All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Sugared Stars"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Crystal Carey
Great job Sharyn (I am right right?) I enjoyed your poem, especially the part about chocolate icecream... OK I am a little fanatical about chocolate. Anyways I love how you had a direct story line but left it open enough for others to have their own interpretation!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Great job Sharyn (I am right right?) I enjoyed your poem, especially the part about chocolate icecream... OK I am a little fanatical about chocolate. Anyways I love how you had a direct story line but left it open enough for others to have their own interpretation!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much Crystal - yep - you can tell I'm feeling deprived at the moment, hmm ... of chocolate of course ... :)))S
Comment from Glasstruth
The enjambment is perfect. The structure flows like ice cream from a sugar cone. Very passionate, alive, and beautifully tied to nature with gulls and sea salt from the ocean. Good luck with the contest! Lees
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The enjambment is perfect. The structure flows like ice cream from a sugar cone. Very passionate, alive, and beautifully tied to nature with gulls and sea salt from the ocean. Good luck with the contest! Lees
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much Les - can you tell I'm feeling chocolate deprived at the moment? :))S
Comment from Carole Rosa
Sharyn, This poem is written with emotion and visual imagery, allowing the reader to feel like they are part of the poem. I could almost feel the salty sea mist and am mentally able to see those miserable sea gulls. I hate those birds!!! Your poem is lovely. Carole
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Sharyn, This poem is written with emotion and visual imagery, allowing the reader to feel like they are part of the poem. I could almost feel the salty sea mist and am mentally able to see those miserable sea gulls. I hate those birds!!! Your poem is lovely. Carole
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
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they are weird, aren't they? :))
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Delightful love is declared over the ice cream drips. Such a sweet and
romantic take on the feelings of love. An enjoyable write and certainly
and enjoyable read. Smiles. Robin :)
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Delightful love is declared over the ice cream drips. Such a sweet and
romantic take on the feelings of love. An enjoyable write and certainly
and enjoyable read. Smiles. Robin :)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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smiles back to ya Robin - thx so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from gramalot8
Visionary, thank you so much for sharing this beautiful love poem with us. I loved the picture choice as well. Great vision of the love they shared.
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Visionary, thank you so much for sharing this beautiful love poem with us. I loved the picture choice as well. Great vision of the love they shared.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thanks so much grama! :)S
Comment from GarthL
A very creative love poem Sharyn, splashes of alliteration, some internal rhymes, interesting layout, excellent imagery throughout and a great little story wrapped around a chocolate ice cream cone. Most enjoyable read this morning thank you and good luck in the contest. LiveLove, Garth
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A very creative love poem Sharyn, splashes of alliteration, some internal rhymes, interesting layout, excellent imagery throughout and a great little story wrapped around a chocolate ice cream cone. Most enjoyable read this morning thank you and good luck in the contest. LiveLove, Garth
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx Garth! :)S
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Cheers!!!
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Sharyn
This poetry transports the reader to a sweet and tender
moment. I like the way that the words are arranged on
the page. The flow is smooth and is it easy to read.
The attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the message. Thank You for your creation.
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Well Done ~ Sharyn
This poetry transports the reader to a sweet and tender
moment. I like the way that the words are arranged on
the page. The flow is smooth and is it easy to read.
The attached photo is a befitting accent that enhances
the message. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
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thx Ron! :)S
Comment from Matthew M.
I like this sweet cute poem. I think that ice creamed flavored kisses have to be some of the most delicious kind. Not only do you get the sweetness, you also get the cold sensations which could truly be welcomed on a hot summer day.
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I like this sweet cute poem. I think that ice creamed flavored kisses have to be some of the most delicious kind. Not only do you get the sweetness, you also get the cold sensations which could truly be welcomed on a hot summer day.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx Matthew! :)s
Comment from guinea
This is indeed a wonderful poem of love and compassion k.It is quite sweet and caring. Your words flow smoothly and with heart. Shows deep thinking.
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This is indeed a wonderful poem of love and compassion k.It is quite sweet and caring. Your words flow smoothly and with heart. Shows deep thinking.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx guinea! :)S
Comment from prayingpoet
Ahhhhhhhh, sweet summer! Love the words and imagery of sitting on a bench feeling the breezy salt air. A pleasre to read and made me feel young again!
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Ahhhhhhhh, sweet summer! Love the words and imagery of sitting on a bench feeling the breezy salt air. A pleasre to read and made me feel young again!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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thx so much pp! :)S