caused desi
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about the men and their evil sidekicks, i think you left out the pain lucy caused desi
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the review.
Lucy and desi might sneak into my 'Brief History of TV' if and when I am inspired to write it!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Cherchex la Femme' is a delightfully written and entertaining piece. While this poet's thoughts on the stronger and sweeter sex may well land him in trouble, he will no doubt learn a lesson on trying to mix it with the best of them! It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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'Cherchex la Femme' is a delightfully written and entertaining piece. While this poet's thoughts on the stronger and sweeter sex may well land him in trouble, he will no doubt learn a lesson on trying to mix it with the best of them! It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2011
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thanks for the kind words, Duchess. Would you be up for a series of 'Brief Histories'? British History, The Bible, Eng Lit, the Movies.....
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kiwisteveh, you're welcome. There's nothing like a challenge. My series would be a brief history of famous Australian writers and poets..... Let me know what you think?
the Duchess
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As a kiwi that would be more than a challenge for me! I'd lean more towards a brief history of the Melbourne Cup! At least I could sneak a few NZ horses into that!
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Kiwi, you're horses do FAR to well over here!
the Duchess
Comment from Distracted23
This was very clever! You obviously know your history. What a fun read. Well done. I'm sure you didn't offend too many of us. :) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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This was very clever! You obviously know your history. What a fun read. Well done. I'm sure you didn't offend too many of us. :) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from Aski
Your first stanza is an eye opener to common perception of "behind every great man there is a great woman". So the reader is lead on to witness the bewitching power of woman. I can see why the apology is given in the author's note. Also the recognition of "creative" history: Louis 16th had an arranged marriage for political purposes. It was not him going looking for Marie Antoinette. I do love the last line of your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Your first stanza is an eye opener to common perception of "behind every great man there is a great woman". So the reader is lead on to witness the bewitching power of woman. I can see why the apology is given in the author's note. Also the recognition of "creative" history: Louis 16th had an arranged marriage for political purposes. It was not him going looking for Marie Antoinette. I do love the last line of your poem.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Yes, I took some liberties with historical fact to ensure I got a good range of bewitching women - poor old Marie has always had a bum deal out of popular legend.
Comment from The Stranger
great poem, as the woman driver said to the cop, "Ive never had an accident in my car officer, but Ive seen literally hundreds whenever Im out driving...."
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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great poem, as the woman driver said to the cop, "Ive never had an accident in my car officer, but Ive seen literally hundreds whenever Im out driving...."
Comment Written 25-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2011
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Thank you - your misogyny may be greater than mine!