Curtain Call
So happy to be stuck on you.82 total reviews
Comment from cvcopac
Mastery, is a good handle for you, Bob. The master of surprise. You caught me again. As you wrote the MO on Arnie I thought you were describing me in my working days, except for the rug; the 6th paragraph summed it up pretty good. He's even got the nickname for his wife, a must. The seduction by Lady Geneva was so good that the reader can't sort fantasy from fact. We wake up to find him in bed with his wife, Maureen, finishing the long anticipated love act.
Exceptional descriptive writing and a brilliant story. Kenny
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
Mastery, is a good handle for you, Bob. The master of surprise. You caught me again. As you wrote the MO on Arnie I thought you were describing me in my working days, except for the rug; the 6th paragraph summed it up pretty good. He's even got the nickname for his wife, a must. The seduction by Lady Geneva was so good that the reader can't sort fantasy from fact. We wake up to find him in bed with his wife, Maureen, finishing the long anticipated love act.
Exceptional descriptive writing and a brilliant story. Kenny
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Well, thanks a bunch, Kenny. Honestly, coming from you, I am elated as I consider you a fine writer for sure. And thanks for the extra stars...what a guy! Bob
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Thanks, Bob, but I woudn't leave a measurment on the wall that'd reach your shoulders. Lookin' forward to some more.
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Not so, but anyhoo...You will be waiting a bit...I am a slow writer...well, I should say I do a lot of editing before I post...LOL...Thanks again, Kenny. Bob
Comment from humpwhistle
Very nice job, Bob. A little fantasy role-playing can
go a long way to spice up a neglected love life.
I wish you the best with the voters. This should do well.
Peace, Lee
two kid(s') activities
'...backed his wrecker into it(s) parking slot at work and headed out.'--Bob I know what you're saying, but it actually sounds like he's backing in and heading out at the same time.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
Very nice job, Bob. A little fantasy role-playing can
go a long way to spice up a neglected love life.
I wish you the best with the voters. This should do well.
Peace, Lee
two kid(s') activities
'...backed his wrecker into it(s) parking slot at work and headed out.'--Bob I know what you're saying, but it actually sounds like he's backing in and heading out at the same time.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hi, Lee. Hey, thanks for the heads up on the "wrecker-parking" bit. So easy to do things like that isn't it? I appreciate your fine review and yur time. Bob
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Bob, I always look forward to your short stories. Lee
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written and fooled the reader until the end. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. A very good job of writing.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
This is very well written and fooled the reader until the end. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. A very good job of writing.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much, Charlie. I don't think I fooled many readers...some have a keen sense for stuff like this, I guess. LOL...I apprecitae your time and review, Charlie as always. Bob
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Your are welcome, Bob. Charlie
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Fine read, fine craft. You write with such a power built in your piece that is capable to grip a read to read on till end. I like the smoothness and free flow dialogue scheme. Fine post.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
Fine read, fine craft. You write with such a power built in your piece that is capable to grip a read to read on till end. I like the smoothness and free flow dialogue scheme. Fine post.
ola thomas
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Well thanks so much, Ola. I appreciate your time and your encouraging words. Bob (Mastery)
Comment from EMB
Well, this was certainly a hot piece of writing. I really did think he was getting ready to cheat on his wife, but you fooled me good with this. Role-playing is a fun as a couple's imagination. (I'm thinking Santa and Mrs. Clause now. No, wait. Santa cheating on Mrs. Clause with a hot little elf. LOL)
This was great, Bob. I really enjoyed it.
Note:
... lot like fresh road kill.(Now that was just wrong! LOL)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
Well, this was certainly a hot piece of writing. I really did think he was getting ready to cheat on his wife, but you fooled me good with this. Role-playing is a fun as a couple's imagination. (I'm thinking Santa and Mrs. Clause now. No, wait. Santa cheating on Mrs. Clause with a hot little elf. LOL)
This was great, Bob. I really enjoyed it.
Note:
... lot like fresh road kill.(Now that was just wrong! LOL)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Oooops! Sorry, Ed. LOL...I didn't have your picture in front of me when I wrote this. Yikes! I'm glad you still gave me high marks even if I did that. I'm glad you liked it. Bob
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Well that was a good write ,but I guessed the ending half way. I'm not saying it wasn't a success, because it kept my interest right to the end. A well written story needs no correction. Mary
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
Well that was a good write ,but I guessed the ending half way. I'm not saying it wasn't a success, because it kept my interest right to the end. A well written story needs no correction. Mary
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hi, Mary! I am so elated that a writer of your caliber liked my story. I thank you sincerely for your time and especially the six stars. Bless you. X0 Bob
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mastery, you did a great job writing this story about the man and wife who spiced up their life by making time for each other. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
this is very well written, mastery, you did a great job writing this story about the man and wife who spiced up their life by making time for each other. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hi, Pam! Thank you for your time and excellent remarks. You are very encouraging. Bob
Comment from Larissa B
hi, Bob, this i have to say, is more than an explosive come back! no doubt you will win ... whatever contest this is ! lol!! yep -- & i think i'll follow your advice, too
thanks for this entertaining read.
blaze
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
hi, Bob, this i have to say, is more than an explosive come back! no doubt you will win ... whatever contest this is ! lol!! yep -- & i think i'll follow your advice, too
thanks for this entertaining read.
blaze
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Well, thank you,Blaze! What advice are you speaking of? Sory. You mean the Elmore Leonard ten rules of writing? A belated Happy Birthday btw. You are such a sweet person. Bob
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NO, the one in your story... about making time for each other as couples. This story rings true for all married couples out there whose love life gets buried in the shuffle of everything unsexy!lol!!
Thanks & I'm happy to read you again.
blaze
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Aaah. Right. Thanks again, Blaze. Bob
Comment from TammyGail
Damn Bob this was one hell of a read - your imagery made me take a second look and the story - like always you are simply amazing with your word weaving - pulling the reader into the story - thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest - I'll be checking the booths -
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
Damn Bob this was one hell of a read - your imagery made me take a second look and the story - like always you are simply amazing with your word weaving - pulling the reader into the story - thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest - I'll be checking the booths -
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hi, Tammy. Thanks so much for the encouraging words and the six stars. What a gal. I appreciate all that you do in support of my writing. Unfortunately, fans will not get to vote on this one....it's a committee deal so I don't hold much anxiety about winning. Lots of good stuff out there. Thanks again...Bob
Comment from Sasha
This is absolutely marvelous. Superbly written with strong sensual imagery that was topped off by the realization that he was with his wife. That is the proverbial icing on the cake. I enjoyed this immensely and wish you all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
This is absolutely marvelous. Superbly written with strong sensual imagery that was topped off by the realization that he was with his wife. That is the proverbial icing on the cake. I enjoyed this immensely and wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2012
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Hi, Sasha. Wow! Getting a six stars from you is a true achievment in my book...Thanks so much. I am glad you "got it" and took the time to review. Blesings...Bob