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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Harley meets Simba and Leo"...musings on the pets I've had
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Another enjoyable story about Harley and his new life. Oh the fun they will have when they have worked out the pecking order!!!Enjoyable piece. Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Another enjoyable story about Harley and his new life. Oh the fun they will have when they have worked out the pecking order!!!Enjoyable piece. Debbie
Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Thank you so much for reading and the generous review. Harley and Leo have a very passive-aggressive relationship, and it is important to note that neither Simba or Leo have any front claws! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. ~patty~
Comment from dportwood
Mustangpatty,
This story is written well, not being encumbered with spag errors. Your description of the puppy's first meeting with the cats was well done. Good job.
Duane
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Mustangpatty,
This story is written well, not being encumbered with spag errors. Your description of the puppy's first meeting with the cats was well done. Good job.
Duane
Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your kind words. ~patty~
Comment from Jonez08
Hi Patty, I enjoy these guys, it's like stepping outside of our world and entering their fantasy world. This one is sweet and can't say I blame Harley for wanting the soft cuddle.
and he luxuriously stretched his front paws in front of him and arched his back in a giant curve. The stub of his tail began to wag because it felt so good to be free!
--I felt his stretch..lol
Cassandra
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Hi Patty, I enjoy these guys, it's like stepping outside of our world and entering their fantasy world. This one is sweet and can't say I blame Harley for wanting the soft cuddle.
and he luxuriously stretched his front paws in front of him and arched his back in a giant curve. The stub of his tail began to wag because it felt so good to be free!
--I felt his stretch..lol
Cassandra
Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. I'm glad you are enjoying the antics of 'the gang.' Happy New Year! ~patty~
Comment from markk
Cute and what a great description you've written -- so much imagery here that I can picture every part of your adventure with your new puppy. well done!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Cute and what a great description you've written -- so much imagery here that I can picture every part of your adventure with your new puppy. well done!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. Your kind words brought a smile to my face. Writing Harley's POV is a struggle because I want his 'voice' to be unique - and not anything like Simba and Leos' voices. I appreciate your remarks. ~patty~
Comment from koneart
Again, a fun read. I didn't find any errors or was I enjoying the story too much to notice. Anyway there was nothing major. I like Harley's POV. His timidness at first and then his pure-speed aggression. The cats will teach him the rules, which, of course, he will break. grin. Kone
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Again, a fun read. I didn't find any errors or was I enjoying the story too much to notice. Anyway there was nothing major. I like Harley's POV. His timidness at first and then his pure-speed aggression. The cats will teach him the rules, which, of course, he will break. grin. Kone
Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I appreciate your comment about Harley's POV - I had a great deal of trouble finding his 'voice.' It is important to me that he sound like the feisty little dog he is - and not just another one of my pets - or worse - sound like the cats! I appreciate your input. HAPPY NEW YEAR! ~patty~
Comment from c_lucas
Harley is about to learn a lesson in life. Dogs and cats don't mix. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Harley is about to learn a lesson in life. Dogs and cats don't mix. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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Thank you SO much for reading and the generous review. I appreciate you catching that spag - I will fix directly. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. ~patty~
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You're welcome, Patty. Charlie
Comment from The Stranger
firm and gripping plot, blending well with descriptive texts, well proportoined paragraphs add to an even flow that runs through the story, which is a nice little tale to be able to follow
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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firm and gripping plot, blending well with descriptive texts, well proportoined paragraphs add to an even flow that runs through the story, which is a nice little tale to be able to follow
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2011
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THANK YOU so much for reading and the generous review. I've been struggling with this story for a few days now - finding Harley's 'voice' is tricky. I don't want him to sound like the cats, and I want him to come across as the feisty little dog he is - your comments make me feel like I'm on the right track - THANK YOU! ~patty~