The Minute Poem
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Comment from Judian James
Oh, we got another foot today in mid-coast Maine and have no idea where to put it! This is excellet Brooke although I do think I'd change out one of the "each"es in the final verse. excellent I especially loved the middle verse
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Oh, we got another foot today in mid-coast Maine and have no idea where to put it! This is excellet Brooke although I do think I'd change out one of the "each"es in the final verse. excellent I especially loved the middle verse
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Judian, you folks in Maine and Canada make me feel like such a wuss for getting upset over 6 inches. You have no idea how long I spent on rewriting the middle verse when I discovered that also had "each" in it. LOL I like the two eaches together in the other line but knew I couldn't have three of the buggers. Do you realize that when one goes searching through the dictionary for alternative words, there aren't any??? I had to completely redo the middle verse rather than supply some synonym - so I'm glad you like the new verse I came up with :-) Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from LauraKatherine
I love this photo! It actually snowed here yesterday morning, although nothing stuck to the streets or stuck around past eleven a.m. or so. But it was beautiful while it lasted!
I like the idea of art being formed by creation. I especially liked these lines:
an artwork formed
from winter's storm.
a sculpture cast
from wind's cold blast.
I like the repeated "ar" sound: artwork, carving, sparkling, etc. It reminds me of a blast of cold air for some reason.
I liked these rhymes a lot:
cast/blast, drift/gift, free/gallery.
Lovely poem.
Do you have any idea why this particular format is known as a "minute" poem?
Enjoyed this one! Laura
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I love this photo! It actually snowed here yesterday morning, although nothing stuck to the streets or stuck around past eleven a.m. or so. But it was beautiful while it lasted!
I like the idea of art being formed by creation. I especially liked these lines:
an artwork formed
from winter's storm.
a sculpture cast
from wind's cold blast.
I like the repeated "ar" sound: artwork, carving, sparkling, etc. It reminds me of a blast of cold air for some reason.
I liked these rhymes a lot:
cast/blast, drift/gift, free/gallery.
Lovely poem.
Do you have any idea why this particular format is known as a "minute" poem?
Enjoyed this one! Laura
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Laura, I have no blooming idea why it is called that - maybe they take about a minute to read??? That is total speculation. Thank you for noticing the small details I put so much work into like the "ar" sounds. Brooke
Comment from NadineM
Brooke, The imagery here in your poem is vivid and lovely. We have a ton of snow here too. I am not appreciating it though as you are! Haha...
I understand your choice of green to symbolize nature but I would suggest changing the font to black. The green seems distracting to me.
Great nature poem, with a sprinkle of religion and spiritual energy!
Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Brooke, The imagery here in your poem is vivid and lovely. We have a ton of snow here too. I am not appreciating it though as you are! Haha...
I understand your choice of green to symbolize nature but I would suggest changing the font to black. The green seems distracting to me.
Great nature poem, with a sprinkle of religion and spiritual energy!
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Nadine, thanks for your great comments - and I'm not really appreciating it either - the poem is my attempt at self-therapy - act like it's wonderful to talk oneself into it! LOL Brooke :-)
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Positive reinforcement... you're funny! Trying to play tricks with your mind! Well, in the end, you've a lovely poem and the day wasn't a bust because of the weather.........Nadine
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I am so damned sick of the snow!!!! My mantra is - but it's pretty, but it's pretty, but it's pretty LOL
Comment from skye
Perfect. Your description of snow and cold is wonderful, using the form and structure required of this style of poem.
You are talented.... your poems are fun to read. Great artwork.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Perfect. Your description of snow and cold is wonderful, using the form and structure required of this style of poem.
You are talented.... your poems are fun to read. Great artwork.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Skye, thank you for such lovely and encouraging comments! Brooke :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke,
Yes even if the winter is still hanging around .
It's still beautiful to see how you by looking out your window can see the beauty of snow.
Wonderful use of the unstressed and stressed words.
Loved the last quatrain
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Hello Brooke,
Yes even if the winter is still hanging around .
It's still beautiful to see how you by looking out your window can see the beauty of snow.
Wonderful use of the unstressed and stressed words.
Loved the last quatrain
Gert
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Gert, thanks so much for your warm comments - I so appreciate them. Brooke :-)
Comment from Peter@Poole
And my view of your poem is gorgeous, Brooke. You always seem to look on the bright side. This poem is written in the spirit of, 'the best things in life are free', and I agree with you. Peter
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And my view of your poem is gorgeous, Brooke. You always seem to look on the bright side. This poem is written in the spirit of, 'the best things in life are free', and I agree with you. Peter
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Peter, thank you so much for your most generous review and your lovely comments - I truly appreciate this as this poem and I fought with each other for a good part of the afternoon. :-)Brooke
Comment from lkatka
I have never written this particular type of poem. Yours is a good example. The words you have chosen for this poem are artistic and descriptive.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I have never written this particular type of poem. Yours is a good example. The words you have chosen for this poem are artistic and descriptive.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I only starting writing minute poems a few months ago and love them now - thank you, Brooke
Comment from mstad55
The window to the world outside is the framework of moving art. It changes with the hour of the day, and each day moves the season along. As spring becomes summer and summer becomes fall, then along comes the season the most loathsome of all, Winter. The winter blues are all around and me wishes them to be gone. I would rather be rosy red from the sun, than from frigid cold temperatures. Sorry about you snow storm, we had ours last week. 50's on Saturday so hang in there. Mike
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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The window to the world outside is the framework of moving art. It changes with the hour of the day, and each day moves the season along. As spring becomes summer and summer becomes fall, then along comes the season the most loathsome of all, Winter. The winter blues are all around and me wishes them to be gone. I would rather be rosy red from the sun, than from frigid cold temperatures. Sorry about you snow storm, we had ours last week. 50's on Saturday so hang in there. Mike
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Mike, thank you for your lovely comments and encouragement about days to come :-) Brooke
Comment from Gramma Kathy
What a great attitude! I admire your positive outlook on winter's persistence.
This is really beautiful. Yes, freshly fallen snow is lovely; I've lost my appreciation for it this winter, though. :)
Thank you for the reminder to be thankful for all God's gifts.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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What a great attitude! I admire your positive outlook on winter's persistence.
This is really beautiful. Yes, freshly fallen snow is lovely; I've lost my appreciation for it this winter, though. :)
Thank you for the reminder to be thankful for all God's gifts.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I have lost my appreciation too - this is me trying to talk myself into a positive attitude! LOL Thanks, Brooke
Comment from Algernon
Well done. It is impossible to describe Gods beauty in nature.
Yet in the arts one can come close.
Darn it, we have snow on the way too. It will be below zero after a week in the warm high teens.
Spring, where art thou?
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Well done. It is impossible to describe Gods beauty in nature.
Yet in the arts one can come close.
Darn it, we have snow on the way too. It will be below zero after a week in the warm high teens.
Spring, where art thou?
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Well, I don't know where it is, but it ain't here. LOL Thanks, Brooke :-)