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Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Anonymous Poet.
Every rose has it's thorn, yes?
Ah, how many of us pine for those carefree, halcyon days of our youth, 'eh?
When life was still fun, indeed...
...best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Well, Anonymous Poet.
Every rose has it's thorn, yes?
Ah, how many of us pine for those carefree, halcyon days of our youth, 'eh?
When life was still fun, indeed...
...best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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anonymous I shall remain #1... I love that you are reminiscing about youthful halcyon day... Mine... not so much I was into everything. Eventually I realized that discretion was sometimes called for... thanks #1
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U R welcome.
Comment from nancyjam
I love these memories of a young child who faced her world with enthusiasm and no fear.
Wonderful descriptive images that bring the readeer into her world.
Isn't it a time we can look around us and see and feel like her.
What joy! Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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I love these memories of a young child who faced her world with enthusiasm and no fear.
Wonderful descriptive images that bring the readeer into her world.
Isn't it a time we can look around us and see and feel like her.
What joy! Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
Nancy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from Boogienights
This is a great contest entry. I have experienced all of what is talked about in this poem, and your words help me to unlocked memories of those times. I wish you the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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This is a great contest entry. I have experienced all of what is talked about in this poem, and your words help me to unlocked memories of those times. I wish you the best in this contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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thanks for your review and your sage thoughts and observations... yours diana
Comment from nomi338
Poor mom, she desires a pretty little princess and gets instead, a roustabout. A roustabout who loves roaming the countryside, laying waste to all within her path, disdaining all daintiness and refusing a bath.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Poor mom, she desires a pretty little princess and gets instead, a roustabout. A roustabout who loves roaming the countryside, laying waste to all within her path, disdaining all daintiness and refusing a bath.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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You got it... definitely poor Mom and her not such a princess... hee... yours, diana
Comment from harmony13
I enjoyed the read of this poem. The author's words were
joyful, descriptive and creative. The poem flows and
connects well. I found the words of this poem delightful.
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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I enjoyed the read of this poem. The author's words were
joyful, descriptive and creative. The poem flows and
connects well. I found the words of this poem delightful.
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much harmony 13... I completely appreciate your thoughts and words... yours, diana
Comment from susand3022
Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basicly sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember.... LEARNING IS EARNING
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basicly sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember.... LEARNING IS EARNING
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hi susanand3022... I hear you... it can get brutal... I've been here off and on since 2004 and know that people take things personally... I personally want to grow... and there is also a certain diplomacy that may make the pill go down sweeter... I agree kiddo... earning is learning! I look forward to reading your work...
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Dear Author,
I hope this review is in time for the contest, which I wish you luck for if it is. I think your poem is very sweet and a nice reminder of the ease of childhood and the prickliness of growing up. (I just got pricked! lol) The only thing I can think of to suggest to you is to end your 7th line with a comma and start your 8th line with a lower case letter. Other than that it looks good to me. Best of luck, Susan
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You are a gem... thanks for the help
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author your entry for the contest My First Imaginings of the World of to create a character through brand new eyes... let us explore a new world with them..
I liked it why it as nice to read, because, when you said, of how you told us how a little girl is visioning what it would be like if her mom didn't watch over her,
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hello author your entry for the contest My First Imaginings of the World of to create a character through brand new eyes... let us explore a new world with them..
I liked it why it as nice to read, because, when you said, of how you told us how a little girl is visioning what it would be like if her mom didn't watch over her,
Gert
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hey Gert... thanks for your lovely review. yours,
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Smiles you are welcome author. Gert
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
A very good combination of childlike giddiness and real life challenges. However, as you know, sometimes, we will not be spared the thorn. Just check the spacing in a few stanzas, and also, should say either, "the fragranceS are so sweet," or "the fragrance IS so sweet." Just a little singular/plural typo there. Keep up the good writing!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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A very good combination of childlike giddiness and real life challenges. However, as you know, sometimes, we will not be spared the thorn. Just check the spacing in a few stanzas, and also, should say either, "the fragranceS are so sweet," or "the fragrance IS so sweet." Just a little singular/plural typo there. Keep up the good writing!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hey Marc... thanks for your helpful and sage review. yours,
Comment from meeshu
You have created some great images here, and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive, would it be great to be six again, just for one summer day..
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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You have created some great images here, and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive, would it be great to be six again, just for one summer day..
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much for your sage review. yours, diana
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a sweet and charming allegory of a moment in the life of a child - though a bit uneven in rhyming rhythm in just a couple of spots, it does not detract from the charm of the write and is easily corrected by reading the work aloud a couple of times - fully compliant with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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In my opinion, a sweet and charming allegory of a moment in the life of a child - though a bit uneven in rhyming rhythm in just a couple of spots, it does not detract from the charm of the write and is easily corrected by reading the work aloud a couple of times - fully compliant with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hey thanks so much eve... I completely appreciate your review. yours
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You are very welcome indeed - an endearing write, to be sure...Eve
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Your comments are not appearing here - just to clarify my earlier response, for example ? I mentioned a couple of spots, so, with your permission:
2nd line - I would delete the word "brand,"
4th line - instead of "soaking up" - perhaps one word only instead of two, to smooth the rhythm more, such as, "gulping," "gobbling" or "drinking," still words a child would understand,
10th line - instead of "optimistic," for this superb child's write, perhaps using, "believing that I'd stay clean," which again, may smooth the line, in addition to being more understandable to a child's mind,
12th line - "Mom stayed inside with her dreams"
Please do not be offended - these are suggestions only, which are as easily ignored as not...Eve
