Quaterns: Observations on Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Great Bursts of Golden Flowers Grow"Assorted Reflections
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Comment from sara-beth
This is a lovely poem about that most under rated of flowers (?).....you describe their wild beauty perfectly; untamed, growing wherever soil lets them flourish. Great job.
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This is a lovely poem about that most under rated of flowers (?).....you describe their wild beauty perfectly; untamed, growing wherever soil lets them flourish. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, sara-beth - so glad you appreciate my friends, the dandelions, too :-) Brooke
Comment from joan marie
There is nothing more lovely than a field of wildflowers in all their splendid colors and aromas. Terrific entry, good luck. joan marie
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There is nothing more lovely than a field of wildflowers in all their splendid colors and aromas. Terrific entry, good luck. joan marie
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Joan Marie - glad you love wildflowers too :-) Brooke
Comment from tati
Dear Brooke, to day you invite me to play with /g/ sound, /g/ alliterations and /g/ metaphor: a gift of glory, gracious soil, great burst of golden flowers grow ... As always, your word collection is astonishing and the rhyme is constant and musical. Thank you for this beautiful morning enlightenment. (tati, Nov. 19, 2009)
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Dear Brooke, to day you invite me to play with /g/ sound, /g/ alliterations and /g/ metaphor: a gift of glory, gracious soil, great burst of golden flowers grow ... As always, your word collection is astonishing and the rhyme is constant and musical. Thank you for this beautiful morning enlightenment. (tati, Nov. 19, 2009)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, Tati - glad you like the G alliterations and the musicality of this ode to dandelions - I so appreciate your kind review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke.
tati
Comment from Amicus
On common weeds
you well bestow
nobility
with words that flow
so fluidly.
Come here come spring,
bring your best hoe,
just dig them up
they're yours to go
'cause when your gone,
some more will grow! :>)
My dear weed loving friend, you have written a lovely ode in modified quatrain form that certainly points up the fleeting beauty of these lawn strangling little plants...of course, you don't mention the day after the bloom and seed blow when those twisted ugly stalks stick up all over the yard...but that's another poet's poem, I guess.:>) Your romantic vision is pleasant ... true to form, you have championed with wit and skill the underdog once again.
Good luck in the competition. Good poem.
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On common weeds
you well bestow
nobility
with words that flow
so fluidly.
Come here come spring,
bring your best hoe,
just dig them up
they're yours to go
'cause when your gone,
some more will grow! :>)
My dear weed loving friend, you have written a lovely ode in modified quatrain form that certainly points up the fleeting beauty of these lawn strangling little plants...of course, you don't mention the day after the bloom and seed blow when those twisted ugly stalks stick up all over the yard...but that's another poet's poem, I guess.:>) Your romantic vision is pleasant ... true to form, you have championed with wit and skill the underdog once again.
Good luck in the competition. Good poem.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Amicus, you sound a bit bitter about those twisted stalks in your grass - breathe deeply and meditate on the yellow beauty and the cute fuzz balls. :-) LOL Thanks, my friend. Brooke
Comment from words
Oh, how charming!
I love how you use this form so effectively. The repeating lines are like music from your pen.
Especially loved:Some choose the blossoms man has tamed,
but I among the meadows go
to seek the dandelions' flames
where bursts of golden flowers grow.
You manage to use these restrictive forms and not have them seemed forced...a true talent...you also lend them such a modern contemporary voice.
Love it.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Oh, how charming!
I love how you use this form so effectively. The repeating lines are like music from your pen.
Especially loved:Some choose the blossoms man has tamed,
but I among the meadows go
to seek the dandelions' flames
where bursts of golden flowers grow.
You manage to use these restrictive forms and not have them seemed forced...a true talent...you also lend them such a modern contemporary voice.
Love it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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I'm so glad this doesn't sound forced to you - you are most kind! Brooke :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Brooke as I was reading your great quatern poem,
I was hoping you were referring to one of the brightest scenes one sees in so many folks lawn and as you say in fields
I know we finally gave up and let the dandelions have their glory
Gert
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Hi Brooke as I was reading your great quatern poem,
I was hoping you were referring to one of the brightest scenes one sees in so many folks lawn and as you say in fields
I know we finally gave up and let the dandelions have their glory
Gert
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Gert - glad you enjoyed my tribute to dandelions :-) Brooke
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Brooke,
I love these quaterns. You seem to be quite good at writing them. This one was particularly pleasing. I wouldn't alter a thing.
Ray
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Hello Brooke,
I love these quaterns. You seem to be quite good at writing them. This one was particularly pleasing. I wouldn't alter a thing.
Ray
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Ray- I had not written one for quite a while, so I was due :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
This is so cool. When I was a little girl, the school I went to had a flower contest once a year. In the second grade I picked a large bouquet of dandelions and took them to school. The other kids laughed, but guess what, I came in first place!! This is a marvelous poem that brings back a marvelous and fun memory from the past. Beautifully written and just delightful to read too. Great entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
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This is so cool. When I was a little girl, the school I went to had a flower contest once a year. In the second grade I picked a large bouquet of dandelions and took them to school. The other kids laughed, but guess what, I came in first place!! This is a marvelous poem that brings back a marvelous and fun memory from the past. Beautifully written and just delightful to read too. Great entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Valerie - great minds like ours work alike! Brooke :-)
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is an exceptional poem, an ode to the dandelion. I enjoyed it immensely and couldn't find anything to criticize.
It reminds me of the last poem Summertime65 posted. The first stanza of that is:
Neglected lion, golden hair.
It's good to see you over there.
And when your hair has turned to gray
The breeze will blow it all away.
Dave
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Brooke,
This is an exceptional poem, an ode to the dandelion. I enjoyed it immensely and couldn't find anything to criticize.
It reminds me of the last poem Summertime65 posted. The first stanza of that is:
Neglected lion, golden hair.
It's good to see you over there.
And when your hair has turned to gray
The breeze will blow it all away.
Dave
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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I like that - glad to know more poets are writing about my favorite flower :-) Thanks so much, Dave - you're most gracious and generous! Brooke
Comment from percival86jack
Very clever Brooke and I guess a bit of a challenge as well. Your efforts paid off with another great little poem about nature's beauty. Well done again Brooke.
Smiles up to the northwest shining down at ya! xox
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Very clever Brooke and I guess a bit of a challenge as well. Your efforts paid off with another great little poem about nature's beauty. Well done again Brooke.
Smiles up to the northwest shining down at ya! xox
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you, Jack. This is one of my favorite forms and definitely my favorite flower :-) Brooke