All Those Puzzling Pieces
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Comment from JM daSilva
Footprints in the sand that have the possibility of leaving a perennial mark through writing. Is that why we write? Are we seeking a form of immortality? Well, I am. Who knows what will come, but at least I can leave words behind, and your poem will live on. Kudos to you.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Footprints in the sand that have the possibility of leaving a perennial mark through writing. Is that why we write? Are we seeking a form of immortality? Well, I am. Who knows what will come, but at least I can leave words behind, and your poem will live on. Kudos to you.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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thx JM - nice thought, hmm? :)s
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Yeah, let's make sure we are a little immortal.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Sharyn, so this is YOUR life? You don't seem the LEAST bit puzzled to me! You got it more together than I could dream of... I'd never survive the hassles that you. No wonder you're puzzled... you live in a crazy world, where you're one of the few who are sane!
occasionally meeting my old self on the way, << What a great line... sure can relate to THIS!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Sharyn, so this is YOUR life? You don't seem the LEAST bit puzzled to me! You got it more together than I could dream of... I'd never survive the hassles that you. No wonder you're puzzled... you live in a crazy world, where you're one of the few who are sane!
occasionally meeting my old self on the way, << What a great line... sure can relate to THIS!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Bless you Phyllis! are we the ONLY two sane ones in this place??? So glad you enjoyed this one my dear! I never know how my stuff will go down - always a crap shoot! :))Sharyn
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
This poem is a work of sweet forlornness with a beginning, a middle, and an ending which all seem to be ephemeral to the memory of the one who lived this life. I love the artwork! The ending lines that of fate. Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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This poem is a work of sweet forlornness with a beginning, a middle, and an ending which all seem to be ephemeral to the memory of the one who lived this life. I love the artwork! The ending lines that of fate. Great job!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much my dear ... who could resist that picture, hmm? :)Sharyn
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You are welcome, my friend. MN :)
Comment from 9999pool
Finally, one of the greatest wabi-sabi I have read so far. It chose the woman as a wabi-sabi subject and the four pillars of truth in Buddhism: birth, old age, sickness and death.
Although sickness was not mentioned specifically but the 'drying up blood-red biology' said it all about sickness in life.
Life is a puzzling piece as in "Ancora imparo - Still learning". The whole cycle of life as a woman clearly portrays a wisdom in the way of wabi-sabi - imperfection, impermanence and emptiness/void as with all things on Earth including the woman (or man).
The words are diligently chosen to bring out a flavor, the message very witty and even subtle. We are the wabi-sabi and still cocooned like the silkworms metaphor, evolving and changing with the passage of time.
Excellent write and congrats on winning the wabi-sabi, LOL.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
P.S. This is the only six stars I have given for all the wabi-sabi poems I have reviewed so far - if that is any consolation. Writer's block - nope, won't happen to Sharyn for sure - cross my heart!
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Finally, one of the greatest wabi-sabi I have read so far. It chose the woman as a wabi-sabi subject and the four pillars of truth in Buddhism: birth, old age, sickness and death.
Although sickness was not mentioned specifically but the 'drying up blood-red biology' said it all about sickness in life.
Life is a puzzling piece as in "Ancora imparo - Still learning". The whole cycle of life as a woman clearly portrays a wisdom in the way of wabi-sabi - imperfection, impermanence and emptiness/void as with all things on Earth including the woman (or man).
The words are diligently chosen to bring out a flavor, the message very witty and even subtle. We are the wabi-sabi and still cocooned like the silkworms metaphor, evolving and changing with the passage of time.
Excellent write and congrats on winning the wabi-sabi, LOL.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
P.S. This is the only six stars I have given for all the wabi-sabi poems I have reviewed so far - if that is any consolation. Writer's block - nope, won't happen to Sharyn for sure - cross my heart!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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oh you gorgeous thing! Thank you so much ritchie! I think I'm getting the message on wabi sabi, hmm? NOW I may be ready to enter your competition dear! I so appreciate your response AND your lovely six on this one - glad we can talk the same wabi sabi language at last! :))))Sharyn
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In fact most of your write had wabi-sabi content and that is what makes them so appealing. Enter the contest, wow! now we got competition! Only 2 spots left and a cool 90 bucks and save your time earning hard dough here, LOL.
There is now one question: to write ABOUT wabi-sabi or write with the TECHNICALITIES of wabi and sabi. My simple answer is "ABOUT" wabi-sabi for the contest. I put an example of a poem about wabi-sabi and one member said it was not. You go check it out, ha-ha in the thread.
Wabi-sabi my friend and thanks to Jean Lutz (she is the guru who initiated me, ROTFL)!
Cheerio, have a great Sunday.
Ritchie :)))))).
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary , you did an excellent job writing this free verse prose poem about the cycles of your life, a lot of imagery inserted. i enjoyed reading it. i tried to write a wabi sabi--i'm not too sure if i got it right
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, visionary , you did an excellent job writing this free verse prose poem about the cycles of your life, a lot of imagery inserted. i enjoyed reading it. i tried to write a wabi sabi--i'm not too sure if i got it right
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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oh good for you sweets! I haven't done an official one yet - figured I'd better practice first! :)))Sharyn
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
I totally enjoyed your reflective write, the three Ages of Woman. To have to compress it such a small format and still make so much sense, was a feat in it's self. Inquiring mind to come up with this story in Puzzling Pieces. Wasn't puzzled, but I was entertained.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
I totally enjoyed your reflective write, the three Ages of Woman. To have to compress it such a small format and still make so much sense, was a feat in it's self. Inquiring mind to come up with this story in Puzzling Pieces. Wasn't puzzled, but I was entertained.
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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thx so much,James! always glad to entertain you! :)S
Comment from October21
Hi Sharyn!:)
I love all of your memories of being a child.
Puffed pink sunset- beautiful imagery there. Great alliteration too.
Seriously small- good alliteration.
Silent silkworms- good alliteration.
You portray being a child as easy, wonderful, with no worries and a lifetime ahead of you. Which is exactly how it is:) then as the poem progresses, it's almost like one is asking: well, what is the point? We live and then die... Also you mention loosing one's self which is very common too. There are always certain things we do that make us question whether we are the same person we were all those years ago- whether we would have done those things back then. And we DO change- I know that who I am now might be different to who I will be when I grow up.
Thank you for a deep read and for giving me the chance to take so much out of one poem.
PS- if I'm wrong about the meaning, just ignore me, because I always go deeper than necessary...:)
Xx
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Hi Sharyn!:)
I love all of your memories of being a child.
Puffed pink sunset- beautiful imagery there. Great alliteration too.
Seriously small- good alliteration.
Silent silkworms- good alliteration.
You portray being a child as easy, wonderful, with no worries and a lifetime ahead of you. Which is exactly how it is:) then as the poem progresses, it's almost like one is asking: well, what is the point? We live and then die... Also you mention loosing one's self which is very common too. There are always certain things we do that make us question whether we are the same person we were all those years ago- whether we would have done those things back then. And we DO change- I know that who I am now might be different to who I will be when I grow up.
Thank you for a deep read and for giving me the chance to take so much out of one poem.
PS- if I'm wrong about the meaning, just ignore me, because I always go deeper than necessary...:)
Xx
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Aren't you a sweetheart Shenel! And no, you are absolutely correct in the meaning my dear - blessings for such a close and understanding read, and I'm delighted you thought it six-worthy! :)Sharyn
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Oh! That's a surprise! Lol:) you're so welcome Sharyn, and thank you for the read:) xxx
Comment from djsaxon
Sensational write. The reflective grabs all coelesce into a striking coherent whole and a convincing philosophical closer. Love the cross-generational pic that accompanies the piece. Cheers- DJ
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Sensational write. The reflective grabs all coelesce into a striking coherent whole and a convincing philosophical closer. Love the cross-generational pic that accompanies the piece. Cheers- DJ
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thx so much DJ - I'm so delighted that you reviewed and thought my piece was six-worthy! I loved that pic too! :)Sharyn
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a lovely, long and telling tale. I get the feeling that there is a lot about your real life within the words of this poem. Life is a journey for all of us. You were born for a purpose and your footprints will never fade. This is the temporary life.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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This is a lovely, long and telling tale. I get the feeling that there is a lot about your real life within the words of this poem. Life is a journey for all of us. You were born for a purpose and your footprints will never fade. This is the temporary life.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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All my stuff has a strong autobiographical element Nicole - love your words! :)S
Comment from Opal H.
Ah, but Sharyn... there's no end until the end. The whole life is the middle. The beginning is the moment you are born - everything else is middle. Having said that, great representation of your life.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Ah, but Sharyn... there's no end until the end. The whole life is the middle. The beginning is the moment you are born - everything else is middle. Having said that, great representation of your life.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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I like that concept of it all being "middle" Opal! :)S