Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

This is a terrific stanze that really shows contrasting moods.
and where I saw before
a beach of empty skulls
screaming gulls and madness,
now I see a strand of warm
golds, high skies, treasured birds
of white grace, and blues
so deep and luscious pleasured
I can plunge my hands in, never measured

Thanks for sharing.
T2

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

thx T2! :) Sharyn

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Very nice. A poem about awakening, finding that life is a wonderful thing and to rejoice in it and be happy. I see your poem was well recieved and a winner! Congratulations.
Nancy

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Nancy! :) Sharyn

Comment from Amandastory

Exceptional

I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked the rhythm and the way it flowed throughout. The picture also fits the poem very well. I also like the contrast from despair to happiness, how you describe it gradually.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

Bless you for reading, reviewing and "getting" this piece Amanda! and a special double thank you for your wonderful '6'! That's so encouraging, and so appreciated.
Best wishes
Sharyn

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Uplifting poetry indeed, that reminds me of the beach in California I used to live close by, That's a lovely expressed story poem.I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

Thank you so much Lakeport! So glad you enjoyed! :) Sharyn

reply by lakeport on 25-Nov-2012

your welcome,Hugs! lakeport.

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

It's easy to see why this poem is the Contest Winner - A beautiful Freeverse, that started sad and slow, but built as it came to a positive outcome. Nice use of occasional rhyme with pleasured / measured and internal rhyme of feel and heal. Good flow throughout. Rose

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

Thx Rose!

Comment from yonashalom

Excellent

Wow, this is awesome my friend. I love the way this reads. I love the story line, the thought process you take the reader through here. I can visualize so many pictures here. Your words are so carefully chosen and the sounds in the words connect. Excellent! I see why you won! :) Great job. ~Yona

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

Thx so much Yona! :) Sharn

Comment from wordsareus

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. At first I wasn't sure that it was going to be uplifting, but it definitely was by the end. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

That was the aim of the game, words! :) Sharyn

Comment from sgalletti

Exceptional

I'm stingy with my sixes and rarely give one to a blind poem. But, this is absolutely stunning. Gorgeous free verse with vivid concrete imagery, perfect choices of length of lines, composition and juxtaposition. You show, don't tell. Very uplifting indeed. Just beautiful. Best of luck in this contest. Sue

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

aah - there you are - thank you so much Sue - and a double, triple, quadraple, quintuple, sextuple thank you for your magic '6'! :) Sharyn (I won this one! :)

Comment from doris1022

Excellent

Flows like the hum of the waves and the song of nature. beautiful write and very inapirational. uplifting is the key word. Have a creative lords day.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

thx so much Doris! :) Sharyn

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi the author,

Interesting journey through despair to rejoicing in verse. It has a good rhythm and conveys your thoughts well.

Patrick

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012

thx so much Patrick - I won with this one, so I'm delighted! :) Sharyn