The Secret of Happiness!
A 15 Word Poem; Give, but expect nothing in return132 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your poem. It works well. I like the way it flows and it offers good advice. Thanks for sharing this great piece and have yourself a really great day
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I enjoyed your poem. It works well. I like the way it flows and it offers good advice. Thanks for sharing this great piece and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from kahpot
Excellent you have used the nominated words very well in this well thought out short poem, very well written with a strong message, my best wishes for your competition****kahpot
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Excellent you have used the nominated words very well in this well thought out short poem, very well written with a strong message, my best wishes for your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Swampfox1
There are all manner of contests, not its 15 word and that is better than six word. But then there is a syllables. Wow! I find the picture sort of conflicts, not exactly the picture but the writing on the photo is a big distraction. I like the poem, it carries familiar words from proverbs I've heard. It carries a good message. Good luck in the contest
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There are all manner of contests, not its 15 word and that is better than six word. But then there is a syllables. Wow! I find the picture sort of conflicts, not exactly the picture but the writing on the photo is a big distraction. I like the poem, it carries familiar words from proverbs I've heard. It carries a good message. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Wabigoon
This is a fine poem. If it were this simple then I think your poem would be all we need. I "give" in a certain way and never feel it is acknowledged. That's okay, I will continue to give. I can "afford" to. Some can't. It probably kills some and yet I do not see that acknowledged.
It think you use too many words here -- that may be a part of the requirement.
Give always
Expect nothing
be forever.
Says a seer!
There is my compressed version of your message, one I try to adhere to.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
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This is a fine poem. If it were this simple then I think your poem would be all we need. I "give" in a certain way and never feel it is acknowledged. That's okay, I will continue to give. I can "afford" to. Some can't. It probably kills some and yet I do not see that acknowledged.
It think you use too many words here -- that may be a part of the requirement.
Give always
Expect nothing
be forever.
Says a seer!
There is my compressed version of your message, one I try to adhere to.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from A Fractal Heart
What a simple and beautiful poem, well done! I agree with the sentiment that you put forth here, true happiness comes from a marriage between being totally content with what we have and a willingness to give it away to anyone in need out of kindness.
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What a simple and beautiful poem, well done! I agree with the sentiment that you put forth here, true happiness comes from a marriage between being totally content with what we have and a willingness to give it away to anyone in need out of kindness.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifteen-word poem, The Secret of Happiness, presented in four lines, reminds us that giving is good and so much better when it's never thought to be returned in kind.
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This fifteen-word poem, The Secret of Happiness, presented in four lines, reminds us that giving is good and so much better when it's never thought to be returned in kind.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a beautiful message in those 15 words -- don't actually even need a seer if one were just to try it for a few days! :) ;) A wonderful entry for the contest!
Thank you so very much for sharing and good luck! :)
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Such a beautiful message in those 15 words -- don't actually even need a seer if one were just to try it for a few days! :) ;) A wonderful entry for the contest!
Thank you so very much for sharing and good luck! :)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Author
you have given us the most important things to bring happiness to ourselves and others who ever the prophet who said what you said in your entry, was right.
Gert
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Hello Author
you have given us the most important things to bring happiness to ourselves and others who ever the prophet who said what you said in your entry, was right.
Gert
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from Hitcher
It is true, to give feels good, whether that is the giving of your time to help out another or the giving of material things to those who are in need. I'd say a simple thank you would not be too much to expect though : )) Good luck!
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It is true, to give feels good, whether that is the giving of your time to help out another or the giving of material things to those who are in need. I'd say a simple thank you would not be too much to expect though : )) Good luck!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
Comment from nomi338
Jesus famously said that "there is more happiness in giving than in receiving." While not everyone is blessed with material riches, we are all in possession of a bright and welcoming smile, kind words that upbuild and uplift as well as acts of kindness that do not require material wealth but are more fulfilling than a quarter or dollar which is quickly spent and just as soon forgotten.
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Jesus famously said that "there is more happiness in giving than in receiving." While not everyone is blessed with material riches, we are all in possession of a bright and welcoming smile, kind words that upbuild and uplift as well as acts of kindness that do not require material wealth but are more fulfilling than a quarter or dollar which is quickly spent and just as soon forgotten.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
