All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "It's Time"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Rondeno
This is an outstanding poem. A classy evocation of the 1950's jazz scene, it is stylish, very poetic in its feel, and absolutely dripping with passion. Wish I had a six!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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This is an outstanding poem. A classy evocation of the 1950's jazz scene, it is stylish, very poetic in its feel, and absolutely dripping with passion. Wish I had a six!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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but why only a '4' please Rondeno?????
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I was CERTAIN I'd given you a 5. Sorry.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
You have a very nicely done romance poem here. I like the style you used, you started gently and begin to throttle on and on until you peaked in the last verse withAt last, you know,
your eyes meet mine and I expose
the music of my soul
for you and only you
I'll play the dark and folded valleys of your body
and take you soaring over white-capped peaks of fire.' You released the fire finally here.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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You have a very nicely done romance poem here. I like the style you used, you started gently and begin to throttle on and on until you peaked in the last verse withAt last, you know,
your eyes meet mine and I expose
the music of my soul
for you and only you
I'll play the dark and folded valleys of your body
and take you soaring over white-capped peaks of fire.' You released the fire finally here.
ola thomas
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Ola!
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. Thanks for sharing a fantastic story poem here. I can hear the melody of the sax through your choice of words and feel the adrenaline course interrupted by the not yet, not yet. Gives a good feeling as the adrenaline builds up like water up against a damn waiting to just explode. Good luck and cheers.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Hello. Thanks for sharing a fantastic story poem here. I can hear the melody of the sax through your choice of words and feel the adrenaline course interrupted by the not yet, not yet. Gives a good feeling as the adrenaline builds up like water up against a damn waiting to just explode. Good luck and cheers.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much Ben!
Comment from Galactia
This is an excellent free verse poem expressing love. I liked that there was a lot of metaphores used to express your ideas to the reader.
great job and GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
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This is an excellent free verse poem expressing love. I liked that there was a lot of metaphores used to express your ideas to the reader.
great job and GL in the contest
Regards
Tia
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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thx so much Tia!
Comment from Treischel
Wow! That was hot! A wonderful entry into the passionate love contest and you wrote it in black and white. Teasing! Sultry! Sensual! This is written in fabulous sculpted free verse that is expertly chiseled to pause, then flow as the poet guides the action! Beautiful!
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Wow! That was hot! A wonderful entry into the passionate love contest and you wrote it in black and white. Teasing! Sultry! Sensual! This is written in fabulous sculpted free verse that is expertly chiseled to pause, then flow as the poet guides the action! Beautiful!
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2012
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Thx Treischel! A fun write today!